What happens when the resident Ponyville baker stumbles across an ancient artifact that could grant him immense power? Would he do the responsible thing and return it to the princesses in order for them to lock it away for good and out of anyone&
Well I've been reading the story for a while now and I had a few thoughts. First off as for the whole featured thing. It showed up on my end so I doubt it is a bug. As for the story it makes sense to go with family first, I mean if you need to set up an alibi what better then family right? Now the whole Cadence thing was well played. But I think you need to aim a little differently. Think Mayor Mare, for a few reasons, this would allow Carrot use of the main hall that housed the summer sun celebration. That should be plenty of space to work in, plus having "permits" for some unicorn practice. Which would give some reason to have him go after say Lyra, or maybe Vinyl Scratch? Maybe a Show Boating Trixie? That way you can progress his powers a bit more. But I see that control is pretty much the main source of his powers. That's fine I suppose but I kind of want him to go a bit more... interesting with them. I mean who says some of the controlled mares or hell ponies in general don't have kinks? Hell Carrot could have a few of his own as well. I mean if you want to avoid some of the big ones, you could do bandage, or maybe just pet-play. But if you want to go full blown with the kinks then by all means do so. I mean there's the whole Transformation, Transgender, and so much more. I mean think about Carrot doing a Transgendered Big Mac? But I think I'm imposing to many of my ideas as it is. I'm mainly saying this because I saw the blog you posted needing some idea's so why not this? But as for End Game wise. I mean I kind of want to see Carrot go full blown turns into perverted alicorn nightmare moon kind of being ruling all of Equestria. Then maybe have Discord play Hero or something. Like to say Fluttershy thus in turn saving every pony and all of Equestria while he's at it. Then doing a whole mind wipe of everyone but himself and some pony else he trusts. Course of that was the case I figured Pinkie would know too because Pinkie is Pinkie after all.
That's all I got to say about that... well for now anyway.
4697243 You sir/ ma'am, raise quite a few interesting points. I thank you sincerely for all of that, and I will most definitely take them into consideration.
Also, Jumping Jupiters! Featured?! I'm still a little skeptical, but if it IS true, then I have all of you guys to thank for it
P.S. I know I've said this a lot, but please feel free to PM me or anything if you have any interesting story ideas, and I'll give you the credit at the end of the chapter
Or you know, if you just wanna chat. I'd be down with that too.
Adding Cadance is a huuuuge risk on Carrot's part, but I guess arrogance is an integral part of a good villainous breakfast^^
How he managed his son's return last chapter makes for a nice setup for an additional harem! The two don't have to be completely separate, as mares like Pumpkin and Cup Cake are probably going to be shared by father and son in the future as well. Since he didn't screw Pound Cake himself, it would make some sense to take things into the other fitting direction: Namely, to have Carrot introduce his son into his... er, let's call it "hobby". That has the added benefits of keeping Pound beholden to his father (since he needs daddy to expand and keep his harem) and possibly set him up as a distraction/scapegoat when the Good Guys come around (something already noted in an earlier chapter).
Plus, let's not forget.. How is the new and improved(?) Carrot Cake likely to react when/if one of the snooty girls in school starts bullying his only son..? "So, my boy? What happened with the girl who called you a scruffy lout before? Oh? She apologised? She said she wants to come over for dinner? She even asked to get a nice spanking from you? That's wonderful! How about we ask your mother to prepare dinner today, while the two of us look what paddle to use..."
i see no evil in carrots character and i see no dark real dark areas so far i see a lighthearted story with a main character with no real morals soooooooo mr cake still good guy to me
First, word of advice: When you have a hyper short chapter like this, it's best to wait, and just stick it onto the front of the next chapter. Helps with the flow.
Secondly, at this rate, Carrot is going to pretty much screw every mare in Ponyville...and Canterlot...and the Crystal Empire...and Equestria in general...and wherever Gilda came from....yeah...lots of sex.
Of course, when all the brainwashing rubs off, he's a dead man.
4968539img.4plebs.org/boards/tg/image/1368/08/1368081797919.jpg i agree with what you said.... but we have to consider does it even wear off? Or does it perhaps get stronger with each person who falls under it's control? just something to consider so says HOMER SIMPSON
Congratulations on getting featured.
i.imgur.com/RYTuVzr.png
4697088 I'm pretty sure that's just a glitch mi amigo. XD
How can there be a happy ending now?
Only thing I can imagine is amnesia saving the day.
Or time travel.
Well I've been reading the story for a while now and I had a few thoughts. First off as for the whole featured thing. It showed up on my end so I doubt it is a bug. As for the story it makes sense to go with family first, I mean if you need to set up an alibi what better then family right? Now the whole Cadence thing was well played. But I think you need to aim a little differently. Think Mayor Mare, for a few reasons, this would allow Carrot use of the main hall that housed the summer sun celebration. That should be plenty of space to work in, plus having "permits" for some unicorn practice. Which would give some reason to have him go after say Lyra, or maybe Vinyl Scratch? Maybe a Show Boating Trixie? That way you can progress his powers a bit more. But I see that control is pretty much the main source of his powers. That's fine I suppose but I kind of want him to go a bit more... interesting with them. I mean who says some of the controlled mares or hell ponies in general don't have kinks? Hell Carrot could have a few of his own as well. I mean if you want to avoid some of the big ones, you could do bandage, or maybe just pet-play. But if you want to go full blown with the kinks then by all means do so. I mean there's the whole Transformation, Transgender, and so much more. I mean think about Carrot doing a Transgendered Big Mac? But I think I'm imposing to many of my ideas as it is. I'm mainly saying this because I saw the blog you posted needing some idea's so why not this? But as for End Game wise. I mean I kind of want to see Carrot go full blown turns into perverted alicorn nightmare moon kind of being ruling all of Equestria. Then maybe have Discord play Hero or something. Like to say Fluttershy thus in turn saving every pony and all of Equestria while he's at it. Then doing a whole mind wipe of everyone but himself and some pony else he trusts. Course of that was the case I figured Pinkie would know too because Pinkie is Pinkie after all.
That's all I got to say about that... well for now anyway.
4697243 You sir/ ma'am, raise quite a few interesting points. I thank you sincerely for all of that, and I will most definitely take them into consideration.
Also, Jumping Jupiters! Featured?! I'm still a little skeptical, but if it IS true, then I have all of you guys to thank for it
P.S. I know I've said this a lot, but please feel free to PM me or anything if you have any interesting story ideas, and I'll give you the credit at the end of the chapter
Or you know, if you just wanna chat. I'd be down with that too.
I'm curious as to where this is all ultimately going. It's clear you're leading up to something.
Very well written, by the way.
Adding Cadance is a huuuuge risk on Carrot's part, but I guess arrogance is an integral part of a good villainous breakfast^^
How he managed his son's return last chapter makes for a nice setup for an additional harem! The two don't have to be completely separate, as mares like Pumpkin and Cup Cake are probably going to be shared by father and son in the future as well. Since he didn't screw Pound Cake himself, it would make some sense to take things into the other fitting direction: Namely, to have Carrot introduce his son into his... er, let's call it "hobby".
That has the added benefits of keeping Pound beholden to his father (since he needs daddy to expand and keep his harem) and possibly set him up as a distraction/scapegoat when the Good Guys come around (something already noted in an earlier chapter).
Plus, let's not forget.. How is the new and improved(?) Carrot Cake likely to react when/if one of the snooty girls in school starts bullying his only son..?
"So, my boy? What happened with the girl who called you a scruffy lout before?
Oh? She apologised? She said she wants to come over for dinner? She even asked to get a nice spanking from you? That's wonderful! How about we ask your mother to prepare dinner today, while the two of us look what paddle to use..."
4697243 Better yet, a R63 Big Mac plays into MY kink of big, muscular women.
Now to point out an error:
This part is counterintuitive, as "lithe" means "thin". Perhaps it would be better to say "lithe but well-curved body"?
i see no evil in carrots character and i see no dark real dark areas so far i see a lighthearted story with a main character with no real morals
soooooooo mr cake still good guy to me
GG
4707268 Fixed! Sorry it took me as long as I did to do so, I was just being lazy. That, and I have been a little busy as of late
Anyways, thanks for pointing that out!
4752982 Hey no problem.
Awww yiss, I've been waiting for this
Brohoof! (^-^)/)
somewhat rushed
but understandable for an upcomming
Can't wait for the Cadance chapter to begin.
First, word of advice: When you have a hyper short chapter like this, it's best to wait, and just stick it onto the front of the next chapter. Helps with the flow.
Secondly, at this rate, Carrot is going to pretty much screw every mare in Ponyville...and Canterlot...and the Crystal Empire...and Equestria in general...and wherever Gilda came from....yeah...lots of sex.
Of course, when all the brainwashing rubs off, he's a dead man.
4968539 img.4plebs.org/boards/tg/image/1368/08/1368081797919.jpg
i agree with what you said.... but we have to consider does it even wear off?
Or does it perhaps get stronger with each person who falls under it's control?
just something to consider
so says HOMER SIMPSON