Number Crunch is an awkward pony in a big city. He's lived there for quite some time now. After some consideration, he's decided to come back to Equestria, bringing along a special guest...
Not bad. Granted, there's not much posted yet, but so far I like the style. The only big error I can see for far is that you occasionally slip into present tense here and there, so when you do the clean up, make sure to watch for that in particular.
I'll try my best to write more soon! But real life is slowly catching up on me and I'm going to have to start college next week, so my free time will be cut down quite a bit...
And, um... I'm not good with schedules so please expect sporadic updates
Well... uh... Sorry but there's definitely going to bed some mature scenes sometime in the future because like the main character in the story, I am also a HUGE pervert...
Also, I just want to thank everyone who has taken the time to look at my story, despite how poorly it's written. I'm not AP, but I try my best. Lastly, I'm sorry I haven't said anything. I'm terrible like that. But trust me when I say that I read all of your comments.
Please do continue. I eagerly await more.
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Not bad. Granted, there's not much posted yet, but so far I like the style. The only big error I can see for far is that you occasionally slip into present tense here and there, so when you do the clean up, make sure to watch for that in particular.
please continue
You always see a human male with a female pony.
This right here...this is good.
(Clicks watch button)
I like this concept and I really like your style. I look forward to more!
It's a change from the usual.
Ponies don't have that much trouble with cups... i20.photobucket.com/albums/b217/strangething/ponies/Lyra/lyra-cup.png
My, my you have my interest good sir please proceed.
Not bad. Not bad at all
I'm curious where you're going with this. I'll keep an eye on it.
It's a nice change of pace from (often unlikeable) male human with female pony. I like your style so far.
I am wary of the sex tag, but intrigued by the concept.
Interesting. I hope the next chapter provides more, but I shall definitely track
Link to the GTA IV mod in the cover?
3772606 That's real life it's a new GTA DLC
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I'll try my best to write more soon! But real life is slowly catching up on me and I'm going to have to start college next week, so my free time will be cut down quite a bit...
And, um... I'm not good with schedules so please expect sporadic updates
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Right, sorry! I'm not exactly the most talented writer by any means, but I'll try my best!
Also, feel free to point out on any errors that you can find and PM/comment on it. It would mean a lot!
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Uh... no pressure... right?
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Although it's been done before, I'd like to explore this concept.
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Thank you!
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Well... uh... Sorry but there's definitely going to bed some mature scenes sometime in the future because like the main character in the story, I am also a HUGE pervert...
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Also, I just want to thank everyone who has taken the time to look at my story, despite how poorly it's written. I'm not AP, but I try my best.
Lastly, I'm sorry I haven't said anything. I'm terrible like that. But trust me when I say that I read all of your comments.
Once again, thank you!
3774836 A shame but its quite all right RL comes first.
I don't always like romance stories, but when I do it's because they're good ones.
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You sir got my fav and I will be watching.
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After you're done with this story maybe could write a spin-off featuring a male griffon x female human couple we don't see much of that here.
3781400 I agree with him.