There were a bunch of grammar and spelling mistakes, which is kind of off-putting. But other than that, this chapter was great!

Hehehe guitarron, I find quite amusing when i see names in spanish
Tip of the hat for how you interweave references to the show, like bolder there :)
Also I enjoy how you put those mission giving it a bit more of Fallout flavour

I rounded a corner, and came face to face with the bandit. Pulling the shotgun out into my hooves, I fired at her face. Unfortunately the short few seconds it took to aim was a few seconds too long, and the bandit was able to knock the barrel away from her face as I fired. Some luck was at least on my side, and the bandit’s rifle got stuck on a chair, preventing her from making a counter attack. Not wasting time, I talked the mare and pulled out my knife. The fucking bandit was quick on the defense, and held back the strike with her fetlock, the blade but an inch from her face.

You keep using the word talked. This apparently does not mean what you think it means. What are you trying to say?

“Thanks.” She said with a smile. “Lately I’ve been getting cravings for my mother’s soup, so she’s been making extra batches for me. Never thought I’d crave rock soup.” I cocked an eyebrow at the last statement, and Cabrette chuckled. “It’s a family thing.”

Good to know one or more of the Pie sisters or one of their foals got to safety. Boulder was a good indication but with so many Earth Ponies running around it could have been coincidence. Combine him with the box and the rock soup and there is no doubt.

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Dyslexia HO! sadly not all may errors get caut be the edditors.