~~Journal of Starlight Eclipse~~
Date: 22nd of Intus, 5493 CR
Alright this is gonna be a big one
I finally got into the Fleet! And my posting is with the Mothership, BONUS!! I got assigned as part of a 3 ship Heavy Corvette squad as a wing pony. Our Lead is a mare called Rainbow Dash, she finished at the academy one year ahead of me with the second highest flight score ever seen there, I was only 4 points below her. She started as a wing for the number 1 student of the school: Lightning Dust, but apparently Lightning was too reckless and caused an accident that injured several other students and numerous bystanders, as a result she was dishonourably discharged and Dash took her place as lead. The only other thing I know about her is that there is a filly who she considers to be like a sister to her still planet side. The other wing is a crazy as fuck Pegasus stallion who only lets us call him by his callsign: Maelstrom, I don’t even know his real name. All I’ve been able to get out of him is, his father and mother are planet side, and his younger sister is on Cryogenic Tray 5. He also seems to idolise Dash for some reason but he won’t get into it.
Apart from Dash and Maelstrom, the only other pony I fly with is my gunner, a blond Pegasus with a grey coat called Ditsy Doo, but everypony calls her Depry cus of her eyes which look in different directions, it was weird at first but eventually I found it made her look cute. She can’t fly for fuck, and she even admits it, but then she doesn’t need to, that’s my job, what she can do however is shoot a fly of an Interceptor under full throttle 2km away while performing evasive manoeuvres. Personally I feel her nickname should be Deadeye, cus fuck she is good with guns.
Tomorrow the Mothership launches and we run final trials before testing the Hyperspace core and jump to the Kar’Selim. I can’t wait to see Stormchaser again, I haven’t spoken to him in 3 years as I’m always too busy with training. Does this make me a terrible sister?
~~End of entry~~
>> This is Fleet Command reporting Mothership pre launch status.
>> Command: ONLINE...
>> Resourcing: ONLINE...
>> Construction: ONLINE...
>> Cryogenics: ONLINE...
>> Checking Scaffold Orbital alignment.
>>...
>> Orbital alignment confirmed.
>> Stand by Release Control.
>> Main Drives: ONLINE...
>> Main drives functioning at 30%
>>...
>> The Mothership has cleared the Scaffold, We are away.
>> Stand by for Command line testing...
~~Journal of Starlight Eclipse~~
Date: 23rd of Intus, 5493 CR
Final trials went off without any problems, and everything is looking good. Ditsy was a crack shot as always in the combat trials, our squad of course set the fastest time in destroying the drones, but as Commander Spitfire always says, “Drones don’t fire back, whatever we find out there will”, still it felt good to be able to claim to be the fastest in the trials, Dash kept going on about being able to do it in 10 seconds flat, and Maelstrom just creeped us out with his maniacal laughter, I think he enjoys destroying stuff a bit too much, like I said, crazy as fuck.
According to a ship wide notification that just came on we will be jumping to hyperspace in about ten minutes.
In two days I’ll get to see my brother in the flesh for the first time in 10 years. I still find it hard to believe that this ship will travel the same distance the Kar’Selim did in two days while it took them 10 years.
See you soon bro.
~~End of entry~~
>> Hyperspace core fully charged.
>> Initiated.
>> Quantum waveform has stabilised.
>> Proceeding with jump...
Ohh geez I remember this game.
Also spoilers for those not in the know.
Those feels man, those feels. I nearly cried the first time I played this level.
Anyways, it'd be nice if you could make the chapters longer.
i like what i'm reading so far. i'm hoping for lovely space battles and drama
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Mission 3: RtK was indeed sad.
I'll work on making the chapters longer, its just that the first 3 missions are very short so there's only so much i can write for them.
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Thanks for the Fav and ur positive comment.
As for epic space battles... I'll try, but i don't know how well I would be able to capture the idea of the very cinematic battles in HW. I mean this game isn't just strategy, its art.
When i saw that HW:E had been approved i did a silent fistpumpYES!
then i see 2 favs and 5 upvotes and i was like
I'll be posting every 3 days or so, cus I'm playing through just so i can be sure to keep some HW canon, but my performance in missions will also affect the story. I just finished M3 last night, so expect Missions 2+3 in the next day or so.
Also minor spoiler, i only saved 5/6 cryotrays, fuckin goodfernuthin Taidan
More on which MLP race is which HW race coming after mission 4. i have two locked:
Kushan - Ponies (duh)
Bentusi - ??? (already decieded)
Taidan - ???
Turanic - ???
Keepers of Kadesh - If you've played this game then you know already, if not. Mhuhahahahaha!
Lets see your guesses
Hey, a fellow Homeworld fic author! Awesome!
That now gives us a total of 3 Homeworld fics. Although the very first fic was written pretty badly by some dude a long time ago, who basically copied the script of the game, and used ponies for characters.
You won't find a bigger HW fanatic than me, that's for sure! I still enjoy playing the first, through I'm loving the mods on the second.
Aaaaand random OST inbound:
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I'm going to stick very close to the games script and try keep HW canon as much as possible, but on a sub level i will start exploring how ponies would live on a colony ship, and interact with each other.
Also, don't expect a happy fun time story. Ponies will die. HW is filled with death, M3 RtK is proof of that.
On a side note. I'm working on Mission 2 : Outer Kharak so expect it before the weekend. I'll do my best to get it to you by then
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Sticking to the script is fine, as long as there is something else. I think your story can really stand out you do go for the the 'interaction on a ship' thing, so I wish you the best of luck. There is so much potential for a heap of stories here, considering the journey to Hiigara took 6 months. That's a lot of time in hyperspace!
Feel free to shoot me a message if you want any assistance on canon, like Kharak's history, and the Kiiths, which, by the way, could be an interesting idea if you want to add conflict aboard. Ahh, but it's your story. It's Homeworld. That automatically makes it awesome!
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I'm going to stick with my own time scale as i have developed an entire date system. time progression will be seen in the dates on Eclipse's journals. more explained later.
Also i like the Kiith idea, but what I'll do is extend it toward the 3 pony clans(read tribes)
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Nice.
Ah... good. We took different approaches. WAY different approaches.
Criticism follows, so if you don't want it, read no further.
I like the frame idea here, but I don't like Starlight Eclipse yet. In one journal entry, she has managed to irritate me immensely. Maybe that's irrational, maybe that's just me, but that's what I took from this. Still, knowing what all those allusions to friends and family members mean, I expect some interesting character development as my feels are lined up and shot.
On another note... ARGH YOU STOLE MY EVERYTHING! ...sorry, it's just that I've been writing a story titled "Homeworld: Equestria" for a few months now, (not yet published, I'm editing it now) and... there are TWO stories with the SAME NAME. And now I'm going with the working title "Our Little Homeworld: Hyperspace is Magic". No, really. This is what you people have forced me to do!
I kid, I kid. It's nice to see that people still appreciate great games, though I was saddened by the omission of the Kiithid, and confused by the presence of corvettes at this point in the story. Still, the former is flavorful backstory and the latter is artistic license, so they're not big problems. The biggest real issue I have with this is the OCs, one of whom I don't like and the other of whom appears to be a self-insert. That said... not a huge deal, and I really shouldn't say anything this early.
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Make that four fics, buddy. I'm not out of the race yet, even if you guys keep stealing my story name.
When our respective fics are done, we should all get together and craft some kind of elaborate Poneworld AU. (Poneworld. PONEWOOOOOOORLD!!!!)