Our lovable oaf Spike is persuaded into having sex with his best friend's mom! How could this happen? Is this one of those "dream" cop-outs? I don't think so. After all, I don't really exist!
Somewhat funny, but not quite to the level of the previous chapter. Looking forward to all the awkwardness spawned by the possibilities of Twilight/Shining walking in on Spike with Velvet, Luna, Twilight and/or Cadance.
And, just a suggestion, you could see about someone else doing the clop.
First: Luna is watching the wet dreams of Spike (nice!). And since it takes the form of nightmares, so she was the Velvet? Soo good. More, please.
Second: Naght are reading "Art of War" because it seems so? He just won the trust of Spike and implemented a subliminal idea waiting to germinate in the near future. And we all think he was just an idiot in this fanfic. How innocent we were ...
Third: I swear: baguet never see one the same way.
Fourth: Twilight and the Mane 6 were thinking that Spike is drinking because of Rarity. What they will do next? A party? Hum .. Pinkie seemed to me totally ready to cheer the dragon.
Fiveth: At most, a dinner with Sparkles appears to be full of funny cues so that the author can make in your plot.
Sixth: Horseapples! How Cadance will react! She will realize!
Seven: The idea of Spike end up tracing the royal family (except for Naght and Shinning, of course) is quite encouraging me. However, if this is the way to be organized, slowly, with cues and cliches super funny. Twilight should be tough and stay for last.
Great, but could have been better. The humor felt 'pushed' and was repettitively so to the point of being bland. Assign yourself a proofreader, brah, things can only improve from there.
On that note, I agree with my fellow compatriots. I came to endeavor on the wonderful idea of MILF-Sparkle. While I can respect you chose to diverge from the path of clop later in the story, the cover and description will only bring more people who expect clop.
You have got to keep writing this, I want to see Spike and Velvet keep fooling around, pushing it more and more. Dude could you imagine what that freaky MILF could do during a family dinner *dream effect* ( he could bang her in the kitchen while the family is in the other room, he could "mess" with her under the table with his tail, he could even drag her off into her kids old room, and so much more lol ) This is such a funny and interesting story hope for more.
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spike should have a threesome with velvet and cadence at the family dinner.![:moustache:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/moustache.png)
A average day in the Sparkle family.
god damnit i need more delicious pone christmas cake clop. I can only dream how awsome this would have been!
Dude, I came here for the clop. I wanna see the goddamn clop.
2917365![:moustache:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/moustache.png)
NO! he should have a Foursome with Twilight, Cadence and Velvet instead!
2918445 spike gets all the sparkles.![:twilightsmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsmile.png)
![:moustache:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/moustache.png)
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damn straight!
Somewhat funny, but not quite to the level of the previous chapter. Looking forward to all the awkwardness spawned by the possibilities of Twilight/Shining walking in on Spike with Velvet, Luna, Twilight and/or Cadance.
And, just a suggestion, you could see about someone else doing the clop.
First: Luna is watching the wet dreams of Spike (nice!). And since it takes the form of nightmares, so she was the Velvet? Soo good. More, please.
Second: Naght are reading "Art of War" because it seems so? He just won the trust of Spike and implemented a subliminal idea waiting to germinate in the near future. And we all think he was just an idiot in this fanfic. How innocent we were ...
Third: I swear: baguet never see one the same way.
Fourth: Twilight and the Mane 6 were thinking that Spike is drinking because of Rarity. What they will do next? A party? Hum .. Pinkie seemed to me totally ready to cheer the dragon.
Fiveth: At most, a dinner with Sparkles appears to be full of funny cues so that the author can make in your plot.
Sixth: Horseapples! How Cadance will react! She will realize!
Seven: The idea of Spike end up tracing the royal family (except for Naght and Shinning, of course) is quite encouraging me. However, if this is the way to be organized, slowly, with cues and cliches super funny. Twilight should be tough and stay for last.
Great, but could have been better. The humor felt 'pushed' and was repettitively so to the point of being bland. Assign yourself a proofreader, brah, things can only improve from there.
On that note, I agree with my fellow compatriots. I came to endeavor on the wonderful idea of MILF-Sparkle. While I can respect you chose to diverge from the path of clop later in the story, the cover and description will only bring more people who expect clop.
You're playing with fire, lad. Tread lightly.
Anywho, I await another installment ;P
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Pretty much exactly this.
That whole thing with the baguette just reminded me of this:
Wait, she pulled a baguette out from under her dress? How long & wide exactly is an average baguette?
I found this chapter to be funny as heck. Most excellent.
Can't breathe! Too funny! This chapter had me In tears! Author's note was hilarious too
You have got to keep writing this, I want to see Spike and Velvet keep fooling around, pushing it more and more. Dude could you imagine what that freaky MILF could do during a family dinner *dream effect* ( he could bang her in the kitchen while the family is in the other room, he could "mess" with her under the table with his tail, he could even drag her off into her kids old room, and so much more lol
) This is such a funny and interesting story hope for more.
Of course Shining and Cadence were signing a 'treaty' ALL week long.