Here's what's happening (Tagged Blog) · 12:23am Jan 30th, 2017
OK, so with the release of the latest chapter there's a few things I want to go over a bit more in-depth regarding the story.
Here's the short of it: After the story concludes, I'm going to give it a complete and total rewrite, and here's where you guys come in.
There's two things I can do.
1: Give it a total overhaul. This includes changing the perspective to first person, which will let me do a few things. Give Joseph more character and personality; give the narration a more personal feel; and streamline the entire narrative.
2: Just streamline everything. I'll keep the third person, but this is more simple to do. When I first started writing the story, I didn't have a concrete direction in which to take this, so I made up a few directions as I went on which has made the flow of the overall story feel extremely clunky (doing this also applies to the above too).
So, which changes do you guys want to see? Breathe new life into the story, or just fix the flow?
But, before I do any of that, I am currently working on a new clopfic, the first story I've published in about a year, thanks to the behest of Pusspuss. And yes, he got his hands dirty with the new clopfic, too. It has Trixie and Anonymous in it.
Consider the kind of clopfics I've written and see if you can figure out what's going to happen.
Have a good day, guys!
this is a vary easy choice for me #1 NMM reads much better as first person.
4401855 I'll rewrite it 1st person from Joseph's perspective, but I'll likely colour the text of Nightmare Moon's speech so I'm not having to use italics so often.
sounds like that will be easer.
Personally i like the fic the way it is...
I would vote for the second option.
Keep the general story in 3rd person, it's been fine so far.
And honestly, changing everything over to 1st will be a ton of work and won't actually make the story any better.
But the internal Nightmare bantz can go either way, as HAM is pretty tasty in 1st person. Still works in 3rd.
Just tidy things up until you're happy, but don't go demolishing half your house because you had a dusty carpet.
4402368 I'm not demolishing my house because of a dusty carpet, I'm rebuilding it because it looks like something MC Esther would be proud of
I'd say to keep it 3rd person, rewritting the whole thing can be a lot of work, but it's your choice in the end, Alcatraz
I would prefer the second Options.
I for myself can relate with Characters and Story more when it's written in the 3rd perspective.
And with changing everything to 1st Person, you might also change the Point of view unintended, that would be a shame
Hi. Just got back to reading the story after a hiatus of my own and saw this blog post mentioned in the associated author note. I'm good with the current perspective; I don't see a reason it should be first person or necessarily needs a COMPLETE rewrite. You just have to fix the plot. I like where you said you were going when we talked privately about the intended conclusion (especially what you said about the Everfree). You just need to figure out how to make the earlier parts of the story line up with that.
For me, one of the most depressingly inconsistent parts is where Joseph seemingly just "sits there" without a plan during the Nightmare Night festivities leading up to the takeover, despite apparently having some idea that Chrysalis was coming. I know you know what I'm talking about, as you said yourself "this holds about as much water as a net". Nonetheless, I don't think you should give up trying to fix it. Like I said, the idea you shared with me for the ending is great; you've just got to get there without breaking character!