Man... you had me worked up for..... well laughter.
I wont lie, my right was slowly going south right from the rip. And then you put this in,"Like a... like a baked potato." Spitfire licked her teeth. "With sour cream and cheddar."
Poor human magic stick, shot down again. As for the sex with "firecrotch", at least it was stated in the beginning that what Twilight and Rainbow had going on was only a "friends with benefits" type deal otherwise I would feel sorry for my favorite pony.
Then, "Books?" Who else is THAT innocent enough to get lost in a friendly banter between friends.... of course it's Twilight.
But what really got me the most, "In the name of Blueblood's marehood what is that?!" OMFG, I woke up my roommates laughing soo hard at that.
By far, one of the funniest stories I've ever read coming from this site. Love what you are doing here
Sergeant Nanomight had gotten lost in the bathrooms unfortunately, and was not able to join them. And, despite the smacking noise they heard, he insisted that he was simply trying to find the exit. So they shuddered and moved on.
lol!
okay, the story (if you can call it that anymore) was ok but it seemed like you had a ounce of coherency before and now your just throwing random jokes and mindfucks at us left and right. It's funny at times but losing it's value. Try adding some actual meaning into the story so that when the random shit happens then it makes the "lul wat?"s more intense. Randomness is fun but it only stays fun if you disrupt some coherency with it. A successful random funny is like high explosives, the more fuel you have, the bigger the "KABOOM!". get da picture? It's why the "...AND THEN THEY ALL FUCKED!" meme is so successful because it's usually thrown out after something touching and close happened for a "WAT?!" or put in to further empathize an oddity or suggestive area, mostly having to do with people who, in all good conscience, aren't suppose to be associated things like that... like a filly or colt or maybe some sweet old granny. ... ... ...And now I have the weirdest urge to write a clopfic involving granny smith just to see how people react. But then... I'm not sure I'd be able to finish the more... um... intense parts. I just tossed in the only character to be left out of clop fiction... into an idea for a clop fiction! I'm going to a special place in hell reserved for people who take away the innocence of fictional children's characters aren't I?
Setup for awesome, decent amount of clop and humor. Imo, still needs more humor. Since this is not a hardcore clop (hardclop?) story, I think more jokes would really get the audience invested. That's what got me to stay after the first chapter. The first few chapters had more funny interactions between chars. I'm assuming these last two were kinda a build up to set the stage for something more awesome to come? Still though, not a bad chapter.
One comment though, the "hoofing me" part is a bit confusing because at first i read it as a fit for "kidding me". You know how they do that in Equestria. I'd have no idea how to fix that though, i just wanted to point it out. I guess you could have it say "A-are you using... your hoof?!" or "Is that...your hoof?!"
Sir, it was an honor reading your work, but I'm afraid I must depart to battle the glowing blue bass beast of badassedry. *Salutes and leans backwards, falling from the railing, kicking off, and barrel-rolling through the air*
641395>>642009 I apprieciate the input But this was my writer's block story, so I don't invest much time into the chapters. I'm surprised this got the attention it did. Makes it a lot harder to do the quick wrap-up that I want to do. I've got other things to work on, and let's be honest, this isn't exactly quality work, nor is it well thought out. Also, if there's one thing I've learned, it's that I can't do comedy
641831 I have got no work done seeing as how I have a dick now. Peeing standing up is the best, I just pretend that there's a building on fire and I'm a helpful giant.
lol trixie is a changeling i think : for a guy or girl ... i dont rightly know ... who says they cant do comedy your doing a fine well job btw best ship ever and baked potato???
Well, I can't clop to this. But since I just came from another of your stories, My Little Marshmallow, I'm gonna poke around anyway and see if there's anything more to it.
777806 It'll be in the next chapter. The thing with this story is, I've lost my balance, so it might be a while before I get it up and running again. It's like a machine that lost one or two cogs. It's still there, but it can't run
I have no idea what is going on, but I like it! Why is this story strangely good? Me saying that means a lot since I don't necessarily like clop fics at all but this one is an exception. Mind = fucked right now.
This chapter sucks. I must be losing my 'mojo' or something. Sorry guys.
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640296 And then they fucked.
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Bass cannon for the win!
Man... you had me worked up for..... well laughter.
I wont lie, my right was slowly going south right from the rip. And then you put this in,"Like a... like a baked potato." Spitfire licked her teeth. "With sour cream and cheddar."
Poor human magic stick, shot down again.
As for the sex with "firecrotch", at least it was stated in the beginning that what Twilight and Rainbow had going on was only a "friends with benefits" type deal otherwise I would feel sorry for my favorite pony.
Then, "Books?" Who else is THAT innocent enough to get lost in a friendly banter between friends.... of course it's Twilight.
But what really got me the most, "In the name of Blueblood's marehood what is that?!" OMFG, I woke up my roommates laughing soo hard at that.
By far, one of the funniest stories I've ever read coming from this site. Love what you are doing here
My gender keeps changing.
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This story is so ridiculously amazing
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FIRE!!!!!!!!
I feel like this story is a dildo you just shoved in my brain... and I like it.
Sergeant Nanomight had gotten lost in the bathrooms unfortunately, and was not able to join them. And, despite the smacking noise they heard, he insisted that he was simply trying to find the exit. So they shuddered and moved on.
lol!
okay, the story (if you can call it that anymore) was ok but it seemed like you had a ounce of coherency before and now your just throwing random jokes and mindfucks at us left and right. It's funny at times but losing it's value. Try adding some actual meaning into the story so that when the random shit happens then it makes the "lul wat?"s more intense. Randomness is fun but it only stays fun if you disrupt some coherency with it. A successful random funny is like high explosives, the more fuel you have, the bigger the "KABOOM!". get da picture? It's why the "...AND THEN THEY ALL FUCKED!" meme is so successful because it's usually thrown out after something touching and close happened for a "WAT?!" or put in to further empathize an oddity or suggestive area, mostly having to do with people who, in all good conscience, aren't suppose to be associated things like that... like a filly or colt or maybe some sweet old granny.
...
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...And now I have the weirdest urge to write a clopfic involving granny smith just to see how people react. But then... I'm not sure I'd be able to finish the more... um... intense parts. I just tossed in the only character to be left out of clop fiction... into an idea for a clop fiction! I'm going to a special place in hell reserved for people who take away the innocence of fictional children's characters aren't I?
Setup for awesome, decent amount of clop and humor. Imo, still needs more humor. Since this is not a hardcore clop (hardclop?) story, I think more jokes would really get the audience invested. That's what got me to stay after the first chapter. The first few chapters had more funny interactions between chars. I'm assuming these last two were kinda a build up to set the stage for something more awesome to come? Still though, not a bad chapter.
One comment though, the "hoofing me" part is a bit confusing because at first i read it as a fit for "kidding me". You know how they do that in Equestria. I'd have no idea how to fix that though, i just wanted to point it out. I guess you could have it say "A-are you using... your hoof?!" or "Is that...your hoof?!"
Also, Baked Potato? LMFAO WTF!
Its funny how i was listening 2 dubsteb when the bass cannon started
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OH YEA!
dat argument.
Of course Lynked has big sexy muscles! He /is/ best Private.
Sir, it was an honor reading your work, but I'm afraid I must depart to battle the glowing blue bass beast of badassedry.
*Salutes and leans backwards, falling from the railing, kicking off, and barrel-rolling through the air*
641395>>642009 I apprieciate the input But this was my writer's block story, so I don't invest much time into the chapters. I'm surprised this got the attention it did. Makes it a lot harder to do the quick wrap-up that I want to do. I've got other things to work on, and let's be honest, this isn't exactly quality work, nor is it well thought out. Also, if there's one thing I've learned, it's that I can't do comedy
640388 Hah, well thank you
643038 Exactly. Private Lynked is every mare's dreams
Sorry guys, no funny pictures today. I'm feeling sick, and am in a much too serious mood to even bother
God I can never eat a blue MnM and a baked potato the same way ever agin... And I'm just fine with that.
643723 Awww your sick...Firecrotch!!! BAHAHHAH
i have red hair does that mean.........(well it's blue right now but you know)
641831
I have got no work done seeing as how I have a dick now. Peeing standing up is the best, I just pretend that there's a building on fire and I'm a helpful giant.
>>Lynked
this is one of the best books I have read so far, twas an intrest. but thou needs to keepith it going my dear, or else molestia will find you....oh by the way, do you like bananas!?google.com/imgres?um=1&hl=en&sa=N&biw=1366&bih=643&tbm=isch&tbnid=uNtb0EpBGgmyQM:&imgrefurl=http://wn.com/Beware,_Princess!&docid=OK1j5PKaRgXu1M&imgurl=http://i.ytimg.com/vi/AdAuAm7bV1k/0.jpg&w=480&h=360&ei=J8XET7GvEPHKsQKfyvDVCQ&zoom=1&iact=hc&vpx=571&vpy=153&dur=462&hovh=194&hovw=259&tx=132&ty=138&sig=118324199069697877317&page=1&tbnh=142&tbnw=191&start=0&ndsp=24&ved=1t:429,r:3,s:0,i:80
I died laughing. R.I.P
Blueblood's marehood?.... He.. She.. It was a hermaphrodite the whole time? I knew it!
Dafuq have I been reading??
Oh well bring on the next chapter!!!!
I have no idea what's going on... AND I LOVE IT!!!
lol trixie is a changeling i think :
for a guy or girl ... i dont rightly know ... who says they cant do comedy your doing a fine well job
btw best ship ever and baked potato???
641121 now dats a orky tank right there boss penty of dakka for them humies
I like this fanfic for its comedy
we also need a vinyl scratch emoticon
Well, I can't clop to this. But since I just came from another of your stories, My Little Marshmallow, I'm gonna poke around anyway and see if there's anything more to it.
.....this.....i....i dont......
*404 ERROR*
*KAIJIN.EXE NOT FOUND*
*REBOOT? Y/N*
777806 It'll be in the next chapter. The thing with this story is, I've lost my balance, so it might be a while before I get it up and running again. It's like a machine that lost one or two cogs. It's still there, but it can't run
Quick! GET THE REPLACEMENT COGS! I DON'T CARE!!! GET THEEMMMMM!!!! XD
I have no idea what is going on, but I like it! Why is this story strangely good? Me saying that means a lot since I don't necessarily like clop fics at all but this one is an exception. Mind = fucked right now.
plz.... iv'e been waiting forever for a new chapter
and no..... i won't get a life
805774 Sorry I'm having some serious problems with this fic though...
It's not death, though, I assure you of that
807364 k thxs
So I guess the new chapter got taken down again?
I have read this from chapter 1 in one sitting.
I have only a vague idea of what is occuring.
I still hold this to be awesome.
So much mindfuck and wuts.
You sir have left me and my penis confused and aroused.....
5/5 moustaches
mfw i started to read this fic mfw i finished the last chapter
But... all M&M's taste the same...
I think I almost peed myself because of how hard I laughed at that.