Noble and wealthy, that is commonly seen about a pony that lives in Canterlot, but for Cadance it is not what she wants. Her prince is all but a dream, until she is saved by a creature that is savage, mute, and uncouth, but kind, gentle, and caring.
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5846814 I support this demand!
5847280 america fuck yeah
So Dragomir's mother is a human. Sooo.........are you gonna explain how "that" works with a giant fire breathing lizard.
Im confused as to wether this is the one i read previously or not
I like where this is going good job keep it up so far you're better than the person who originally wrote it
5847456 Yes, but not until the story is further developed.
I know this story got a lot of hate, but I didn't think it was bad enough for the original author to stop writing. Wel,l good luck with it, I eagerly await the next chappy.
Honestly I liked the first two chapters and was really looking forward to the third! It a real shame that people can drive someone away from what they enjoy doing just by being mean spirited about something and subjective as a fan fiction.
I did enjoy the third chapter but it left sour taste in my mouth because of the original author leaving, hope this story turns out ok
5847843
You and me both.
I came in late when I started reading this story but I really liked it and hoped it would comtinue, really sad that the original author was pushed away, but I see you still kept up with the story's magic that entrapped me. I hope you keep up and produce more chapters. Really look forward to it.
5847946
I'll do my best.
Looks good, I like the direction this is going. Also, A half-human, half-dragon? Awesome!
Megan?!
Hmmm...
Would her husband happen to be a certain G1 dragon named Spike, that'd be cool?^_^
We'll see.
5848214
Um... There's a bit near the end that answers that question.
On one hand I'm sad to see an author leave, especially due to haters. On the other I'm glad you picked up the story instead of letting it die.
Can't wait to see where the rabbit hole goes.
5848080 THat's all one can ask
An update!
Nice to see this being given a second chance to carry on.
While I don't know the process you're approaching this story with, I must confess reading this chapter left me feeling a substantial amount of disconnectedness in the flow of events. It feels a bit forced, in a way. There are a number of ways to improve things, of course. If you take a look at how other authors arrange their words, you may understand my sense of words being left out or missing from time to time. Personally, I like to recommend stories like The Chase, Stardust, and The Model's Secretary as examples of excellent writing, in addition to being good reads.
As it stands right now, based on the feel of this chapter, you may want to spend a little more time preparing the details of the chapter and think on how each step leads to the next a bit more. You have a rather unusual base story to work with here and if you take the time and care it needs, you should be able to make it sing. And remember, you can always go back and revise, update, and edit a chapter later as you improve through practice. Keep at it and you'll look back after a year and wonder when your writing got so much better than it once was.
Looking forward to where you take this.
5849370
I will admit that the chapter could have been extended another 2000 words, possibly 3000. But where the story goes is rather foggy to me, meaning the flow is barely clicking right now. I'm so used to writing my stuff that this is a bit of whiplash.
The chapter could have extended to Cadance talking with Dragomir' to break the silence, as they walk through the desert, but the words would not come.
I'll see what I can do to edit it, but I cannot make any promises right now. I already have someone to edit and another requesting to use an idea I've stored for when I am finished with the other stories.
5849683 It isn't that the chapter is short or anything like that. Just how things move seems jagged in a literary sense, if that makes any sense.
You might also just need to step back for a week or two, then go back to the story after letting it work it's way through your mind. Thinking on it from time to time, letting yourself drift through the chapter's events, allowing the words to come to you as they will in the manner that flows to you. It's how I do much of my writing and editing, actually. Give it time when you feel stuck and then let it come out when it feels right.
If nothing else, you've pretty much announced this story will continue. Take some time to get your thoughts in order on what you want to do, make a few story notes, then start working on it again. It would likely feel better and come out clearer for it. You have no schedule to meet, so work on making it right as your first priority.
Here's a writing quote from I forget who or if it's accurate:
"Writing is easy. You just stare at the page until drops of blood come out of your pores."
I like this chapter and are asking for more.
I realy liked the first two chapters so i am a bit sad about the original author going away. Fffffoooorrrreeeevvvvveeeerrrr
5847456 Fucking magic man, it ain't gonna explain shit.
I hope you continue writing :)
5878999
I am writing the next chapter. So far I'm at 1,500 and working to reach between 4,000-5,000 for each chapter.
Can't wait for more
How does Cadance know the name of Dragomir... he never spoke to her?! Did I miss something?
Other than that, I like the story.
5861523 can you say human shish-ca-bob
6718257 I think its because his mother said his name
This still looks good, I just hope you didn't rushed their romance. Now I would like to continue, but I rather take that bit time I have to sleep this time.
7701325
Bah! Sleep is for babies, I've been awake for days and I'm perfectly fine!
... Oh look! Flying purple pickles!