The Revelation
At first, Scootaloo thought she was still dreaming. She had to be. Because there was no possible way that the reality presented before her was real.
Yes, she had wanted the chance to not have to worry about anything and just let somepony else take care of her, but she'd convinced herself that it was a lost cause and that there was no point in asking. Even in a world as magically capable as Equestria, it just didn't seem possible for ponies to have the chance to grow up again. At least, that's what she thought.
That's it, it had to be a dream. But if so, why wasn't Princess Luna already entering it to reassure Scootaloo that she was dreaming? It felt incredibly real, but then again, so had all of her other dreams. Including the ones about the olden pony, and the headless horse. Although those had been nightmares, where as this felt like a dream come true.
But the instant she looked up, and her eyes met the sight of her adoptive mother Fluttershy, she became convinced that perhaps she wasn't dreaming. Perhaps, she truly had been regressed to a foal. But if so, why had this happened?
"Did you sleep well last night, my daughter?" Fluttershy asked, as she lowered the bars on Scootaloo's crib, and picked her up by her diapered bottom.
"Of cowuse I did mama." Scootaloo replied "I swept wike a baby." She was shocked by how gurgled her words sounded, coming out of her own mouth. She'd spoken as if she were actually a foal.
"Well that's cause you are a baby, squirt." another familiar voice laughed. Scootaloo instantly recognized it as her other adoptive mother, Rainbow Dash.
"Now Rainbow Dash, you know better than to make fun of our baby girl." Fluttershy said sternly, and proceeded to check Scootaloo's diaper. Now there was no denying it, Scootaloo knew that this was not a dream. It was as real as life itself. This realization left her speechless, for a while at least.
In the meantime, Fluttershy pressed a hoof to the back of Scootaloo's diaper and felt an all too familiar "squish". If her months of parenting classes had taught her anything, it's that a noise like that could only mean one thing. Scootaloo had wet her diaper overnight, just like any normal baby might do. "Looks like somepony needs a new diaper." Fluttershy said kindly, and carried Scootaloo over to the changing table.
By the time the shock had worn off, Scootaloo found herself sitting on the soft padded surface of a changing table that she knew had not been there the day before. At that point, the familiar sensation of a wet diaper made itself known. Scootaloo had almost forgotten about her bed wetting problems, but now they no longer mattered. Right now, she was more than a little upset. Both of her parents had esentially tricked her with a vague question, and had regressed her into a foal. Even if this was what she wanted, it was definitely not something that she liked having sprung on her without warning. She was going to have grow up all over again, and would have to relearn things she'd practically taken for granted. How to walk, how to talk properly, and most importantly, how to use the bathroom.
"Hold still Scootaloo, mommy will get you all nice and clean." Fluttershy spoke up, having gathered the necessary changing supplies. She quickly set to work, and in no time at all she had slipped a new diaper under Scootaloo's rump, and thrown the old one into a nearby diaper pale. Then, she lifted Scootaloo off of the changing table, and patted her diapered rear a bit.
"Good morning sunshine." Rainbow Dash called in a motherly voice she rarely used "What do you think of your new nursery?"
"Nuwsewy?" Scootaloo asked.
"Yup." Rainbow Dash nodded "Fluttershy and I spared no expense making sure our little bundle of joy grew up safe and secure. Isn't that right honey?"
"You bet it is." Fluttershy replied "Are you happy Scootaloo? You got your wish."
"Why shwoud I be happy?" Scootaloo said crossly "You two twicked me and twuned me into a foaw. I twought mommies wewe suppose to be ponies you cowd twust."
"You can trust us." Rainbow Dash quickly spoke up "We'd never do anything to hurt you Scootaloo. You know that by now."
"Then why did you wegwess me?" Scootaloo asked "Why didn't you ask me fwist?"
"I thought you wanted a second foalhood?" Fluttershy asked.
"Yeah, but not wike dis." Scootaloo pouted "I mean, yeah I wanted to wear diapees and be tweated wike a baby, but I didn't want to just be wegwessed out of the bwue and be fwoced to gwow up once again. What wiww my fwiends say when they find out abwot dis?"
"I'm sure they'll understand in time." Fluttershy explained "They were all worried about you when you kept pushing them away."
"Yeah.... well none of them couwd undewstand what I was going thwough." Scootaloo snapped back. She was trying her hardest to stay mad at Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash, but somehow she found that harder than it should be.
"Look, we're sorry for not being more specific when we asked you that question last night." Rainbow Dash apologized "But if we didn't do anything, we could've lost you to child protection services."
"That's right." Fluttershy explained "Would you have wanted to be taken away from us, and be given to a family that wouldn't treat you with the same love and affection that we're giving you?"
"No." Scootaloo replied "But fwom now on, please dun' thwow anymowe suwpises at me. I dun' tink I couwd handwe it."
"Well, now that we have that settled, I think it's time for your breakfast Scootaloo." Fluttershy said, carrying Scootaloo downstairs.
"I am kinda hungwy." Scootaloo replied, though she was still a bit cross with her parents for what they'd done to her "But what am I gonna eat now that I'm a foaw? I don' know if I can eat soiwd foods yet."
"Don't worry Scootaloo, Rainbow Dash and I already planned for that." Fluttershy explained "We're going to take turns feeding you."
"Whadya mean by that?" Scootaloo asked nervously, although she was pretty sure she knew the answer.
"Geez squirt, what do you think foals eat?" Rainbow Dash spoke up "Breast milk of course."
"Bweast miwk?" Scootaloo asked.
"That's right." Fluttershy nodded and brought Scootaloo closer to her so the baby pegasus could nurse from her "Go ahead, eat it up. Mommy can always make more with her special mothering pills."
Scootaloo slowly put her mouth up to one of Fluttershy's teats, and almost as if she'd done it before, she began to slowly suck. Soon, she was rewarded with the taste of sweet milk. And her mother wrapped her wings around her to give her some privacy, while Scootaloo continued to nurse.
"My goodness, you must've been really hungry." Fluttershy said sweetly, as she picked Scootaloo up and patted her back a few times. Scootaloo quickly let out a burp.
"Tank you mama." Scootaloo said sweetly.
"You're more than welcome Scootaloo." Fluttershy replied "If you get hungry again, just let Rainbow Dash know."
"Yeah, I'll give you plently of delicious milk for your tummy." Rainbow Dash eagerly stated.
"Don't forget, we agreed to take turns with changing her as well." Fluttershy reminded her.
"I know Fluttershy." Rainbow Dash replied "I took those parenting classes too you know. I know how much of a responsibility babies are. Granted, I think I'm way too awesome to be changing diapers, but I've learned that it's no use arguing with you when it comes to parenting."
"Glad you remember the agreement." Fluttershy smiled "Now come on, we don't want to waste any time."
"Whewe awe we going mama?" Scootaloo asked, as she was placed into a foal carrier.
"I think it's time for everypony to meet our adorable new daughter." Fluttershy explained "Let's go see if your aunts Twilight, Pinkie Pie, Applejack, and Rarity are around. Then we'll have to talk with your friends, Apple Bloom and Sweetie Belle. And finally, we'll have to let Miss. Cheerilee know why you're not going to be in school anymore. Not to mention, we're going to ask The Cakes for some parenting advice."
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Um, slight correction.
It should be teats, not boobs
I belive it should be like this "Hold still Scootaloo, mommy will get you all nice and clean."
anyway I loved it Scootaloo having the other mane 6 as her aunts Awesome can't wait for more
5197513 Sorry. I'm new to writing beast feeding, wasn't sure what the proper term was.
5197532 I know you can't, but you'll have to anyway. Next chapter is when the rest of the mane six (minus Twilight who already kind of knew) find out, as do the CMC, and Cheerilee. And the ending will set up for a scene I know you're looking forward to.
5197550 It's cool.
5197557 Thanks for pointing it out.
5197563 not a problem. adorable cover art BTW.
5197567 Thanks. When you're not looking for anything really specific, Deviant Art is a good place to find cover art.
5197550 I do hope its out within a mouth though it will have 13 chapters it will be worth a re read once finished hehe though I am surprised Scoots wasn't like turn me back NOW! and her parents would tell her she must stay that way until she grows up again
5197574 cool.
5197576 Well, seeing as she wanted a second foalhood, she's not entirely unhappy. Yes, growing up again and having to be re-potty trained will suck. But it's better than being taken from you adopted family, where one of your mothers is your mentor/idol/big sister.
5197581 true dat
5197593 And of course, she'll soon get to finally get her revenege on a certain bratty filly.
5197513 Does it matter?
5197948 To me, 'Boobs' tends to refer more to human breasts in a slang termionlogy
5197948 Well, I figured I should go with the more accurate term. Like I said, it's my first time writing a breast feeding scene. It's not exactly something I'm comfortable with.
5197982 I wouldn't of minded if she was givin a bottle but hay its your story now, do what you thank is right
5198002 Well, it would still be breast milk seeing as she has to grow up again, and until babies can digest certain foods they can only get nutrition through their mother's milk.
Yeah, the Cake Twins could eat mashed up food at a month old, but for all we know that could be the exception and not the rule. I mean, from what we've seen, they're still in diapers despite two whole seasons having passed since their introduction.
Perhaps they're potty trained but still wear diapers, but we don't know for certain.
Love it and you are good with the foal talk
5198786 Thanks. This time it really makes sense.
Sorry, I'm going to have to make you and everyone else wait a long time for the next chapter. But you can't rush art.
I'm willing to accept for the sake of the story that apparently Scootaloo is physically a baby, but mentally she is still 8 (or whatever age you think she is), yet she can't talk normally or control her bladder. Fine. Whatever.
You answered why Scootaloo shrugged off the question well enough, but you didn't answer why Rainbow and Fluttershy hid what they were doing. They were worried that she would be taken away, well shouldn't they have talked to her about that?
"Hey Scootaloo we know you're having a tough time, but if you keep acting up child protective services is going to take you away. Here is one way that we think we can avoid that?"
What is it?
If we turn you into a foal, then you can act up all you want because you'd just be a baby, also it's what you want
Just because you know where you want this to go, (Scootaloo in a diaper doing baby things), doesn't mean you don't need to explain how you get there.
5200087 Well, thank you for your criticism. I hope that it's not a big detriement to the story as a whole.
Well, it got updated.
Time for a review, I guess
5200973 Be honest with me. Tell what how I'm doing, and what could use some improvement.
5201265
That's in Scootaloo's head, not mine. I know for a fact that at least when I was growing up, I certainly never thought two males or two females could be together in a romantic relationship.
The term has nothing to do with Scootaloo's supposed inability to fly. Fluttershy called the CMC "Sweet little angels" back in Season 1. It's a term of endearment.
She's blushing at the thought of breast feeding. I would think a sensitive pony like Fluttershy would find that subject rather "touchy".
I thought the mentioning of mothering pills would be a dead giveaway to breast feeding.
Well, their relationship is somewhat long distance at times. Besides, just because it's Fluttershy's room does not mean Fluttershy is the only one who sleeps in it. I'll probably change it just to clear up confusion.
I'm no child pyschologist, but children often have things they don't like to talk about without their parents.
(Edit: To whoever downvoted the criticism, do keep in mind that I asked for it. If it bothers you, then do not read it. Everyone is entitled to their opinion, thank you.)
5200941 It's not, though as your reviewer noted, the whole thing could use some polish. But characters doing things for no reason is kinda my pet peeve. I'm okay if your characters act a little ooc, and I have no problem with magical plot devices, (mothering pills for instance, I mean does formula not exist in equestria? Where else is the demand for ponies who didn't just give birth to produce breast milk?) and like I said I'm okay with whatever machinations you want to use to explain why Scootaloo is physically and sort of mentally a foal but also sort of isn't.
But I hate in when authors have character driven actions happen and then don't provide a reason. It wouldn't necessarily have to be a good reason if you can show that your character is acting on misinformation or faulty assumptions, but I feel like you owe it to the reader to explore your characters motivations, especially on the big decisions.
'
Something to think about for next time I guess.
5203539 Well in any case, thanks for the honest criticism. I'll try to keep it in mind for future chapters.
"I think it's time for everypony to meet our adorable new daughter." Fluttershy explained "Let's go see if your aunts Twilight, Pinkie Pie, Applejack, and Rarity are around. Then we'll have to talk with your friends. And finally, we'll have to let Miss. Cheerilee know why you're not going to be in school anymore. Not to mention, we're going to ask The Cakes for some advice."
the first bit makes sense shy, but the cmc and then cheerilee all at once. don't you think that might be a bit much, too fast for baby scoots in one day. she just said she wasn't sure how her friends will take it and instead of easing them in you're just gonna drop it in their laps?
Well, hopefully apple bloom and sweetie belle are in a lax mood.
5208568 It's okay. Matt11 wasn't all that interested in this fic to begin with, but no one else wanted to take control of it, so when I offered to take over he was more than happy to do so.
5208586 You'll have to wait and find out.
All I get from this right now is that Fluttershy and Rainbow don't seem to see how bad PERMANENTLY regressing Scootaloo with ZERO warning could be. It would be ok is it was temporary! They've just destroyed a filly's life and they don't care one bit!
5217549 Well, as was mentioned in the previous chapter, it's something that Scootaloo wanted. And they did ask her before they gave her the potion, they just didn't outright ask "Do you want to be turned back into a foal?"
5217557 But they didn't ask her. Not really. There was no discussion, no planning, no thinking of the consequences. And what was with Twilight just suddenly having the means to PERMANENTLY regress a pony! The whole story is a mess of giant gaping plot holes. There needs to be a reversal potion. So many stories dont have one and it always makes the story worse. It doesn't need to be available straight away. Scootaloo was turned much too quickly and Nopony seems to care. They literally planned to screw over her whole life, her friendships, her relationship with her parents and everything about her in a matter of hours! It should have taken days or even WEEKS!
5217630 Well, you're looking in the wrong place. It's obvious this story isn't something you'll enjoy, so I ask that you kindly leave. No one is forcing you to read this story.
If it's any consolation, this is my first time writing permanet age regression. And though I do think that it can have its uses, I think temporary regression is more my cup of tea. The idea that you can be young again, but can go back to being an adult under the right circumstances, just feels better to me.
I'm trying to give you constructive criticism more than anything.
Please consider slowing down the pacing of the story. If you can also try to avoid using Deus ex machina like Twilight spontaneously having the age regression potion. It's not that i'm incapable of enjoying this story I just feel it needs substantial work to be the best it can be.
5220044 Well, I don't intend to have anything else that's really dues ex. From here on, the focus is pretty much just going to be "Scootaloo getting into foalish antics".
If you want, I could explain in a PM what some of those antics will be.
5220094
So you're going to ignore the existing problems with this fic? I STRONGLY urge you to reconsider and continue working on the opening chapters.
There's a reason you have 35 dislikes to your 59 likes, out of the 306 viewers.
I'm not trying to be mean or ruin your vision for this story. I do like your plans to have Scootaloo get up to foalish antics. I think it will be cute and heartwarming, especially if you use her canon personality. But. The first chapter is like a ball and chain that will ALWAYS drag you down. It's the most important chapter of all because it is the one that draws the reader in.
5220428 Keep in mind that the like/dislike count carried over from when it was under Matt11's account. So a lot of people already liked or disliked it back when it was a seperate thing. And if you think the new first chapter is bad, I can assure that the original first chapter was a lot worse. It had a lot of problems, major and minor, and Scootaloo was even more accepting of the situation in that chapter, than she is in the new second chapter.
5220528
I've read both and I see little change in her reaction. She still seems out of character and it's just unrealistic that she would roll over that easily and not question what her parents did to her. Both Dash and Fluttershy are very OOC and neither spent any time to consider their actions. Twilight is the Princess of Friendship and a master unicorn yet she allows her two best friends to betray their daughters trust, forcefully and permanently alter her body and possibly her mind.
Yes Fluttershy had good intentions but her actions are cruelty not Kindness.
Yes Rainbow Dash wants to support her daughter but her actions are betrayal not Loyalty.
THIS IS MAH FAV FIC OF RAINBOW DASH, FLUTTERSHY, AND SCOOTALOO, PLS CONTINUE IT!!!
5225216 I will, in time.
5226385 YAY THANK YOU!!!!
5226475 You're going to love what happens in the next few chapters.
5227033 Yay!!!! Can't wait!
5228787 Within a week I should have the third chapter out. The fourth chapter though, is where the real fun begins.
5228807 oh god please, your making me want to piss myself with excitement, literally, i'm smiling like a little girl right now xD!
5234165 Um, okay?
And now they've brainwashed her
OK, Scootaloo reacted like anyone would have done, at first. You fixed one of the problems. But, she was OK then.
In other words, your solution is still bad.
awesome job this is one of the stories that i FULLY read
Boom. Right there. She still has her memory's.
lovely story I'll admit