What an odd pairing. I love it!

YES! YES!!!

ummm...I think I like this pairing oh and the story good too

3175648>>3175560>>3175579 It's something I can up with one day and since there is only one other fic that has the ship I decided to give it a shot.

I love this story so far

3175927 Glad you like it.

3176107 This story is awesome.

3176170 Yes, yes it is

3176177 indeed.

These 3 videos say it all.

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YEAH!!! That is what I am talking about! I will run 1000 miles for more random shippings.
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Meanwhile me....
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And most days before...

As much as I like the premise, the set up is a bit... convinient. Was it really necesarry to turn Spike into a freaking da Vinci of business?
And why is Fluer in such a hurry to have sex with Spike, the very same night she decides she's gonna try to star a romance with him? That's a pretty slut like approach, if you ask me. And it really doesn't go along with the rest of the character. Much less Spike, in case he is thinking the same thing.
As a whole this is a nice start. But unless you want this to be something more than just a straight foward clop story, I recomend you to work on the dialogue a bit more.

3176458 I can understand where your coming from. I planned for this to be basically a two shot with an ending where others can pick up from if they want to. Though maybe I should change it so the clop can be a spur of the moment deal and a precursor to their relationship.

3176402 If it has Spike and a female I'm with you.

Nice premise, though I found some teeny weeny errors:

Though he surprises me by picking me up and hold bridle style and continue to walk to my house while carrying me.

I'm sure you meant Bridal style, cause a Bridle is what you steer a horse with..

"You have to carry me you know, beside aren't I heavy." I say to him with a blush on my face in both embarrassment and the niceness in his act.

Oh, so I have to carry you.. Damn woman, you're hard work, but hey, I love a woman who knows what she wants
There's missing an "don't" as in, "You don't have to carry me you know,"

He just smiles and says, "I know I don't have too, I do it because I want too. And don't worry, your as light as a feather."

It's "to" not "too". Here's something to clear the confusion: Difference between Too & To The other is you're.
Sorry if this was demeaning in any way, It wasn't my intention.

3176634 Thanks for the tips and don't worry I can take criticism. Though I feel somewhat sad that the story I did on a whim is getting popular faster than the story I put a lot of effort into.

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Though I haven't read your first story yet, I can see the difference in the description: Sex, this story promises sex as soon as you read the description, while the other doesn't.
Sex sells.

3176830 I've notice and can't help but feel sadden by that fact.

The scenes played in my head frame by frame mixed with narration & sound affects, then faded to black in a black flame. Nice story.

3178013 If you like that you should check out my other story.

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Preach on brother! I guess this means I can be lazy with my stories then.

3178227 Just don't be too lazy, I maybe not picky I'm pretty sure your followers will be.

Actually really surprised you put my name in the description, considering I only helped up until this line:

He is a true gentleman, kind, determined, thoughtful of others, and while he is rich and handsome he isn’t superficial or greedy.

You, stop messaging me after that, I assumed the fic was abandoned. Evidently not. You're lucky I forgot view mature was checked from reading "To love the moon," or I would never have known you'd published. Naughty, always keep your editors informed. I'm also annoyed that a lot of my advice has been somewhat ignored, at least with regards to pacing...

But you know whatever it's your fiction. Just try not to make me regret associating with this.

~TheSecretBrony

P.S Yes I'm a little miffed, not just at you mind.

3181539 Sorry about, I'm so use to doing my own thing I kind of forgot. As for the pacing I'm willing to admit it is a bit rushed but I planned this to be a two shot to inspire others to do more Spikeshipping and to leave an opening for others to take up the story. While I can take care of the rest I appreciate the help you've given me no matter how small. And if this story gets any hate I'm make sure it's point at me, not you.

Quite grammatically flawed, I can say from the first few sentences, but a less common shipping, so I'll find time to read this when I get the chance. If you ever want a proofreader, just PM me. Fewer mistakes to disrupt the flow of reading allows the reader to enjoy the story itself more.

Its a good fic for a first

I preferred the original cover art. I honestly don't know why you would change it.

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I love TLOTR so much.

He says chuckling at his own joke. I had forgotten that he also has a sense of humor. Another positive trait. "So what brings you hear?"

I'm pretty sure it's supposed to be here

This chapter is peppered with a few minor errors, a quick read through should help you find some. That all said, this seems to be a fun way to start.

Nice opening and description really brings the story out.

The Swagon is getting laid!!!