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Now, normally I am not a Grammar nazi, however, OH MY GOSH THE HORRIBLE GRAMMAR
Towards the end you have accidentally pasted one of the first paragraphs.
And yea, the grammar is god awful.
Interesting story though.
4559881 The grammar gets a lot better at and past chapter 7, when I actually got a grammar checker.
also this chapter was written at 2 in the morning.
Ok, im confused. What happened to the last guy?
I looked past that terrible grammar and at the Brisbane Australia bit. Aussie's represent! Whoo!
Australia is best country.
Screw it, just let the guards "watch" him rather than bringing him in for questioning. We have a party to plan!
Celestia sure has her priorities in order, doesn't she?
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Well that isn't a legal power... Oh well.
6036723 Who gives a fuck if it's legal
Good just dust off a few problems and add a tiny bit more character it would a pro's story.
5962489 Well I guess Nova has evolved from Typical Nova into Super Nova.
Stop capitalising typical and bright. Capitals are for names, titles and beginnings of sentences.
This story depresses me. I implore you, get an editor.
Ok first chapter, pasty ginger kid named Nova, sure totally the everyday image of 'typical' young adult. Nah, I'm just joking, so far kinda goofy and I get the general idea of it, Celestia and Luna's dialogue at the end was kind of weird. "oh shit, sis whats that thing?", "Hmm? oh well who knows sis but I cant be asked to get twilight to solve two problems today, lets just deal wit it ehhh, sometime", "sounds cool sis, I'm exhausted from not doing anything to defeat Discord, lets have a party!"
So... can Nova stop time?