Apr
14th
2016
Scribblefest results! · 8:56pm Apr 14th, 2016
I didn't win. (Oh well. I had fun anyway.)
However I would like to know what the judges thought of my story since it made it to the finals and reviews are always nice.
Judges:
Titanium Dragon
Pen Stroke
BronyWriter
Horizon
Heartshine
Asylum
Silver Flare
PiquoPie
That's quite a lot of folks to ask... 
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I think it was very atmospheric... a dark, strange world the reader is unfamiliar with, and full of this sense for foreboding. Characters are strange this many years ago, and that lends it an air of mystery too. Where it fell apart for me is that, as a story, it doesn't really go anywhere. I actually have in my (quick) notes (I read this on a plane with no internet) that it felt like a scene from a longer story, and didn't stand on its own. When I got back on the ground I saw the description, that it's a sequel, and that makes more sense. However, I had to judge it as it stood, and that just wasn't quite solid enough by itself.
So to summarize,
1. Pretty decent writing, (but the archaic "our"s and "we"s didn't mesh well with the other dialog.)
2. Very interesting setting, made me want to know more.
3. Starts AND ends in media res. There's just a scene and setting, not enough story.
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Thank you for this comment, it means a lot to me.
As you can see, I have other works involving this AU so if you want to know more they are there.