Aug
13th
2014
Something that will surely annoy you · 11:08am Aug 13th, 2014
Hey guys, just wanted to give you a heads up on the progress of 'The elder brother'. Now I know this is my most popular story yet, and a lot of you want me to continue writing it, but a much needed comment about the story made me realize that although the story is somewhat good, it's lacking on so many aspects.
Now I'm not saying I'm discontinuing the story per se, but a good revision is needed and it may take me a while to do it, so until then 'The elder brother' is on hold, or so to speak.
I understand but don't take too long
2366807 One can only hope
Well the rewrite was needed for the story to survive in the long haul.
Like I had zero interests at all in the war and that was was because of all the valid points
Synn made.
But take your time and do it right this time =D
I would like point out that the description of your fic is...well...a bit of a mislead.
According to the description the reader would expect to read a Fanfic pony version of Dennis the menace or Horrid Henry, which is really not the case here at all.
All I read so far is that he just made one simple prank with Celestia towards his parents...and that's it.
After that there are no obvious troublemaker moments or depicting him to be a hyperactive kid who only causes trouble.
Maybe changing the description a little bit would good idea at this point.
Still good fic though. :D
2366943 That was another aspect I completely went over and one of the reasons why I'm revising old chapters, I may add a few bonus chapters in between to balance things out...
More Woona and Luna?
Sleep on it mate.
2366813
I concur.
The war part made me all but drop the story. It's way too generic ponies vs griffins for no reason.
Perhaps introducing the Equestrian allied griffin earlier into the war arch, or perhaps make his presence known before he gets to the camp.
Ya I pretty much speed read all the war chapters, they just didn't do it for me.