In a wasteland of ice and ash, a nameless man tries to find himself. With the help of a team of eight ponies, he might just accomplish that goal. However, in this wasteland, nothing is certain.
7901953 Not really looking for an editor anymore; for better or worse. I've pretty much resigned myself to the fact that I will likely write this entire story, and any other stories, myself. The main reason for this is that, In my experience, I've come to find good free editors are a rare breed. People that I manage to convince or people who offer to edit my story usually don't stay committed, as they usually have other things they need to deal with in life aside from my horse words. This was understandable, and I hold no hard feelings, but it is kind of annoying when you spend all this time getting someone to edit your work and they quit one chapter in.
In the end, I decided that looking for an editor, or accepting offers to edit my story was too much of a hassle and that I was better off just doing it myself; for better or for worse. This is especially true since I only write as a hobby, and I'm not entirely a serious author.
So, yes, thank you for your offer, but I'm not looking for an editor. However, I could use a prereader, if you are interested. I'd be nice to have someone point out my insanity before I make a fool of myself.
Hiya awesome story i really like it. And as for dislikes, one thing which irked me a bit is how Daring is so much of a Bitchy Ms. Bitchinton and holding the idiot ball a bit too much. Her mistakes have a bit of a feeling to be forced, and if she really would be this much of a loose cannon why would she be on this expedition... unless she is there just because the crew are fans and consider her to be greater than she is.
But anyway to me that would not merit a dislike! Just a possible answer which i thought to drop here.
However, I will defend my position on this one, agree or disagree if you like.
I've always found Daring as a character to be a bit hotheaded, impulsive, stubborn and arrogant, much like Rainbow Dash in a way. The whole "I don't need your help" attitude sort of set that off for me. I'd imagine with an attitude like that, she would have been bound to make a lot of mistakes in this sort of scenario, so that's the way I wrote it.
Of course, I understand that she's has been holding the 'idiot ball' (as you say) almost a little too much as of late, and it might be looking like she is completely inept; which she obviously isn't. I find this to be a very valid criticism. However, I wouldn't worry. I do not plan for her to hold the idiot ball forever. Even someone as stubborn as Daring has to realize that she's been making too many mistakes, something she's started to reflect in the latest chapter.
That's my defence of it, again you are free to agree or disagree.
7903290 Sorry, I meant it's bullshit in the way that it's overpowered Not that it is fake or uncool or anything of the like
If you were a storm trooper then you'd think The Force is bullshit That doesn't mean it isn't terrifying and powerful or that you would love to be able to use yourself
7903423 I was wondering when someone would ask this question, as I know I had not made it clear as to why Spike has no sort of mask to protect him from the toxic ash, much less what Spike's backstory is to begin with. All I can say to this is 'to be explained.' Haven't quite found a spot in the story where it'd be relevent to bring up.
7904500 Already explained why I do editing myself nowadays below. However, I do not mind having a few pre-readers on call; people who will point out my insanity. If anyone is interested in pre-reading, just PM me and we will talk about it.
7903709 You've figured it out, plz abuse this knowledge to its highest degree End all chapters in friendship, end all chapters with magic End all chapters with cliffhangers
7905331 Hey, whatever floats your boat man. I just wasn't sure if you were if you were saying something about John Doe as a character or what.
In my mind, a Bambie is one of two things: A newbie in regards of survival; as in DayZ. Or Bambie as in Like Bambi in the disney film. I wasn't sure which you were calling him, or if you were calling him something else. I was genuinely curious and was hoping you would have actually told me, then you passed up my question and went on to say 'bambie is my nigger.' At that point, I just laughed my ass off and proclaimed 'I'm done,' figuring you were just trolling me at that point.
7905657 oo ok I know what happen, I was on ch 5 when I said that and by the time you asked I think I was on 7-8 and by the time I got to 9 it just looked like I was ignoring you .+ your replies shows up only on ch9 so never saw it till I got to that chapter.
MOAR!
Plox....
Cliffhangers are not magic and ARE bullshit. Thank you for writing more and not giving us one.
Well, they're fucked
This was great!!!
But man it SUCKS having to wait months for updates. But just glad it actually does update, unlike other stories...
Good luck and Have fun.
7901953 Not really looking for an editor anymore; for better or worse. I've pretty much resigned myself to the fact that I will likely write this entire story, and any other stories, myself. The main reason for this is that, In my experience, I've come to find good free editors are a rare breed. People that I manage to convince or people who offer to edit my story usually don't stay committed, as they usually have other things they need to deal with in life aside from my horse words. This was understandable, and I hold no hard feelings, but it is kind of annoying when you spend all this time getting someone to edit your work and they quit one chapter in.
In the end, I decided that looking for an editor, or accepting offers to edit my story was too much of a hassle and that I was better off just doing it myself; for better or for worse. This is especially true since I only write as a hobby, and I'm not entirely a serious author.
So, yes, thank you for your offer, but I'm not looking for an editor. However, I could use a prereader, if you are interested. I'd be nice to have someone point out my insanity before I make a fool of myself.
On another note, there are three more dislikes and no reasons as to why.
Can't improve if you don't provide criticism. All I get from this is that you don't like the story because of reasons, very unproductive.
7901242
Cliffhangers = Bullshit
Magic = Bullshit
therefor
Cliffhangers = Magic
7902280
Hiya awesome story i really like it. And as for dislikes, one thing which irked me a bit is how Daring is so much of a Bitchy Ms. Bitchinton and holding the idiot ball a bit too much. Her mistakes have a bit of a feeling to be forced, and if she really would be this much of a loose cannon why would she be on this expedition... unless she is there just because the crew are fans and consider her to be greater than she is.
But anyway to me that would not merit a dislike! Just a possible answer which i thought to drop here.
7902845 Thank fucking god, an actual comment.
However, I will defend my position on this one, agree or disagree if you like.
I've always found Daring as a character to be a bit hotheaded, impulsive, stubborn and arrogant, much like Rainbow Dash in a way. The whole "I don't need your help" attitude sort of set that off for me. I'd imagine with an attitude like that, she would have been bound to make a lot of mistakes in this sort of scenario, so that's the way I wrote it.
Of course, I understand that she's has been holding the 'idiot ball' (as you say) almost a little too much as of late, and it might be looking like she is completely inept; which she obviously isn't. I find this to be a very valid criticism. However, I wouldn't worry. I do not plan for her to hold the idiot ball forever. Even someone as stubborn as Daring has to realize that she's been making too many mistakes, something she's started to reflect in the latest chapter.
That's my defence of it, again you are free to agree or disagree.
7902785 But what about those who believe in magic?
7902263 woo new chapter, also I'm really liking the story. It's going really well, and your characters reactions are believable.
7903290 Sorry, I meant it's bullshit in the way that it's overpowered
Not that it is fake or uncool or anything of the like
If you were a storm trooper then you'd think The Force is bullshit
That doesn't mean it isn't terrifying and powerful or that you would love to be able to use yourself
7901825 This made me laugh way to hard.
7903383 No need to apologize, I was just going along with the joke. Least I thought I was... ug, this is awkward.
7903390 I am terrible with subtext
7903423 I was wondering when someone would ask this question, as I know I had not made it clear as to why Spike has no sort of mask to protect him from the toxic ash, much less what Spike's backstory is to begin with. All I can say to this is 'to be explained.' Haven't quite found a spot in the story where it'd be relevent to bring up.
7903642
I don't get it. Can someone explain this to me?
7902785
Magic = Friendship
Therefore,
Friendship = Bullshit
Friendship = Cliffhangers
7903703 The math on this is startlingly correct... Friendship is cliffhangers.
7903937
I'm done.
7904500 Already explained why I do editing myself nowadays below. However, I do not mind having a few pre-readers on call; people who will point out my insanity. If anyone is interested in pre-reading, just PM me and we will talk about it.
7903709 You've figured it out, plz abuse this knowledge to its highest degree
End all chapters in friendship, end all chapters with magic
End all chapters with cliffhangers
7904754
This is heresy.
I like it.
All chapter for now on will be ended in friendship, no one will know the difference.
7904767 Bullshit...#wink
I wish daring lost that gun some how
7903669 john doe
johndoedoe = Deer
Deer= Bambi
7903993 well i like the name
7905331 Hey, whatever floats your boat man. I just wasn't sure if you were if you were saying something about John Doe as a character or what.
In my mind, a Bambie is one of two things: A newbie in regards of survival; as in DayZ. Or Bambie as in Like Bambi in the disney film. I wasn't sure which you were calling him, or if you were calling him something else. I was genuinely curious and was hoping you would have actually told me, then you passed up my question and went on to say 'bambie is my nigger.' At that point, I just laughed my ass off and proclaimed 'I'm done,' figuring you were just trolling me at that point.
Still good to know, thanks for sharing.
7905657 oo ok I know what happen, I was on ch 5 when I said that and by the time you asked I think I was on 7-8 and by the time I got to 9 it just looked like I was ignoring you .+ your replies shows up only on ch9 so never saw it till I got to that chapter.
7905695 It's fine, it was pretty funny, so no worries.
Aww... Darn i thought this was the chapter before the final chapter,
https://youtu.be/9fNrJMkTWEE
appropriate song
Good story. Tracked and liked.
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