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2530784 Thanks, even I think it's a good story. It's a lot better then my first story at least
597 years later!?!? OK, first i think that was really to long a period of time. I feel like you are rushing the story. It's Good and i'm very interested, However you need to add more detail. Skipping 597 years is just, Honestly very much too long. the last 8 -10 paragraphs where hard to understand for me I didn't really get what some of the stuff happening was.
-Just some friendly criticism.
P.S Indent paragraphs and equestria isn't a region on the planet or Earth in the Past/Future It IS it's own planet (or time period on Earth after humans existed or before they arrived
-Again just some friendly criticism please try to remember.
2531003 This is an alternate universe of Earth and thanks
2531040 Oh, yes of course and You are very much welcome.
Interesting, so he didn't become royal in the end, but with ingenuity manage to get rich and find true love. That is something out of respect. I suppose all those years were kind of fillers and now the real story will start right?
I know you said that he and Celestia didn't have that much in common but I really hope those 2 end up together, Celestia know him from months and Desperado has being living for a long time, maybe at least they had become good friends, but I really hope the flame is still burning since that magic moment they share
2531108 Actually he is royal, I'll reveal that in the later chapters. I'll reveal some other stuff as well in some chapters.
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Cool, now I really hope he and Celestia end up together, je I bet that with all his inventions and help in society Celestia paperwork has reduce 1/4 of what use to be, and she will be more than happy to thank him for that (if you catch my drift)
2531205 I see where your going with this and I'll think about it. They may or may not end up together depending on the story
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Awesome, I hope they do, and that he don't have anything with Luna, as Friends said. I don't thing he will like to be in a relationship where he can say "That is not how your sister did it"
2531241 So true, that would be really awkward to say at least.
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Eternal awkward consider none of them can die
2531290 Good point
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One question, when they did it, and consider your resume of him on earth, did Desperado and Celestia were virgins?
2531336 I'll reveal some both Desperado and Celestia's past in later chapters, but they weren't virgins when the met
2531437
ah ok
2531445 It'll probably be about another chapter or two before I reveal their pasts
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Cool, an how long before your next chapter? 2, maybe 3 days?
2531562 probably
ya just killed it for me.
That was random sex
It would be better to just go with "which have doubled"
that would be you're.
fateful
just flush in this context.
route, on both counts
Member, on both counts.
#formofaquestion.
as is, that's a contradiction.
that would go better as
Well that escalated quickly