My name is Winter. I am a griffin brought by a goddess to a world of magic with no goal in mind, but that doesn't stop me from creating enough chaos to make discord blush and having a kid..
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This is technically not a chess verse story because its not featured in the group, you should send it to them.
*Ahem* *ALERT ALERT* BAD GRAMMAR... I REPEAT BAD GRAMMAR!
5727248 I know I should,but I need more work on it.
5727336 Where?! I need to know, in order to not make the same mistake!
5727336 Noooooooo I found it. And it was such a common blunder. Noooooooooooooooo!
5729842 Its good man.
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Just started reading this a couple of hours ago, and I must say it is entertaining me. I have spotted some grammar and punctuation errors but nothing to major. I do recommend you get a proof-reader should you not have one yet as there are some repeating errors such as the use of bin instead of been, or the mixing up of there their they're. If you want me to give you an exact list of grammar changes needed, just ask and I'll get on when I can. Once you get by the grammatical errors this is a good story with plenty of potential; I'm looking forward to reading the next few chapters.
perhaps in your location, it's spelled travelled instead of traveled, but I highly doubt that been is spelled bin there, as a bin is something like a garbage can.