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Interesting turn, more backstory and backmechanics revealed, and the joke at the end was adorable. (Also: Honestly, I'd read a PinkieBonkers fic. )
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Thanks guys - I love getting feedback and it is really useful to me.
Good ol Twilight.
Pinkie will be pinkie I guess. I can only immagine how she would destroy such a river..
Great backstory there. Poor Luna... at least Twilight can help her get better now.
At first i thought the bad dream was fluttershy and her cottage/animals... and while I was hopeful, the AJ dream was well put together.
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Thanks for the great feedback as always FlutterDash7.
I had been foreshadowing the fire quite a bit and I was thinking of calling this chapter 'Three aspects of fire' at one point, but I thought it would be a bit pretentious.
I'd have a hard time making a tragedy out of a fire in Fluttershy's house - the animals are clearly intelligent and none are caged up. Half would probably do a good job fighting the fire and the others would just walk/fly away, probably to get help.
Now the falcon could go find Dash, who would fly to the rescue with a raincloud and Fluttershy would be so grateful...
Uh, yeah. I'll let someone else write that one.
2692807 I could... your giving me ...ideas... for what I could do with such a story (If you ever check out my stories.. I write enough of a variety that I could even cover such a story) But im full up with Flutterdash/TwiLuna and other stories as it is...
Oh and one more thing... Combine Twilights load/save ability with this new dream walking ability and we have one dangerous and awesome mare.
But i wonder how much the clop will continue to feature in this. You do seem to be going more the story route, even if its maintaining quite a few things there that still give plenty of reason for this to be mature. To me at least, it looks like the rest of this fic will involve a lot more more dreams as Twilight practises her new art. (Still not sure i like the fact that Twilight told her friends all the details about what she does with Luna and her dreams... but meh)
It would be nice to see Twilight get called to Canterlot by Cele, who is asking to talk to both her and Luna. That would get Twi nearvous . and give a nice break from dreams for at least half a chapter
Since my one more thing has turned into more than that... I'll leave off with the ideas and thoughts. I hope they're helpful.
Dreamwalking headcanon accepted
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Ditto about PinkieBonkers. That would be hilarious.
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> I'd have a hard time making a tragedy out of a fire in Fluttershy's house - the animals are clearly intelligent and none are caged up. Half would probably do a good job fighting the fire and the others would just walk/fly away, probably to get help.
I could see it working, if it was when they were all asleep. (The show doesn't seem to make any distinction about nocturnal animals she keeps having different sleep cycles.) Waking up to a fire in your home is an immediate panic sort of situation, and rarely does anyone wake up with enough wherewithal to save the whole structure.
Actually, what am I saying? It's a nightmare. Maybe Fluttershy has nightmares about things like fires, or her house getting crushed, and she's always helpless in them. Celestia knows what goes on in that mare's head to make her so utterly emotionally vulnerable.
(Now I'm thinking about writing a story about Fluttershy's lack of sleep from feeding and paying attention to nocturnal animals. Mmm. Might be interesting, or it might be seen as an AJ-breakdown-ripoff. I'd have to look at it.)
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I, uh, yes! Yes, of course! I meant it'd be hilarious. What else could I have possibly meant?!
It would be very, very...funny.
I don't suppose AJ found the Equestrian version of shibari in that Neighponese library book?