Sunset Shimmers has made her return and has one thing in mind, revenge! She will take over all of Equestria, but first she has to deal with the princess and their friends.
4561032 thanks the reason the cadie scene wasn't longer was because it wasn't the main focus of the chapter but I'll see what I can do for future chapters.
Okay, two things. Firstly, I don't think you need to tell us what Carousel Boutique is. We all know by now. Secondly, needs an extra hit on the return key between the first two paragraphs. Now, to the content...
Is Sunset a fucking idiot? There are three fillies could walk in at any moment, so unless Fluttershy has, I dunno, knocked them out, then it's a big risk acting now. Even if she took Rarity to her cottage, I'm pretty sure Sweetie Belle would raise the alarm. Then that's Sunset's plans over.
4561032 thanks the reason the cadie scene wasn't longer was because it wasn't the main focus of the chapter but I'll see what I can do for future chapters.
Okay, two things. Firstly, I don't think you need to tell us what Carousel Boutique is. We all know by now. Secondly, needs an extra hit on the return key between the first two paragraphs. Now, to the content...
Is Sunset a fucking idiot? There are three fillies could walk in at any moment, so unless Fluttershy has, I dunno, knocked them out, then it's a big risk acting now. Even if she took Rarity to her cottage, I'm pretty sure Sweetie Belle would raise the alarm. Then that's Sunset's plans over.
Still, break that posh speaking bitch in!
4561317 hehehe fear not, everything is as planned I assure you that my marshmallow waifu will be broken in properly on the next chapter
Y'know, I find it ironic that your profile pic is of Cadence in a dom outfit, yet you're writing her as a sub.
4563849 there's a reason for why cadie has a dom outfit, it will all be explained later
Can I expect Cadence to somehow Do a Role reversal and a happy ending with Shining Armor getting home to see Sunset as the best slave?
4602177 perhaps as an alternate ending but not for the main ending
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Darn it...
Well if this ends with Sunset winning...
When do you think the next chapter will be out?
4700645 I think I finally have a good idea of how to do the chapter so hopefully before the 23rd of July