i thought it had great potential and im pretty sure i could'nt do better, but it still could have been WAy better but still a good (if unorthodox) idea
Well, this is my first comment here, and I have to say that this story was really good! Just don't listen to haters ;) There were a lot of spelling mistakes and that's why you get Mouctache Spikes out of 5. Anyway, keep up the good work and write more stories!
323531 Well, I'm not perect at proof-reading but I could try to correct some mistakes, as well as capilal lettes in middle of sentence thingie... (Had problem with it myslef, I often wrote a capital letter in middle of sentence :\). I will give it a shot and I will send it later today/tomorrow ;)
337596 You're worse at writing than the doctor who accidentally punched you for thirty minutes instead of giving you a circumcision. You write the same way you pee: out of a stupid vagina. These garbage stories you make are inhumane attempts at population control.
337751 Following your logic is like watching a kid play baseball. If he simply picked one direction and ran that way, you probably wouldn't even notice that he's retarded.
Now. This is a little diffrent. I WILL BE MAKING THE RULES! What I mean by that is this will be crazy. Really crazy.
Did you read that? I see ur point though. There is mistakes. Infact. When I finish editing that chapter, I will go ahead and add a scene that makes him lve her.
I cant believe on what i just wrote.
But then again I'm happy about what happened at da end ;)
huh
negativity isn't my thing so i will say this
i thought it had great potential and im pretty sure i could'nt do better, but it still could have been WAy better but still a good (if unorthodox) idea
315342
Read the rest of the storie much?
316064 I did although I'm not sure how that is supposed to have anything to do with my comment
316215
"It had been a long time since they were going out"
As you can see she kept it untill she was ready
316246 huh… how did I miss that?
316277
:D
People please.
If ur gonna track my storie rate it good?
thx
316306
What do you think of the baby scene?
Well, this is my first comment here, and I have to say that this story was really good!
Just don't listen to haters ;)
There were a lot of spelling mistakes and that's why you get
Mouctache Spikes out of 5.
Anyway, keep up the good work and write more stories!
323459
Are you good at proof reading?
If you are... could you redo Chapter 1 for me and send me it PM? I give credit!
318998 i thought it was good!
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Teqa Mercie!
Aka
Thanks alot!
Through out all my life I finally get it.
If you like somthing. Then dislike. They get +1 and like gets -1
OMFG IT ANSWERS EVERYTHING
323531 Well, I'm not perect at proof-reading but I could try to correct some mistakes, as well as capilal lettes in middle of sentence thingie... (Had problem with it myslef, I often wrote a capital letter in middle of sentence :\).
I will give it a shot and I will send it later today/tomorrow ;)
329504
thx
This story is what abortion doctors picture to make their jobs easier.
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337596 You're worse at writing than the doctor who accidentally punched you for thirty minutes instead of giving you a circumcision. You write the same way you pee: out of a stupid vagina. These garbage stories you make are inhumane attempts at population control.
337615
337615 illl kick the shit out of you ya wee nerd..i bet you sit on your dadyys knee for ages..and your dad loves it lol
337615 illl kick the shit out of you ya wee nerd..i bet you sit on your dadyys knee for ages..and your dad loves it lol daddys even*
337750 Are you scared of the Shift key?
337751 Following your logic is like watching a kid play baseball. If he simply picked one direction and ran that way, you probably wouldn't even notice that he's retarded.
337769
How about I go and punch ur face. By your logic you are trying to being me down. But that just means I'm on top.
338467 Do you even think before you type or do you just rip a hole in your chest and let the locusts fly randomly onto the keyboard?
340665
Fixed. Thx !
Despite the wonky grammar and rushed story, I find this fic greatly amusing.
Can't wait to see what happens next!
342805
Tryna write that.
With the laptop getting fixed its akward to write with people walking by on the computer
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Now. This is a little diffrent. I WILL BE MAKING THE RULES! What I mean by that is this will be crazy. Really crazy.
Did you read that?
I see ur point though.
There is mistakes. Infact. When I finish editing that chapter, I will go ahead and add a scene that makes him lve her.