Life is a game, you just need to know how to play it. I learned it the hard way, even if not in the World I was actually born in.
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Excellent, another installment in the adventure.
*hugs you for a great chapter* THANK YOU FOR AN AWESOME CHAPTER!!!
This is like the only story I have no criticism about. It's really fucking wierd.
That moment when one of your favorite stories updates only issue I have is why she gave all four at once rather than one at a time to let bloom deal with the changes but that is a personal opinion xD it definetly allows Moony to get some character development.
I suggest you learn how emphasis and proper nouns work in English. You can't simply scatter capital letters around semi-randomly.
Op has delivered
Sees this fic update and Falls on my knees as Hallelujah plays behind me
So happy to see this updated, made my day!
Wow, its been a while, I am going to reread the entire story so I don't miss-remeber anything. I do wish we could see an interlude regarding applebloom as while it may be that her family wont notice (really not seeing this, if it was just a bit of height then yes, not what looks like over 4-5 years of complete development) her friends and schoolmates would certainly notice her changing in a day.
Also our little moondancer is really starting to sound a bit like a sociopath with her deciding to kill the dragon for no reason but because it was most convenient for her , she may be relying on Gamers mind a bit too much.
quick question with the relationship meter are we ever going to see it decrease as I could honestly see Moondancer receiving a notice when she was 'fighting' Caballeron with it going from annoyance to hated to feared during that scene with a message stating that a faction has died when she killed them.
I like how your character is basically becoming the villain similar to Light from Death Note, killing people to simultaneously punish their crimes and further their own goals for more power
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Same to me
YAAAAAAAAAAYYYYY!!!!!! ITS ALIIIIVE!!!!
Omg, it lives... ^^
First off-HOLY SHIT IT'S ALIVE!! Second off-Yay! One of my favorite stories hasn't been abandoned! Hope to see more chapters. Also I wonder what would happen if a Alicorn absorbed the essence of a Dragon? Would she change to a Kirin?
... never see that ship coming...
Over relying on [Gamer's Mind] = V.I.K.I.
"My logic is undeniable"
Still awesome chapter and can't wait to see what happens next :D
This is now my favorite horror story.
Shadow: Dis is not DED! That makes me happy!
I feel like jess asorbing discords essence would solve her problems of publicity if it gives her anything close to the kind of powers discord has
Though I also think that adoring his essence might end in disaster, there alot that could go wrong with asorbing the power of someone more powerful then both of the princess combined
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To make the ship, you must first realize the truth; there is no ship.
I'm looking forward to seeing what she does with Limbo, the Pillars, Stygian, and the Shadow... Not sure how the Tantabus will work with this story... How will she react to Starswirl's fate? Does she, ultimately, give a fuck?
Find out next time on...
GAME OVER...
I predict an epic a$$whooping in Reginald's future followed by his death.
Oh & would it be wrong to compare Moony to Infinite when it comes to her potential?
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What ship? All I see is a terrible excuse of a raft that is currently sinking. Yeah, it never stood a chance.
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I was wondering if I was only one that saw his downward path in being the villain. Also surprised he gave all the essences to Applebloom. I thought he was going to give her one (Really using a little girl as an experiment is highly immoral in my opinion), than give the other three to his friends to give them a boost too. Instead he essentially made Applebloom into a essence addict, forced her body into early puberty it seems, giving her confused feelings of the situation. Our newest Alicorn is turning into a bad and evil pimp.
Is this dead?
With the possible exceptions that a) they weren't bad as Cutie Marks go, to be honest, and b) their friendship has them being the "ridiculed blank flanks" as something of a cornerstone. I mean, one would hope it'd survive without it, but there's always that nagging doubt.
Also, we seem to have steadily gone from "the events in the show were suboptimal" to "the events in the show were utter bullshit". Not sure if this is an evolution-slash-corruption of the character (by the powers she's steadily ingesting?), or just the Author speaking more and more openly. ;-]
I mean, one might argue that these changes are all for the better... but from the perspective of the affected ponies, it might be anything but. Remember - "normal" is a societal agreement, and if you're in a position of power, "normal" is whatever you want it to be (so long as you have the restraint to steer the public gradually and over long time spans - both of which Celestia has in spades). These are small things, all things considered (well, Tirek being murdered being not-so-small), but there's going to be negative feedback nonetheless.
For all intents and purposes, Alicorn!MoonDancer will probably be perceived as a threat - if not as a villain outright - purely because she's an Alicorn that dares speak her mind in opposition. It doesn't take a brain bigger than a diamond dog's to figure out that a princess apparent speaking out against you is bad news for your reign's future prospects. She doesn't even need to make any overt moves towards a power grab - her sole existence undermines Equestria's internal stability. Ponies will see her as a princess, regardless of what she claims - that alone is dangerous enough, and not even Alicorn!MoonDancer will be able to escape this situation should she want to (something she's acutely aware of, judging by her musings on the matter).
I can see an out, however - though this involves her friends ascending to pull it off. If she can produce Alicorns at the drop of a hat, being an Alicorn is no longer special... Though that has risks of its own, much because of the same reasons as stated above - if being an Alicorn is not special, then what about Celestia, Luna, Cadence - and, eventually, Twilight? Though if you have ten brain cells that're functioning correctly together, you'll see that each has a quality besides being an Alicorn (manipulating the sun + having actual long-running experience in the field; manipulating the moon and the night sky + having long-running experience of being the Shield and Sword of Equestria; being actually tied to the Crystal Empire's well-being; and being a national hero* - respectively) that maybe doesn't justify them, but at the very least excuses them.
* though that last bit? now that we're seeing these threats go away one by one, will she actually rack up enough 'kills' to get there, now? An argument could be made that she's having her destiny robbed from her...
Um, no. You don't leave revenge opportunities walking around if you can help it. If you can take his essence, but he yet exists - he can somehow steal it back, I'm sure of it. For the same reason, you don't leave someone's child around to exact vengeance upon you when they come of age - you either take them in, or you destroy them on the spot.
I know it's a cold-hearted calculation, but if you're securing your own future, you have to make a choice: you either leave yourself open to all sorts of attacks, but retain your moral high ground while you're at it (see: Celestia), or you forego the moral high ground entirely and ruthlessly bend reality to your will.
Of course, no choice is black and white, so you'll end up taking the middle ground and generally being a huge hypocrite about it - that can't be helped, I suppose. But the choice comes out in the intent: are you serious enough to do everything it takes to secure your own, selfish future - or are you willing to leave yourself open so that you can give someone a second chance?
In a way, this sort of dictates whether you're a hero, or a villain. Morality is relative, and if anyone tells you otherwise - call them out on their bullshit. You will always have enemies, especially when you're powerful enough to be a chance - or a threat - solely because you exist. It doesn't come down to whether you're "good" or "bad" - it's really more about whether you're selfish, or selfless. "Good" and "bad" will be determined by those who're left to write the history books on you.
... that's what you get for offering people power without training their minds to handle said power. You get unpredictable results, is what you get. I'm fully expecting a fucking riot to happen, what with Bloom now having like five times the strength she had before today... Things will happen, and you won't be happy with the results - Bloom will fuck up royally, and it'll put your blip squarely on Twilight's radar. You don't just fuck around with the kid sister of one of her friends without her noticing, you know.
I'm sure Celestia is already getting some conflicting reports here and there, and the letter she's about to receive from Twilight in a day or two will only make her worry. And you don't want Celestia worrying, because she's exceedingly good at it - she'll be a pain to avoid once she takes a more active role... and it's not like you can exactly hide in the crowd yet... ;]
Besides... you think 'sense magic' is unique to you? I'd be willing to bet Celestia has the capability to focus on a particular thread to find you, what with the thousands of years of experience backing her up. She may be slow to wake, but once she's aware... she'll be impossible to stop.
And the way things are going, this is looking more and more like a confrontation - one you won't be walking away from.
Also, expect a CMC visitation next day. Seriously. You can't just involve one of them without getting the others in the care package. And you can't just expect to be able to tell them 'no', what with them being closely tied to the other Element Bearers... Let's just say that, with Bloom in, you dun goof'd.
Also, congratulations on getting your first proper disciple. Secondly, congratulations on awakening her enough to become her first proper filly crush. Tartarus has an empty cage, I hear...
I have to admit, the character is sliding down the slippery slope quite quickly - faster than I expected, to be honest. I guess it's true about picking up speed on the slope, eh? Much like skiing, except it's your morality doing the tricks.
Seriously - if you want this girl to retain some credibility as an antiheroine (because that's what she's obviously going for), you're going to have to pit her against a genuinely good character, and soon. Worse, she's going to have to win that battle, because losing it will just make her resent the character. If she wins, though, and then it dawns on her just who she fought, why she did it, and what she achieved... she's going to suffer a
HeroicVillanous BSoD, and [Gamer's Mind] be damned.It's what she needs, though.
Also, I wanted to go on record here: this story has quite the potential. It departs from the typical Gamer approach simply by putting a lot more slice-of-life stuff on equal footing w/ the asskicking, as well as adding completely-out-of-the-left-field elements that are new and fresh. I'm loving the little reveals (the big one is still a-comin'!), and character development actually happens (though it could use some work, as right now we're looking at leaps-and-bounds and not steady progress - and I'm not talking about the protagonist, since she's fine the way she's going). The sole fact that the protagonist is female - while not actually changing all that much, all things considered - adds a funny twist to the whole thing, as well.
Also, boobs. Boobs are good, natural, and very welcome. ;]
Dear Author - please don't let this story die. It's actually interesting in the long term, and that's all I really care about.
Though you might want to dial back on Canon-hate a bit, there. While taking action to prevent stuff is perfectly fine, launching into spiels about how things are dumb starts to feel like propaganda at some point.
I like this story a lot but I think the pacing is to fast. Moony keeps going from one crisis to another without rest. Not relaxing at all. Not building character and just grinding away like a loon. It's only been the first week of the show and most of these events didn't even happen till years later. I'm all for her getting better but doing it to fast just feels rushed. Perhaps some time skips or more slice of life between all these powerups would be better.
Seeing moony just relaxing and playing with her friends is my favorite parts. Pluse I don't think theirs a need now to deel with the minor caracters who never would even threaten her friends I the first place. Trixe film flam and gilda are not threat whatsoever. I km now it feels like I'm harping but I really do enjoy the story.