What happens when the resident Ponyville baker stumbles across an ancient artifact that could grant him immense power? Would he do the responsible thing and return it to the princesses in order for them to lock it away for good and out of anyone&
Quick question: Is this an Anthro story? It does read like one. If it is, you should add the Anthro tag! You'll get even more readers like that, I promise.
And you deserve more readers. This is too interesting to pass up^^
I can only assume the incest means Carrot is gonna end up doin his underage daughter. That's not really a bad thing, so long as he eventually at least feels bad about it. I do think your reason as to why Pound isn't there reeks a bit of contrivance. Maybe Carrot could have just used the watch to mind control his son to leave whenthe time came to do the deed? or maybe you could have him join the deed, because a bisexual incestuous threesome would be fucking hot as shit
I usually loathe mind control stories, but your promise of a happy ending has interested me, along with your skill as a writer. Here's a fave.
4363850 you should try Rainbow Dash Discoveres Erotic Mind Control then^^ Its a clopfic in which the clop starts out to be the focus but takes more and more of a backseat as the story goes on in order for the plot to develope^^ You should really give it a try, I think you might be positively suprised^^
An interesting prospect. Your style of writing is very... aesthetically pleasing? Yeah! Aesthetically pleasing. I look forward to reading in further. Also, calling it now – When you say that "there'll be a happy ending", you're not referring to the story kind.
Quick question: Is this an Anthro story? It does read like one. If it is, you should add the Anthro tag! You'll get even more readers like that, I promise.
And you deserve more readers. This is too interesting to pass up^^
4362710 Holy crap, I can't believe I missed that.
Thanks!
Seems to be an interesting story so far, but the incest tag makes me very nervous.
4362974 Like I said in the description, you won't have to worry.
Everything will turn out alright in the end. I don't really approve of incest either, but I'm kinda into the whole forbidden love angle, ya know?
4363041 Alright. Il give it a shot. It probably wont be as bad as I imagine and since your a pretty capable writer I can trust you will do it right.
Hmm...
I can only assume the incest means Carrot is gonna end up doin his underage daughter. That's not really a bad thing, so long as he eventually at least feels bad about it. I do think your reason as to why Pound isn't there reeks a bit of contrivance. Maybe Carrot could have just used the watch to mind control his son to leave whenthe time came to do the deed? or maybe you could have him join the deed, because a bisexual incestuous threesome would be fucking hot as shit
I usually loathe mind control stories, but your promise of a happy ending has interested me, along with your skill as a writer. Here's a fave.
I like your story, and I enjoy thw words you are using, KEEP IT UP!
Gentle breeze guide your way,a warm smile welcome you home.
4363850 Your idea. I like it.
How long will the story be?
I'm just curious.
Plz updatte soon,.....
4363850 you should try Rainbow Dash Discoveres Erotic Mind Control then^^ Its a clopfic in which the clop starts out to be the focus but takes more and more of a backseat as the story goes on in order for the plot to develope^^ You should really give it a try, I think you might be positively suprised^^
If I was married to her, I think I'd rather just break out the old hand crank then have sex with her.
An interesting prospect. Your style of writing is very... aesthetically pleasing? Yeah! Aesthetically pleasing. I look forward to reading in further. Also, calling it now – When you say that "there'll be a happy ending", you're not referring to the story kind.