I like it. I can't wait to read more!
Have a like too!

Thank you very much

Please do yourself a favor and change this story's cover art to something that is not your avatar... and preferably to something that isn't cobbled together in pony creator.

As it is, you are just asking for people to downvote this without reading a single word.

Ok....the storyline itself isn't bad, but I do still think the wording could be improved upon. Also, in the authors note it's not a good idea to beg ask for attention like that.

Might be a good idea to find an editor to clean it up a bit. Anyway I agree with the guys, something is up. Thankfully there isn't a dark tag so it couldn't be that bad. For now I'll stick around and see where this goes.

Might want to cut out your OC from the story, and have waited till you had a few chapters to post up. The OC is a distraction and feels unneeded.

The storyline sucks so far. Your OC is so bad that I feel the need to dry heave. Then the Flashlight comes in and I'm done. This story cannot be saved. :[

I have a fanfiction account with the same

That explains why I can't stand to read this.

Any of you get the feeling that this is pretty much a Molestia plot, and that the girls are in on it?

This story is only one chapter in and everyone hates it. Nothing worthy of hate has happened yet. What's going on?

5890021 I agree!

I liked it too. Shame on people. You guys shouldn't vote until you've read the story!

Man I really want to know what happens next.
they maybe walks in the castle and they be picket off one after another?
keep up the good work

I read chapter 2 last night and thought it was good! Keep going!
Ps I know it's not allowed on here but I think u should make this into a play