Oh one more thing, you might want to change the fact that they are in fourth grade, could have your story taken down since it is TECHNICALLY pedophilia, but kind of backwards just be careful
3542805 Well I plan to have this story follow Dreamy's maturity throughout his powers. There will be time skips at various points to show him developing, rather than staying a 13 year old colt. Besides, there is a crap ton worse than that concern posted around the site, so I should be safe.
Also, it's 6 chapters in, and I don't feel like re-writing it all just to change that little detail.
As a dreamwalker, Dreamy Gaze is in a position where he could be very disruptive to the system, depending on whether he develops significant defenses against mental tampering. More so if, at some point, he touches the mind of a dreamwalker likely more powerful than himself: Princess Luna's. It's true that she can't perform her dream magic unassisted currently, but we also know that her potential is still there. Even if he doesn't meet her though, the realisation that his mind has been/is being tampered with could turn him against Equestria...
3550813 Well even if he did find out about such manipulations, there is still the fact that they might continue influencing him. Unless he managed to destroy the source of the corruption, which I find extremely unlikely as it would probably be under heavy guard. Also, he's just one pony.
At this point in the story, most knowledge of Luna's abilities have been forgotten, as I was informed symbols reflecting the power of females in Equestrian history were destroyed or erased. That's why Dreamy and the others haven't heard of any other dream walkers before, Luna's ability to do so was scrapped from the history books.
Besides, his father is far more disciplined in mind control techniques at this point, and he seems perfectly fine with the whole ordeal. Also, I find it hard to believe that Dreamy would go against a system that puts him near the top of the social hierarchy: Power, Fame, Sex. He has nothing to gain and everything to lose.
3553352 All true. It probably would need to start out as more of a stubborn angry reaction; plus there's also the fact that, years after it happened, still hardly anypony knows about it. Or perhaps even anyone, since we can't yet tell how many conspirators were involved in the original corruption scheme!
3554223 Well apparently Fleur De Lis was one of the traitors, so there were actual females willing to submit before the country fell into corruption. Not sure why. Maybe they thought they could earn a place of prominence when they foresaw the end of the war. Maybe they were just sluts with no shame or self respect?
Besides, most ponies are apparently named after their talents. Dreamy Gaze needs to actually be within visual sight of his target, unlike Luna who can enter dreams from anywhere. This would make reversing the mind trick over the whole country to be time consuming and immensely challenging.
3557501 Actually, for ponies, it's being transformed into a red. For the non-pony races, you'd need to ask NNC; I'd be surprised though if they acted very differently with the griffons than with Equestria, i.e. conquer and brainwash. Diamond Dogs? Those are small bands of thieves and slavers, probably not worth the effort to root out all of them.
Now that I think about it, they might make great bounty hunters for escaped slaves! Sure they're not very smart, but we've seen a pack of them run circles around the Elements of Harmony...
3558923 Well I asked non_creepy_nickname and he told me that since the griffins had to be forcefully conquered, all the women were brutally enslaved and the entire male population was wiped out. The Diamond Dogs occasionally snatch mares from Equestria to serve as their own slaves. If their masters are particularly fond of a kidnapped slave, they usually go in and slaughter the dogs to retrieve them. Otherwise, if they're expendable, the dogs are allowed to keep them.
3559081 Well the Zebras pay tribute to remain largely independent, and Equestria has been brain washed with magical corruption. Diamond Dogs and Griffins don't seem to have an easy way to subdue them, so they probably had to go with a more direct approach to quelling their uprising.
3559087 Well, the griffons can't have had too big a realm then. As you noted, they used magical corruption to break Equestria; that, and because ponies aren't used to fighting they could keep in power. Still, I do find it hard to believe they managed to wipe them out.
Addendum: By which I mean 'wipe them out completely'^^ Conquer a city and put all the males to the sword? Definitely! Do that, rinse, repeat. Yet there's probably some griffon forces hiding out and harassing the caribou whenever they can. Between those and Diamond Dog raiders that's probably one of the regular sources of dead caribou^^
And now I can totally see some young and cocky caribou warrior meet Iron Will, who subsequently twists him into a bretzel XD
3559087 Ah yes the Caribou empire nice to see what it was like right before its destruction and the subsequent Equine restoration that took place in this alternate universe.
3610816 Well if it isn't a white knight here to show off his huge morality erection. You might need to do some fact checking, first NCN isn't Smudge Proof, and he isn't the artist either.
3613578 It matters not if he is are not your all a bunch of heretical dead end nut jobs. However I believe that you are one of his accomplices who helps him create what might be the worst idea I've seen since my brother glued his head to a wall.
But you know I do apologize this is nothing to get bent out of shape about after all. Your all a bunch of dead end misgynostic losers who if you aren't crooks its only because you don't have the brains o be such. Your ideas are stupid and will all but fade in one years time. I'll never gain any sort of wide exceptance in any case. (and 850 followers on Tumblr is a complete joke an 8 year old taking pictures of his school lunch could do better) Just as soon as most of these wake and realize how horrible the thing you've created is.
And in any case your setting is rediculous and you have a better chance of winning the lottery a thousand times then this happening. Misogynistic Dumbass.
3512484 As for you oh creator of this eyesore I would once again suggest that you remove this story and put your writing abilities to better use. I would suggest writing about the canon ponies day to day lives instead.
Oh and to all of you do be a doll and stay in your dank little hole where you belong and out of my site.
3633325 Oh, I'm sorry, I missed the part where you apparently own this site or had any kind of control. Also, if you think porn, you know the setting full of numerous extremes in its genre, represents a persons true belief, you are an idiot. I am not a misogynist, I am a woman who happens to have an extreme domination fetish is all. It matters not if the ones dominating are male or female. I have made a rather decent amount of cash from drawing this series as well as other bits of pony clop material, the tumblr gained that many followers in a short amount of time as well. Also, this isn't MY setting, I just draw for it and get paid to do so. And this again is Porn, not draw with the intent of "This needs to happen" but "This is an extreme situation some may find kinky" report the story all you like but as far as I can see, this story and situation is fairly tame compared to some stories out there on this site. It doesn't matter if this gains wide acceptance as it will simply find its audience and go from there, this isn't TV where if your ratings fall you get pulled off the air.
Also, repeatedly reporting something that does not have anything against the rules in it, could end with your own account getting banned. Just so you know.
3633325 Well now... if you think that THIS is the worst kind of porn out there, you are very sadly mistaken. As both a Furry and a Brony, I've seen a hell of a lot worse than simply having S&M brainwashing and now I don't even blink in surprise at this kind of stuff anymore. Not when I've seen diaper fetishes, modular bodies, vore, guro, just to name a few.
Seriously, if you can't handle this kind of stuff then you shouldn't be looking for erotic work on the internet, your virgin eyes will be offended.
3610816 You will have it removed? Do you own the site? Are you a mod / admin? Do you have the power to delete my work on a whim?
In case you are unaware, mods have to APPROVE my work before it's allowed to be published on the site, so I don't think you're going to get much help out of them. Take your empty threats somewhere else.
3559077 Part of me is a bit disappointed that every Griffon male was killed. That means no more breading. And that means no more griffon wenches! I hope they kept a few for that purpose.
"I'm the first year Cart Bitch, and I'm to ensure the 4th grade students have everything they need to perform their classes." She introduced herself, "If you need any supplies, I go around at 7:30 am, 12:00pm, and 8:30 pm with my supply cart." she explained.
That’s a fitting name for someone who’s a little bitch boy
These updates are always worth the wait, keep it up bro
Oh one more thing, you might want to change the fact that they are in fourth grade, could have your story taken down since it is TECHNICALLY pedophilia, but kind of backwards just be careful
3542805
They're usually pretty lenient about that kind of stuff on this site.
3542805 Well I plan to have this story follow Dreamy's maturity throughout his powers. There will be time skips at various points to show him developing, rather than staying a 13 year old colt. Besides, there is a crap ton worse than that concern posted around the site, so I should be safe.
Also, it's 6 chapters in, and I don't feel like re-writing it all just to change that little detail.
I wonder where you'll take this.
As a dreamwalker, Dreamy Gaze is in a position where he could be very disruptive to the system, depending on whether he develops significant defenses against mental tampering. More so if, at some point, he touches the mind of a dreamwalker likely more powerful than himself: Princess Luna's. It's true that she can't perform her dream magic unassisted currently, but we also know that her potential is still there. Even if he doesn't meet her though, the realisation that his mind has been/is being tampered with could turn him against Equestria...
3550813 Well even if he did find out about such manipulations, there is still the fact that they might continue influencing him. Unless he managed to destroy the source of the corruption, which I find extremely unlikely as it would probably be under heavy guard. Also, he's just one pony.
At this point in the story, most knowledge of Luna's abilities have been forgotten, as I was informed symbols reflecting the power of females in Equestrian history were destroyed or erased. That's why Dreamy and the others haven't heard of any other dream walkers before, Luna's ability to do so was scrapped from the history books.
Besides, his father is far more disciplined in mind control techniques at this point, and he seems perfectly fine with the whole ordeal. Also, I find it hard to believe that Dreamy would go against a system that puts him near the top of the social hierarchy: Power, Fame, Sex. He has nothing to gain and everything to lose.
3553352
All true. It probably would need to start out as more of a stubborn angry reaction; plus there's also the fact that, years after it happened, still hardly anypony knows about it. Or perhaps even anyone, since we can't yet tell how many conspirators were involved in the original corruption scheme!
3554223 Well apparently Fleur De Lis was one of the traitors, so there were actual females willing to submit before the country fell into corruption. Not sure why. Maybe they thought they could earn a place of prominence when they foresaw the end of the war. Maybe they were just sluts with no shame or self respect?
Besides, most ponies are apparently named after their talents. Dreamy Gaze needs to actually be within visual sight of his target, unlike Luna who can enter dreams from anywhere. This would make reversing the mind trick over the whole country to be time consuming and immensely challenging.
3554251
Not to mention the rather unfortunate fate they've in store for any male who tries to rock the boat too hard...^^
3556768 From what I've been told, that generally involves being killed - The entire male Griffin populace, the occasional Diamond Dog kidnappers...
3557501
Actually, for ponies, it's being transformed into a red. For the non-pony races, you'd need to ask NNC; I'd be surprised though if they acted very differently with the griffons than with Equestria, i.e. conquer and brainwash. Diamond Dogs? Those are small bands of thieves and slavers, probably not worth the effort to root out all of them.
Now that I think about it, they might make great bounty hunters for escaped slaves! Sure they're not very smart, but we've seen a pack of them run circles around the Elements of Harmony...
3558923 Well I asked non_creepy_nickname and he told me that since the griffins had to be forcefully conquered, all the women were brutally enslaved and the entire male population was wiped out. The Diamond Dogs occasionally snatch mares from Equestria to serve as their own slaves. If their masters are particularly fond of a kidnapped slave, they usually go in and slaughter the dogs to retrieve them. Otherwise, if they're expendable, the dogs are allowed to keep them.
3559077
Huh. That's a lot more bloody than I'd imagine they would go for.
3559081 Well the Zebras pay tribute to remain largely independent, and Equestria has been brain washed with magical corruption. Diamond Dogs and Griffins don't seem to have an easy way to subdue them, so they probably had to go with a more direct approach to quelling their uprising.
3559087
Well, the griffons can't have had too big a realm then. As you noted, they used magical corruption to break Equestria; that, and because ponies aren't used to fighting they could keep in power.
Still, I do find it hard to believe they managed to wipe them out.
Addendum: By which I mean 'wipe them out completely'^^ Conquer a city and put all the males to the sword? Definitely! Do that, rinse, repeat. Yet there's probably some griffon forces hiding out and harassing the caribou whenever they can. Between those and Diamond Dog raiders that's probably one of the regular sources of dead caribou^^
And now I can totally see some young and cocky caribou warrior meet Iron Will, who subsequently twists him into a bretzel XD
3559087
Ah yes the Caribou empire nice to see what it was like right before its destruction and the subsequent Equine restoration that took place in this alternate universe.
3515335
Well if it isn't Smudge Proof the creator of this travesty known as the Fall of Equestria. Ha as if that could even possibly happen.
Why don't you do us all a favor and destroy all those pictures you drew and try and draw something less heretical you misogynistic pig.
3512248
and to the one who wrote this kindly remove it or I will have it removed, There is no place in the fandom for this eyesore of a universe.
3610816
Well if it isn't a white knight here to show off his huge morality erection. You might need to do some fact checking, first NCN isn't Smudge Proof, and he isn't the artist either.
Please, I need more!
3615276 Well they've been enslaved like the rest of the mares. Celestia is now a red collar, but Luna is a black collar.
3613578
It matters not if he is are not your all a bunch of heretical dead end nut jobs. However I believe that you are one of his accomplices who helps him create what might be the worst idea I've seen since my brother glued his head to a wall.
But you know I do apologize this is nothing to get bent out of shape about after all. Your all a bunch of dead end misgynostic losers who if you aren't crooks its only because you don't have the brains o be such. Your ideas are stupid and will all but fade in one years time. I'll never gain any sort of wide exceptance in any case. (and 850 followers on Tumblr is a complete joke an 8 year old taking pictures of his school lunch could do better) Just as soon as most of these wake and realize how horrible the thing you've created is.
And in any case your setting is rediculous and you have a better chance of winning the lottery a thousand times then this happening. Misogynistic Dumbass.
3512484
As for you oh creator of this eyesore I would once again suggest that you remove this story and put your writing abilities to better use. I would suggest writing about the canon ponies day to day lives instead.
Oh and to all of you do be a doll and stay in your dank little hole where you belong and out of my site.
Oh and I'm reporting this story again enjoy.
3633325
Oh, I'm sorry, I missed the part where you apparently own this site or had any kind of control. Also, if you think porn, you know the setting full of numerous extremes in its genre, represents a persons true belief, you are an idiot. I am not a misogynist, I am a woman who happens to have an extreme domination fetish is all. It matters not if the ones dominating are male or female. I have made a rather decent amount of cash from drawing this series as well as other bits of pony clop material, the tumblr gained that many followers in a short amount of time as well. Also, this isn't MY setting, I just draw for it and get paid to do so. And this again is Porn, not draw with the intent of "This needs to happen" but "This is an extreme situation some may find kinky" report the story all you like but as far as I can see, this story and situation is fairly tame compared to some stories out there on this site. It doesn't matter if this gains wide acceptance as it will simply find its audience and go from there, this isn't TV where if your ratings fall you get pulled off the air.
Also, repeatedly reporting something that does not have anything against the rules in it, could end with your own account getting banned. Just so you know.
3633325 Well now... if you think that THIS is the worst kind of porn out there, you are very sadly mistaken. As both a Furry and a Brony, I've seen a hell of a lot worse than simply having S&M brainwashing and now I don't even blink in surprise at this kind of stuff anymore. Not when I've seen diaper fetishes, modular bodies, vore, guro, just to name a few.
Seriously, if you can't handle this kind of stuff then you shouldn't be looking for erotic work on the internet, your virgin eyes will be offended.
3610816 You will have it removed? Do you own the site? Are you a mod / admin? Do you have the power to delete my work on a whim?
In case you are unaware, mods have to APPROVE my work before it's allowed to be published on the site, so I don't think you're going to get much help out of them. Take your empty threats somewhere else.
3559077 Part of me is a bit disappointed that every Griffon male was killed. That means no more breading. And that means no more griffon wenches! I hope they kept a few for that purpose.
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Well, that was a funny comment war.
3635741 Nah, this is the worst shit.
That’s a fitting name for someone who’s a little bitch boy