I'm Torn · 11:33am Oct 11th, 2016
Before I say any more, I want to make one thing perfectly clear. I have no real plan for any of my stories, especially Horse People. All I have is a loose connection of unpolished ideas in what can only barely be called a plan. This much should be obvious just by comparing the first ten chapters to the last ten.
With that out of the way, I really am torn over the reincarnation element. On one hand, people said that it cheapens the romance. On the other, others say it was foreshadowed through out the story and made this one different from a lot of other HiE. Even those who said to not change the story seemed eager to add that they hated the reincarnation, so I changed it, and now I just don't know what to do.
I'm a horrible flip flopper for even thinking this, so, once more, I'm putting it out to you guys before everything is too deeply embedded to change.
ok here is a little something I was told bye a author here on the site and how he rights his story's (David Silver).
yes he rights story's under consignment yes he uses a (lose) plan after that he simply lets his muse wonder ware it will.
I know of a nether author (Sparky Brony) that lays every ting out in a bible and uses that style.
after that you are not righting for the people on the site (yes it is a good feeling to get those good comments) you are righting to get the story that is trapped in your head out before it backs up and start's running out your ears.
in short I have herd him (yes he visits my team speak now and agene) the best thing you can do to help your self is to simply do what suites you best.
if the way your are doing things works just flow with it.
if you thing you may need a little help I am sure I can get you hocked up with a author or too for a little help or just somepony to chat with.
Harts Fire
PS check my blogs there is a authors night coming up on my TS that one of the things is to just chat as of this time there is slated to be 5 authors attending.
if you want to stop around it is free to everypony.
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That's it exactly! I've read Silver's work and it's nice to know that he went through the same sort of non-plan I did, yet it all turned out so well. I've tried getting other people here to proof read, but they either don't reply or just say "it's fine" without offering any real feedback.
I love the reincarnation bit, and would have liked to see where you went with Thomas's unique case. As it stands, his soul's origin is still a bit of a mystery, and if you choose to explore it, I'd be glad. If you don't, I'll find the next bit of intriguing mystery, and hope you elaborate on that, instead. Keep writing, whatever you do, and never give up.
4251229 It's the funniest thing. I've only just recently come up with a rationalization for how a pony soul could be born into a human body, something that was one of the biggest sources of contention.
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it is super hard to find proofreaders I know there is a group but most times they are so busy working with other story's they don't have time to help.
I have worked with Sparky Brony and Kitsy-Cane proofing and helping with lay out several times but my hug hurdle is my spelling is so beyond the point of sucking (I have dyslexia) it is a handy cap for me.
the best I can sagest is to try to find some one to help them with proofing in return of the same.
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Cool, but save it for the story! I'd like to witness Thomas's reaction live, or as close to it as is possible regarding a written medium.
4251247 That problem is actually pretty simple to address. I've downloaded NaturalReader, a free program that reads out text in a computer voice. Just post the text, listen for problems, and correct as you go.
I'm envious of Psinova. He has a small army of editors for his story, including me.
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well there you go if you are helping him have him help you.
4251280 Already tried. He doesn't have the time.
As always, it's your ship mate, steer it as you desire. But, since you asked...
I didn't really like the whole reincarnation gig, to me it felt like it took away some of the agency of the people (ponies) involved in the romance. And given the absolutely stellar job you've done in setting up romance (particularly Thomas v Moonlight) I think it was a shame to reduce the beauty of their interactions.
That and the aforementioned problem with pony in human body... As much as I'm sure you have a plan, I can't help but think it'd turn out to feel somewhat contrived... I don't know, just my gut feeling... Sorry.
people saying it was foreshadowed are grasping at things only they can see. seriously i dont care about the reincarnation. i care about how you brought it about. it came from nowhere and did cheapen everything. i didnt go back and read the changes so im unsure what you did but 65% of the "popular" HIE i have read had some sort or reincarnation/destiny/seventh element thing to go with it which only bothers me because it makes it feel like it was handed to them instead of working it with their blood,sweat and tears...Or dick in this case.
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NOPE
what you said though resonated with me and i agree a good bit.
4251330 Except there was foreshadowing. I forget the chapter, but Celestia consoled Luna that she will love Thomas just as she did before. There was also a scene where Talon and Luna talked about a secret they were keeping from Thomas and Moonlight. This is actually a thing that has been set up for a while now.
Further, how about this? Moonlight argues, over a few chapters, that what's past is past and that while destiny might have given them an added nudge, it is still they who make the decisions. Also that their physical proximity and stations have played a more significant role than destiny. Basically, there were a lot of factors working in their favor from the start.
Just write what you feel that makes it better. Thats all you can do.
I never saw any foreshadowing.
I have liked the story as you have written it so far. I enjoy your story. If i wanted to write one exactly the way I wanted it I would do so, it would not be as good. Write your story. You will never make all the people happy. Write the story as you imagine it. That's what I want to read. If you want reincarnation then go for it. I know you can make it awesome. If you decide to cut it out then cut it out. You'll still write a great story. Either way I look forward to reading. This is one of my favorite stories I smile every time it shows up with a new chapter. (For what it's worth I like the reincarnation bit)
ain't nothing wrong with changing your mind for right reasons. like new evidence that counters a past belief or what have you. you become a flip flop when it's for the wrong reasons like like blindly following masses when you feel its your standing beliefs or morals
Personally, I was not a fan of the Reincarnation, but in the end, you need to decide if you are writing this for YOU, or for US. Nothing wrong with either choice.
Just go with what you think .