• Published 10th Jan 2014
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Meet the Parents - beatbox9988



Number Crunch is an awkward pony in a big city. He's lived there for quite some time now. After some consideration, he's decided to come back to Equestria, bringing along a special guest...

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Comments ( 7 )

Reading sex scenes by people who haven't had sex before is always an entertaining experience. There were a couple hiccups here and there, but nothing too major, so all in all I'd say it's was a success. Good job. The only thing that really stood out to me was this line right here:

He continued to wriggle inside her with newfound enthusiasm, and he brushed against her cervix.

Either Crunchy has a really, really long tongue, like, long enough that when they're kissing he can taste her tonsils, or she wasn't very aroused while he was showing her his oral dexterity.

P.S. Please disregard the fact that Elizabeth had to taste her own ejaculate and Number Crunch didn't. I've never had sex before so I wouldn't know.

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wow.. really.. no shit :ajbemused:

Hahahah I lost my shit at Crunch's reaction.

Suffer pony! Suffer for our enjoyment :trollestia:

Crunch, you poor, poor bastard. This is gonna end with some major embarrassment.:trollestia:

Putting it in a new group is good stuff beatbox but you're still going to have to give us moar :pinkiehappy:

Shame this story is dead, seemed like it could've been good.

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