Derpy's normal day

Derpy is about to show us her normal day. Well actually we're just watching her do her normal things. Or we're listening BUT anyways, Here we go!

Chapters (4)

Chapter 1:Morning · 14th Jul 2012 · 534 words
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Chapter 2:Fake afternoon · 14th Jul 2012 · 292 words
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Chapter 3: Actual afternoon · 14th Jul 2012 · 420 words
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Chapter 4: Dinner at sugarcube corner · 14th Jul 2012 · 354 words
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RainbowdashEpicness

RainbowdashEpicness #1 · Jul 13th, 2012 · · · Chapter 1:Morning ·

Pretty good! A bit of grammar mistakes. But all in all its good!
Might I recommend getting an editor? Since you also seem to have no paragraphs.

The Iron Brony

The Iron Brony #2 · Jul 13th, 2012 · · · Chapter 1:Morning ·

did you mean odometer or anemometer? both could work, but the anemometer has actually appeared one the show before.

The Iron Brony

The Iron Brony #3 · Jul 13th, 2012 · · · Chapter 4: Dinner at sugarcube corner ·

how was Rainbow Dash "1000ft" above the muffin if there in a house? Is it even possible for a living creature to move at mach 10 and not pretty much end up like the muffins? Assuming one's body could withstand the pressure in the first place. And it is highly unlikely that she would have room to sonic rainboom, as I have already mentioned, because they are still inside a house.

or is it all dream logic, and now I look dumb?

Marshmallow Swirl

Marshmallow Swirl #4 · Jul 13th, 2012 · · · Chapter 1:Morning ·

Umm, Fluttershy wasn't capitalized, that's basically the mistake, but this was an awesome random story!

Marshmallow Swirl

Marshmallow Swirl #5 · Jul 13th, 2012 · · · Chapter 4: Dinner at sugarcube corner ·

aww, is this the end? I want it to continue. CONTINUE BEFORE I EAT YOUR SOUL

KiaraKovu123

KiaraKovu123 #6 · Jul 13th, 2012 · · · Chapter 1:Morning ·

...Random is right.

But funny! Nice job

Theharm0n

Theharm0n #7 · Jul 13th, 2012 · · · Chapter 4: Dinner at sugarcube corner ·

Random to the point where it was enjoyable, but I stated getting frustrated at the grammatical errors I kept noticing; capitalization, punctuation, spacing in the names.

I give you 2 out of five

ozpakko

ozpakko #8 · Jul 13th, 2012 · · · Chapter 4: Dinner at sugarcube corner ·

Funny, but not so good as i thought. I'm a little disappointed
And due to the errors, it's like wrote in half an hour, without any checks to correct it.
I repeat, it's funny, but the errors doesn't make it enjoyable.