After the events of roughly one week ago, life becomes complicated for the mane six as they each face their own problems but this is the least of their issues at the moment. Tirek Has returned and is draining the magic out of ponies.
...yeah, this escalated quickly...not gunna lie, if Celestia's relationship with Twilight isn't at best strained to the point of breaking after this, Tirek or no, I'm going to be very disappointed. Discord getting his doubts and such exposed works for me, but that said THIS is too big to let go and continue as normal cannon plot. Also, not gunna lie, the whole thing with Rarity and Spike was well played. I can only imagine how that will turn out.
Further, there is the bit about Dash and RD, and how their current standing is looking. IN short, everypony is gunna be in deep, and with the Box needing to be opened...not sure if the new Rainbow-Ex-Machina is gunna work right. Furthermore, with all the things going nuts right now, I'd be curious to see if Twilight still gets the mandate to keep her friends in the dark. If so, after all this, the "Buck you" coming from her should be complete and total. ...not gunna lie, not liking Celestia right now, myself, but then, I got gripes for days on anything, so it's hardly out of the ordinary.
Unfortunately...while it really was a betrayal most foul for Celestia to do what she did...she does kind of have a point. What kind of life would Twilight, Shining, and, most importantly, Scootaloo have had if their relationship had gotten out to the public? Especially in Canterlot, where a scandal like this would just be magnified because of Twilight and Shining's positions. I don't think it would have been exactly happy, especially if Shining and/or Twilight were landed in jail because of it. In the end...Celestia may have made the right call. At least now Twi and Scoots have a chance to reunite...though it's going to be interesting how the Shining Armor side of things plays out...especially if the past events happened while he was dating Cadance...
Lannisters in Equestria Seriously what with all of those wannabe mothers? First Fluttershy demand a foal with Discord and now Twilight. With her brother out of every possible ponies. And i wonder if Luna and Cadance really heard their conversation because its strange that Cadance would be so forgiving. I didnt felt like the canon dialog about Tirek really fit into the story. They already have different experience from tv show since they didnt even tried to open the chest and suddenly talking about Tirek when she just discovered a great secret seem off.
The thing about ruining their reputations.. Well, that'd be their concern right? If they were willing to run that risk, as individuals, they should have been allowed to. Possibly with a pardon, if it came out, for services rendered.
Of course, there're numerous alternate ways to readily hide Scootaloo's parentage. Having Night Light and Velvet adopt her is one, blaming it on an anonymous stallion is another..
It comes off as Celestia wanting to keep her weapons at hoof and to horse hell with what they want.
Why did you post this chapter unfinished initially? I didn't want to read it then, so I don't know what author's notes you may have written to explain it.
busting into the room blowing off the doors and assaulting the leader of the country.... I think twi understands the feelings of being a mom very well. I understand tia's worries but just taking the foal and walking out without giving them a chance to raise it with out suspicion is uncalled for. now all we need is for twi to move cadence into the hive with chrissy and take her bro back so they can have a family and make Chrystal babies
5226262 The only possible solution now without harming Shining/Cadance marriage is Twilight, Fluttershy and Discord living in polygamy. Reasons why: 1) They already had a threesome, so no jealousy issues 2) Twilight can still relieve her incestious fantasies 3) They could possibly adopt Scootaloo as adoptive sister to Fluttershy kid 4) ????? 5) Profit
If I may...Luna and Cadence at the end seem very...passive? I suppose that is the right word. It really feels like they are just kind of there to be a background character who fills in the obligatory 3rd party reacting to stuff happening. I'd really suggest fleshing out their reactions a bit beyond "Stunned disbelief" and "Okay, were just gonna roll with it here."
“No, Twilight. I would never joke about such a thing.” Fluttershy replied as she looked at her.
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“Oh shiny, you're going to make your sister cum so hard...mmmph!”
Shiny _____________
“That's it shiny, cum for me
Shiny ________
but I ask that you allow me to present the day you give birth to your foal, are we clear
to be ________
“Wh-What?”Twilight asked aloud in a confused tone as though she didn't understand what was happening.
?”Shining Armor's voice spoke up
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Princess Celestia sighed heavily as she looked over at her royal chance which was not in tatters then to Twilight whom still continued to glare at her with the same rage filled eyes.
What is a royal chance, and why'd it be in tatters? _________
Tablet getting freezy will continue in another cmment box.
Royally pissed at Celestia. I understand why she did it, no doub, but still pissed. Ican't wait for Twilight to over rule that law, see how Shining Arnor and Cadace respond to his returned memories, and how this effects Shinging Armor, Cadance, and Twilight with Scootaloo. After all Technically under laws and what not, While Twilight is Scootaloo's mother. With Shinging Armor being her father, Cadance is also her mother. Although Idon't know how Cadance and Luna really feel since they've pretended to be temporarily deaf ... althouhg at the very least Iknow they hold no ill feelings towards Twi, or Scoots. Probabl not even Shiny.
"“A-Are you sure this is what you want? This will change out lives forever you know.” Shining Armor asked softly doing his best to stave off the impending climax he knew was closing in fast despite his sister slowing down."
This is the first time in all of your stories that i can acctualy see some benefit to celestia's actions, but at the same time i am forced to think: "at what cost celestia? At what cost..."
...yeah, this escalated quickly...not gunna lie, if Celestia's relationship with Twilight isn't at best strained to the point of breaking after this, Tirek or no, I'm going to be very disappointed. Discord getting his doubts and such exposed works for me, but that said THIS is too big to let go and continue as normal cannon plot. Also, not gunna lie, the whole thing with Rarity and Spike was well played. I can only imagine how that will turn out.
Further, there is the bit about Dash and RD, and how their current standing is looking. IN short, everypony is gunna be in deep, and with the Box needing to be opened...not sure if the new Rainbow-Ex-Machina is gunna work right. Furthermore, with all the things going nuts right now, I'd be curious to see if Twilight still gets the mandate to keep her friends in the dark. If so, after all this, the "Buck you" coming from her should be complete and total. ...not gunna lie, not liking Celestia right now, myself, but then, I got gripes for days on anything, so it's hardly out of the ordinary.
Good work, looking forward to next chapter!
I hope the next chapter will come out quick, this is getting interesting!!
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Unfortunately...while it really was a betrayal most foul for Celestia to do what she did...she does kind of have a point. What kind of life would Twilight, Shining, and, most importantly, Scootaloo have had if their relationship had gotten out to the public? Especially in Canterlot, where a scandal like this would just be magnified because of Twilight and Shining's positions. I don't think it would have been exactly happy, especially if Shining and/or Twilight were landed in jail because of it. In the end...Celestia may have made the right call. At least now Twi and Scoots have a chance to reunite...though it's going to be interesting how the Shining Armor side of things plays out...especially if the past events happened while he was dating Cadance...
Lannisters in Equestria
Seriously what with all of those wannabe mothers? First Fluttershy demand a foal with Discord and now Twilight. With her brother out of every possible ponies. And i wonder if Luna and Cadance really heard their conversation because its strange that Cadance would be so forgiving.
I didnt felt like the canon dialog about Tirek really fit into the story. They already have different experience from tv show since they didnt even tried to open the chest and suddenly talking about Tirek when she just discovered a great secret seem off.
The thing about ruining their reputations.. Well, that'd be their concern right? If they were willing to run that risk, as individuals, they should have been allowed to. Possibly with a pardon, if it came out, for services rendered.
Of course, there're numerous alternate ways to readily hide Scootaloo's parentage. Having Night Light and Velvet adopt her is one, blaming it on an anonymous stallion is another..
It comes off as Celestia wanting to keep her weapons at hoof and to horse hell with what they want.
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The plans of royalty and privilege are seldom changed, put on hold, or interfered with.
Princess Celestia knew what she wanted and needed for the future, and she did not allow anything to stand in her way.
Shining Armour's shield at the wedding, his marriage to Cadence...
Twilight's friends, finding the elements, and all of her journeys and lessons...
Orchestrated by Celestia.
Why did you post this chapter unfinished initially? I didn't want to read it then, so I don't know what author's notes you may have written to explain it.
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Call it feeling guilty, see the unfinished version had been sitting on my HD for about 3 months now...
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GET OUT OF MY HEAD!
Erm..I mean...no, of course that's totally not what happened...
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busting into the room blowing off the doors and assaulting the leader of the country.... I think twi understands the feelings of being a mom very well. I understand tia's worries but just taking the foal and walking out without giving them a chance to raise it with out suspicion is uncalled for. now all we need is for twi to move cadence into the hive with chrissy and take her bro back so they can have a family and make Chrystal babies
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Get out? But I like it here!
(I have the odd knack of stepping into other pony's hooves incredibly easily. I'm very empathetic like that.)
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The only possible solution now without harming Shining/Cadance marriage is Twilight, Fluttershy and Discord living in polygamy. Reasons why:
1) They already had a threesome, so no jealousy issues
2) Twilight can still relieve her incestious fantasies
3) They could possibly adopt Scootaloo as adoptive sister to Fluttershy kid
4) ?????
5) Profit
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Oh, right. Sometimes I forget that Celestia is a giant asshole. GREAT SHAME
If I may...Luna and Cadence at the end seem very...passive? I suppose that is the right word. It really feels like they are just kind of there to be a background character who fills in the obligatory 3rd party reacting to stuff happening. I'd really suggest fleshing out their reactions a bit beyond "Stunned disbelief" and "Okay, were just gonna roll with it here."
move down a line.
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Shiny
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Shiny
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to be
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spacing
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What is a royal chance, and why'd it be in tatters?
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Tablet getting freezy will continue in another cmment box.
Royally pissed at Celestia. I understand why she did it, no doub, but still pissed. Ican't wait for Twilight to over rule that law, see how Shining Arnor and Cadace respond to his returned memories, and how this effects Shinging Armor, Cadance, and Twilight with Scootaloo. After all Technically under laws and what not, While Twilight is Scootaloo's mother. With Shinging Armor being her father, Cadance is also her mother. Although Idon't know how Cadance and Luna really feel since they've pretended to be temporarily deaf ... althouhg at the very least Iknow they hold no ill feelings towards Twi, or Scoots. Probabl not even Shiny.
"“A-Are you sure this is what you want? This will change out lives forever you know.” Shining Armor asked softly doing his best to stave off the impending climax he knew was closing in fast despite his sister slowing down."
Out needs to be our.
Don't hurt me.
This is the first time in all of your stories that i can acctualy see some benefit to celestia's actions, but at the same time i am forced to think: "at what cost celestia? At what cost..."