The CMC just seem a bit too young to be deciding their sexual orientation just like that. Reminds me of an article/story I read of a 5 yr old boy telling his mother he wants to be gay.
I have to ask, although I don't think I really want to know the answer: are human females' heats similar to this in intensity? I don't think I would be able to put up with my hypothetical girlfriend freaking out like this.
3770699 Never heard of one, myself. But at the same time, I'm not a girl, and I've heard of "being in heat" in relation to females, so I just wanted to make sure.
3770699 3770363 That's a surprising complicated question.
Human females do have something like a heat(estrus) monthly. It is that 24 to 72 hr window before ovulation. It's milder than animals with sessional estrus, hence it's largely unobserved. But during that time, research has shown women are much more sexually receptive, their behavior changes some, and they are attracted to smells differently.
Of course this varies greatly from woman to woman in intensity.
3775374 That was a little experiment on my part. I tried using slightly different language with each of them. I wanted to use the words that they would use. Belle is more bodice-ripper language. Applebloom is more anatomical. Scoots is a little vulgar.
My own style leans more to bodice-ripper fiction. I think hard "word bombs" jolt the reader out of the flow. But I wanted to try something.
Edit: that ch 3 C-bomb slipped through the editing process. It's gone now.
3860479 Yeah, except it's been mentioned in great detail how the ponies go at different times and lengths because of how much sun they get. It mostly bothered me with the overblown Pinkie Pie scene, not really elsewhere. Felt somehow forced to have Pinkie in there to complete the mane six POV's, especially on how OOC Pinkie felt. At least in show canon, she is the one who uses the most euphemisms for even everyday stuff, but here she's the one with the most direct, coarse language. I can see her being hectic about it, and her random self, but the outright nympho stuff... meh. Not my idea of Pinkie in heat.
5981043 It's more about tone, like if your talking to someone and you can't see them but from the tone in their voice you can just tell they're smirking like an idiot.
Yep, I think this was well written. Lots of passion along with uncertainty and newness. And yet they still talk like the CMC we know, which is great.
I was just wondering whether there was a cutie mark in "bucking", as in providing sexual services. But, you know, it seems like the way you've written it, everypony understands that being in heat just drives you a little crazy, and that it's completely natural and acceptable to have sex with multiple partners and multiple genders. But there's still that concept of "special somepony", and I imagine there's possessiveness and jealousy that intensify the more time and energy you invest into nurturing a good relationship with your special somepony. I guess this is an area where Hasbro isn't going to establish too detailed a canon, although Lauren Faust, when questioned, did say that ponies conceived and gestated just like we would expect based upon the horses of Earth.
Great chapter, I enjoy the fact that there is more than just clop behind it. Keep up the good work!
Need more. Please keep going. This chapter was more cute than erotic, and it was nice for a change.
Aww, that's so cute. Scoots and Rumble are together and they both have an extra heat buddy as well.
The CMC just seem a bit too young to be deciding their sexual orientation just like that. Reminds me of an article/story I read of a 5 yr old boy telling his mother he wants to be gay.
This reminds me very heavily of Kodomo no Jikan... I like.
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Well, I figured it'd be boring to read another batch of clop after the previous chapters. Plus I got lazy...
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Well either way it was still great!
I have to ask, although I don't think I really want to know the answer: are human females' heats similar to this in intensity? I don't think I would be able to put up with my hypothetical girlfriend freaking out like this.
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Do we as a species even have such a thing as a heat cycle? Cause if we do, I sure haven't noticed.
3770699 Never heard of one, myself. But at the same time, I'm not a girl, and I've heard of "being in heat" in relation to females, so I just wanted to make sure.
“Only if I’m allowed to watch,” HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA
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That's a surprising complicated question.
Human females do have something like a heat(estrus) monthly. It is that 24 to 72 hr window before ovulation. It's milder than animals with sessional estrus, hence it's largely unobserved. But during that time, research has shown women are much more sexually receptive, their behavior changes some, and they are attracted to smells differently.
Of course this varies greatly from woman to woman in intensity.
Hey rocinante how many more chapters do you have left to go or do you not have an ending in mind for this story
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One, maybe two. Probably one.
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That was a little experiment on my part. I tried using slightly different language with each of them. I wanted to use the words that they would use.
Belle is more bodice-ripper language.
Applebloom is more anatomical.
Scoots is a little vulgar.
My own style leans more to bodice-ripper fiction. I think hard "word bombs" jolt the reader out of the flow. But I wanted to try something.
Edit: that ch 3 C-bomb slipped through the editing process. It's gone now.
I don't get how something can be so innocently cute and mindblowingly orgasmicly sexy at the same time.
3775465 I'd say your experiment was quite successful, the three fillies come off quite well in the styles you decided to use. Good job.
I congratulate you on a job well done. This was written very "Cleanly."
3860479 Yeah, except it's been mentioned in great detail how the ponies go at different times and lengths because of how much sun they get. It mostly bothered me with the overblown Pinkie Pie scene, not really elsewhere. Felt somehow forced to have Pinkie in there to complete the mane six POV's, especially on how OOC Pinkie felt. At least in show canon, she is the one who uses the most euphemisms for even everyday stuff, but here she's the one with the most direct, coarse language. I can see her being hectic about it, and her random self, but the outright nympho stuff... meh. Not my idea of Pinkie in heat.
How can you hear a facial expression?
5981043 It's more about tone, like if your talking to someone and you can't see them but from the tone in their voice you can just tell they're smirking like an idiot.
Heh, I like Scootaloo's attitude in this.
Apple Bloom had her moment with Rumble
Scootaloo had her moment with Rumble
Sweetie Belle didn't have her moment with Rumble at all.
You broke my heart and killed my boner...
Downvoted.
3770699 The human female I was with the longest would have the highest sexual desire right around the time she ovulated, which makes sense.
Yep, I think this was well written. Lots of passion along with uncertainty and newness. And yet they still talk like the CMC we know, which is great.
I was just wondering whether there was a cutie mark in "bucking", as in providing sexual services. But, you know, it seems like the way you've written it, everypony understands that being in heat just drives you a little crazy, and that it's completely natural and acceptable to have sex with multiple partners and multiple genders. But there's still that concept of "special somepony", and I imagine there's possessiveness and jealousy that intensify the more time and energy you invest into nurturing a good relationship with your special somepony. I guess this is an area where Hasbro isn't going to establish too detailed a canon, although Lauren Faust, when questioned, did say that ponies conceived and gestated just like we would expect based upon the horses of Earth.