Something I dont do normally...

I don't normally do this, but I began to feel like I had to.

See, there is this thing I get nervous doing sometimes. and that is changing my stuff from the beginning.

Too often I hear of fic writers tell their fans "I am going to go and rewrite parts of my story to get onto EQD, book, or something" right in the middle of trying to work on their own material. And then they don't come back to it or worse make it incomplete. It's kind of scary to me because I get worried that if I try, it's going to mess me up and ruin my story.

However, after reading and rereading ch 1-7 of the story and comparing what happens later? I kind of hate some of the eariler chapters. I don't like some of the humor there, some of the lines, and the characters kind of clash with what happens later in the story. Hell, I noticed that there are some continuity snarls and hiccups in there (Mainly the Spark name thing!) that came from there.

So, I am going to, slowly mind you, do some rewrites of the early chapters. Not the whole thing, but some to help with certain flubs.

So, here it is, the first chapter and in the words of one of my fave RVB songs.

Comments

[Purple Patch]

Don't worry about it. If you feel it needs work, ask around and decide who's the better judge.

[CuddleCutie]

But without the "crappy" chapters, how can you tell you have improved a lot? anyways, if you feel like it, I fully support your decision.

and Im always looking forward to your content

[N Harmonik]

You kept spelling Daphne's name as [Daphine].

[Cherry-Lei]

Go ahead and rewrite to correct your flubs. You consciously knowing your mistakes is a good thing, if you find major errors, then I can't wait to see your justifications for them

[Scipio Smith]

I'm a bit confused; are you saying that you're going to do this or that you've already done it for chapter 1?

I sympathise with both horns of your dilemma here. On the one hand, I can see why you want to (and to be honest I should probably do the same myself; my Lightning's characterisation morphs over the course of a single chapter), as the beginning is definitely the weakest part of the story; however at this point it doesn't really matter as the quality has improved so much and I wouldn't want you to lose forward momentum over this.

A cautionary tale: I once stopped moving a story forward in order to re-write it, and not only was the scale of the improvement debatable but also I ended up completely killing my own interest in the story. I very much hope that doesn't happen to you.

If you are going to do this, my one piece of advice would be to maybe lose some of the rapeyness, as it made those early chapters pretty touch going at times.

[Legendbringer]

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I am thinking about doing it and have already done it for chapter one. Don't worry, I have learned my lesson to not let it overtake the original story.

If you are going to do this, my one piece of advice would be to maybe lose some of the rapeyness, as it made those early chapters pretty touch going at times.

Yeah, that has kind of gone. It's no longer descriptive and you really don't see it anymore. I just leave in what I could.