Equestria a place where ponies rule with absolute dominance, but what of the others? The Gryphons, the diamond dogs, the changelings, the minotaurs? Harmony has ruled for far too long, now the true power of Chaos is unleashed in the form of one man.
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The punishment for the nobles was great, very clever. Also, after reading about the prison break-in, I started humming the Mission Impossible theme. Looking forward to the next chapter!
Sweet chapter! Nicely done with the nobles punishment and I am really looking forward to the prison breaking, as I'm sure that will be an impressive arc. Hope to see more soon, keep goin and stay golden^^
When you said merciful punishments, I was thinking of what the Byzantine empire did to prisoners. They would blind and castrate them, and then release them. I liked your punishment though, nice and humiliating
This was a great chapter, and you conveyed the characters a little more completely. Keep that cock a rock ya hear?
4551092 Thank you! Me and my editor are a good team. I doubt it would be this good if I didn't have him.
4550581 Yeah, I am going to try my best to make each arc worth the time of the reader to read, but with my editor having my back so to speak,I firmly believe that it is possible.
4550230 I love that tune each time I see the movie, I replay it a couple of times in case possible. Also thanks for the support man and I hope you keep on reading and supporting the story.
4549679 He's more like "you burned my face, oh now I am pissed off!"
4551020 Those Romans sure had some 'creative' punishments so to say. I decided to play nice for now.![:scootangel:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/scootangel.png)
Not bad, not bad at all. Keep up the good work![:twilightsmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsmile.png)
This is much more entertaining than I thought. You might want your editors (if they get free time) to go over your earlier chapters as there are multiple sentences that are painful to read. Otherwise, keep up the good work and give those alicorns hell!
4552150 Thank you and cool picture btw.
4553888 Thanks for the support! I have sent the first two chapters to my edtor today, so whenever he has some spare time, he can work on those already.
I foresee big booms in the future![:ajsmug:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/ajsmug.png)
Will we see the races of equestria that are part of the rebellion get elevated to a psedo-humanity tech level? I would imagine the war progression and natural human ingenuity causing some serious jumps in weaponry and tech
*possible spoiler alert*
I think molgo or what ever his name is was the one tipping of the ponies about the ambushes and he arraigned for her capture espionage at its finest folks!
4573635 A very fitting song if I do say so myself, and a very good one as well.
4571871 There will be some human weapons in the futures accompanied by big booms, but don't expect missiles or anything like that or at least not the kind we use these days.
Thanks a lot for the support guys!
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A possible theme
chapter 9 please
4618505 Sorry about the delay, my editor is a bit busy at the moment, but he told me that both the third chapter (that wasn't edited yet because it was up before I had him) and chapter 9 are halfway done. I can only ask all of you to stay patient a bit longer.
Its just bad form to directly address the reader in most cases, not to mention it destroys immersion.
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Actually, it makes sense here.
Remember, he's telling his story to a griffon soldier while awaiting a final siege on Canterlot.
In terms of technical rules, you're correct. It's bad to yank the reader out of the story like that. But in context, it's forgivable, as it makes sense that the soldier would have a reaction now and then that would cause Karl to respond.