While I love this story, I really hate when stories have celestia like this. The one that know exactly what's up, but manipulates everyone, like the bit about mint and her attitude about it, and the stuff between her and Luna, I just had the urge to punch her right in the snout.
I mean the only time I'm fine with this is in the stories I know she's gonna get a for of comeuppance for it.
I apologize for the rant I know it's your story and you write it however you want, I just wanted you to know my only real issue with the story.
Well, I actually agree with you; I've noticed a consistent trait of Celestia being in control of the situation and the mastermind behind a few things. However, I assure you that you're going to be surprised with how things go for her.
Let me guess. Either Celestia spanked the living her outta her, she's being forced to wear a vibrator, or both. Frankly, right now, all I want to know is what Celestia is doing to Luna. That's all I want to know now. I don't care about anything else for the moment.
It did not take long for Celestia’s subjects to properly set up the panic table in the middle of her garden.
You may have misspelled picnic table. If not, then, I may need to go into my panic room and re-evaluate my life. This was the only mistake that stood out to me. Wonderful story other than the mistake. Keep on writin' mah friend, keep on writin'.
Also, would you taste my soup? There is something wrong with it.
SEE FOLKS, THIS IS WHAT I'M TELLING ABOUT!!! CELESTIA( MOLESTIA BY THE LOOKS OF IT) CAN'T BE TRUSTED. STAND YOUR GROUND TROOPS DON'T GIVE INTO HER MOTHER-LIKE, SOFT, ANGELIC VOICE!!!! Other than that, good read bro
I noticed a few minor errors as I read, nothing that could potentially ruin the reading experience just yet. That said, there is one more notable error in this chapter
It did not take long for Celestia’s subjects to properly set up the panic table
Another dragon? Or perhaps...dragoness?
Is Spike about to see
or doEmber, I hope?Celestia, have you been sexually tormenting your sister again?
While I love this story, I really hate when stories have celestia like this. The one that know exactly what's up, but manipulates everyone, like the bit about mint and her attitude about it, and the stuff between her and Luna, I just had the urge to punch her right in the snout.
I mean the only time I'm fine with this is in the stories I know she's gonna get a for of comeuppance for it.
I apologize for the rant I know it's your story and you write it however you want, I just wanted you to know my only real issue with the story.
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Well, I actually agree with you; I've noticed a consistent trait of Celestia being in control of the situation and the mastermind behind a few things. However, I assure you that you're going to be surprised with how things go for her.
Oh this better be Ember! XD
Let me guess. Either Celestia spanked the living her outta her, she's being forced to wear a vibrator, or both. Frankly, right now, all I want to know is what Celestia is doing to Luna. That's all I want to know now. I don't care about anything else for the moment.
You could replace the Character Tag (excluding Spike) with the one in green named Other.
You may have misspelled picnic table. If not, then, I may need to go into my panic room and re-evaluate my life. This was the only mistake that stood out to me. Wonderful story other than the mistake. Keep on writin' mah friend, keep on writin'.
Also, would you taste my soup? There is something wrong with it.
Always with the Cliffhanger's
SEE FOLKS, THIS IS WHAT I'M TELLING ABOUT!!! CELESTIA( MOLESTIA BY THE LOOKS OF IT) CAN'T BE TRUSTED. STAND YOUR GROUND TROOPS DON'T GIVE INTO HER MOTHER-LIKE, SOFT, ANGELIC VOICE!!!! Other than that, good read bro
I noticed a few minor errors as I read, nothing that could potentially ruin the reading experience just yet. That said, there is one more notable error in this chapter
Did you mean to say ‘picnic table’?