I would like to point out that you misspelled "subtlety" in your chapter title... unless it was intentional.

Weird...

After-hour teat time with Celestia...

...Just what kind of after-hour meetings does Celestia have with Cadence, and where can I sign up for one?

4306760
4306817

Wow, two of the more embarrassing, yet silly, typos

I wish I had some sort of an explanation for the second one...

I think I'm gonna have a hard time recovering from that comment...

Thanks for pointing those out!

Hahaha Celestia's Teat Time funniest typo I've seen in a while.
Anyways can't wait for more!

He's going to be pisssed when they tell him they ripped him from his own planet.

4306909
Very much so

4306828 just pretend It never existed xD also awesome chapter

That was heartwarming.

The archaic Grammar Nazi sez...

‘Cadence. We request of thee’s attention for a matter of grave importance.

just doesn't sound right...or even left (ha ha).

Alt version 1: ‘Cadence. We request thy attention for a matter of grave importance.
Alt version 2: ‘Cadence. We request of thee, thy attention for a matter of grave importance.
Alt version 3: ‘Cadence. We would'st requesteth of thee, thy attention for a matter of grave importance.

4306828
Best way to recover, that I've found, make it a running gag

Cadence - "There are several times that I've had to have after-hour teat times with Celestia."

MC - "...Teat time?"

Cadence - "?! What are you talking about? I said 'Tea time'!"

MC - "But-"

Cadence - "'Tea.' 'Time.'"

Good. I want to see this updated.

Also, did he lose his phone, or not? Did he ever pick it up from the snow?

Please say he did! i want him to have it :3

This is seriously so well written. I need more of this story!

A few facts my friend.
One: you'll die of dehydration before you starve, human body can fo quite a bit without food, and you get use to the hunger pains(went a week without eating for reasons).
Second: a sprung ankle isn't that bad, People have walked miles with broken bones.
Third: don't you dare have him eat hay! Hay is VARY bad for humans.
keep up the descriptive writing

Damn. Keep up the good work!

Awesome story so far. Look forward to more.

Damn. This story is very well done. Nice descriptions and a smooth flow. Keep up the good work! Also can't wait for rage man to rage over 'kidnapping.'

It's 'tea' time doktor!

Love it! I'm especially happy with your use of shifting perspectives. It gives a more rounded approach to the story and shows what goes on outside of the one character's view. I look forward to more.

This is interesting! ^^

I'm not saying it was aliens, but it was aliens.

Can't wait to see their reaction when he wants a chicken sandwich.

4311307
img4.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20111008155839/mlpfanart/images/0/05/Princess_Luna_shrug.jpeg

If I had to take a guess, though, I'd say somewhere within the southern portion of the Everfree Forest-- away from Ponyville.

4306966 Oh...? That sounds promising. Don't disappoint me.

You have some interesting word choices in this one.

Of course, that would’ve meant receiving some ill-gotten scrutiny from her deplorable followers.

Celestia doesn't like her followers?

The Crystal Empire, gracefully recovered from the ousted tyrant king of shadows...

I'm not sure I've ever before heard that descriptor used for that particular kind of act. It doesn't feel quite right but I'm not sure what you actually wanted to put there.

...and her lovingly joyous husband Shining Armor.

Another set that just sounds off to me. I can see "joyously loving," since he loves her so much, but the reverse makes him sound like a particularly joyous individual. Shining strikes me as amicable, but not really what I'd think of as "joyous." (Now on the other hand...)

“No time for formalities, Cadence,” Celestia implied, shaking her head.

No, she said it. "Implied" means that she tried to get her meaning across without directly telling what that meaning was.

...save for the footfalls of Celestia...

"Hooffalls" or something similar. Celestia doesn't have feet. (Sorry, using "foot" or "feet" for anything pony-related is a pet peeve of mine.)

...I noticed something that I possibly could never have dreamed. ... Why I was even dreaming of a horse before my death...

The sentences are nearly back to back and seem to contradict each other. I can understand addled thoughts while freezing, but the rest of the narrative around these sentences is pretty lucid so that shouldn't be it.

The horse, in question, had a dark blue coat and a darker, irradiating mane and tail flowing to the side in a sparkling trance—similar to the night sky

I think you meant "radiating" for the first, since that means "spreading out and around." That still seems like it would be a strange word choice since Luna's mane flows in pretty much one direction unless it happens to be forming an actual halo in this scene. The second word, "trance," I don't know. What were you trying to say there?

Oddly enough, I could smell the pungent scent of sweet mint and lotus extract from her breath.

"Pungent" means the odor is really strong. I'm not sure you meant to have Luna's breath be extremely minty and flowery.

...further appalling me into a deeper euphoric trance...

"Pulling." "Appalling" is the same as "awful" or "horrible."

This tore me out of my delusional euphoric trance...

He's far too lucid to be considered "delusional." Unless he's seeing things that clearly aren't there, or thinks that he is (you haven't given any indication that either is happening). He's just a little out of it - "semi-conscious" or something like that.

...the golden pendant that slouched across her neck.

Unless Celestia is wearing something different, then the normal regalia the princesses wear isn't a pendant. A pendant is a small piece that dangles front and center from the necklace itself. "Neckpiece," "yoke," or - my favorite - "torc" would probably be better choices. And I suppose "slouching" is technically true, but that also implies an actual bad posture or even laziness that I don't think you meant the jewelry to have. "Settled," "nestled," or some other word that has to do with "resting gently or neatly."

Honestly, with these kinds of things, it sounds like you're trying a bit to hard to make this poetic. There is definitely a difference between your writing for the princesses and for Mark. I fully support expanding your writing skills and vocabulary, but you might want to double-check your more flowery words/phrases. Don't want to make this too flowery.

What 4312440 said.
You have to know how to use a thesaurus before you spill its contents all over your writing, bub. Else, you're just making a pretentious fool of yourself.

“There’s someone out there in the north… ALONE??”

Cadence seems to be a little too touchy with an unknown creature.

I can't help but wonder what fate befell Erin...