Hit with the idea to rewrite A Rather Large Adventure · 6:59am Dec 31st, 2019
Into original fiction, where the characters have a sort of human-fantasy tinge where people have rainbow-colored skin and a mark on their breast marking who they are. Traditional fantasy creatures abound, like the, uh, dragons and changelings and anthropomorphized animals.
The details of differences still need to be ironed out, but I'll be sure to build a more original world. In fact, I have the first few chapters in my head already. Not all of the characters know each other at first, and they don't have the Elements yet, either.
Instead of starting with Twilight leaving for Saddle Arabia, I'll start it with Scorpan heading for Canterlot in the wilderness, accosted by Noxxa, who were trying to hunt down the Prophet. He dispatches them without saying a word, but the cat is out of the bag for the audience: Scorpan is important (I'll change his origin to being a former member of Malice's inner circle) because of the derogatory way the Noxxa refer to him as a prophet and a traitor. He knows Malice's plans are to invade Equestria, and soon.
The next chapter will focus on Twilight and her entourage of Rarity, Fluttershy, and Pinkie Pie preparing to go to the Summer Sun Celebration instead of the Gala (to build lore), and it'll show Twilight's relationship between her, Shining Armor, and the two princesses, and show off the base character introduction of her entourage characters. Pinkie just wants to have fun and make people smile. Fluttershy doesn't like the idea of going, but she agrees for Twilight's sake. Rarity is going to look for a suitor, specifically the prince.
The third chapter will take place right before the celebrations, and will show off the three Guardians, and their role to the princesses, Shining Armor, and their country, as bodyguards to the princesses and the security of the Celebration. I aim to have a more organic and natural introduction to these three guys. Noble Blade, stuffy, stiff, and rule-abiding, trying his best to always do better, resulting in a lack of self-esteem or accomplishment. Firestorm, a loose cannon, but laid-back, chill, and trying his best to make people like him, but in the process alienating his identity and reliance. Freedom Fighter, mysterious, bitter, cold, silent, and with an underlying feeling of inner conflict, where he prefers to stay. Tormented by his past and his personal relationship with Marshal Malice, he is a big hook to the reader.
The fourth chapter will include everything that happened in the Gala chapters. Firestorm trolling the nobility, Blueblood acting his usual charming way, Freedom Fighter's intervention, Noble Blade falling for Fluttershy. Plus introduce Applejack, trying and failing to sell her wares to the rich and elite. It'll also include telling the reason for the Celebration, showing off the prideful state of these pony-people, and the whole ceremony, until it's interrupted by Scorpan.
Fifth chapter will have Scorpan declare the bad news, give Twilight a reason to go on the quest to retrieve the mysterious elements of harmony, and explain the concept and background of Faust and Solaris.
Twilight, her entourage, Applejack, and the three Guardians are called at first. Later in the story, they pick up Rainbow Dash, Starlight Glimmer, and Tempest Shadow. I don't know if I should include Spike yet. I also haven't decided what kind of names I should give the characters, MacGuffins, and lore. But it's a start to original fiction.
The best ideas are always thought late at night huh? I like the concept, I do hope you don't get rid of the original chapters though.
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Of course not. This is fanfiction. I'm keeping this as it is to remind me of where I began. What I'm describing is (what I hope to be) future original fiction.
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Ok, I'm quite excited for this actually. The starting premise looks good, and I already know the writing will be great considering it's you. So all in all I can't wait!
Looking back on your concept, I couldn’t help but think it has the potential to be its own movie or book.
You do you Brady
. I did like the first few chapters along with the others, but if you believe you need to flush it out more, then do it. There's always room for improvement
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Whatever you do, write on