There was a Ninja, some woman with green hair named Gertrude, probably my sister Vengeance, and Lord Skywalker. You know. The one that likes to snorkle.) colabed on a story! Empath and Sociopath correction. · 8:06pm Jan 8th, 2019
Ponyponipon3 pointed out a continuity error in a chapter of The Empath and the Sociopath, so I cleaned it up a bit… and by that I mean I added about a whole page of dialogue. Enjoy in the link above or below.
Applejack looked at the cup for a moment then focused her attention on Sunset. “Look sugarcube, we all went to check up on ya because we’re just scared for your well being, that’s all. Ah mean… Can ya blame us after what you told us about your roommate?”
“She's just a little overzealous and maybe dabbles in crime." Sunset waved a dismissive hand about. "Nothing I haven't dealt with before. You’ve all got nothing to worry about! Believe me!”
Twilight jumped with a right almost hard enough to knock her own glasses off her face as Princess Twilight gave Sunset a dry look. "Nothing in those first two sentences leads me to believe we have nothing to worry about," Princess Twilight said.
"That's what I was going to say!" Twilight added. "Just... with a lot more concern."
"Well, I've been on the receiving end of Sunset's overzealousness and crime before," Princess Twilight stated. "I guess it mostly worked out in the long run."
Sunset folded her arms across her chest. "You just HAD to bring that up!"
"Well, I assumed that's what we were talking about!" Princess Twilight insisted. "Unless you were once the leader of your own crime syndicate or something!"
Sunset replied by breaking eye contact with Princess Twilight as she began to conspicuously whistle a non-conspicuous tune.
Princess Twilight groaned. "I really wish I could tell when you were joking..."
Sunset smirked. "But where's the fun in that."
"Oh, I know!" Pinkie exclaimed, raising her hand up. "The 'joke' part!"
"That's only half the fun," Sunset stated.
LOL.
Nice !
If I had to pick, I think this is one of my three favorite stories you've done so far. I've read it at least five times... and I've never noticed anything wrong... but this gives more content! So I can't complain... keep up the awesome work though. I eagerly await for more... of well, anything you write.