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whats under the mask? another mask?
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Holy crap. I was wondering how a story this long and this old has got so few votes. Well, now I know. This is a work of fucking art, it really is. It's like watching a mentally retarded schizophrenic vomit out his brain and turn it into internet horsie words. This is, like, Time Cube level. Good job.
Do not go gentle
into that goodnight,
Rage, rage against
the dying of the light.
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I mean you're referencing the poem "Do Not Go Gentle into that Goodnight"...but why exactly?...I mean...I don't recall putting it in this episode...although oddly enough I am planning on putting it in a future episode...i mean...it's kind of fitting for this episode...
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Why thank you....but yeah I've been writing for this story since 2013...and not once has it gotten more likes than dislikes...although one time it did get close...but no cigar....
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No...your comments will never be deleted...just needed to get a fresh start is all...
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I don' blame you, it can be off putting, but don't worry if you thought if it was because i am some asshole that deletes comments if they are negative. Some of those comments, a lot of them actually, were me replying to other people years ago. Some of them were friends. I just needed a fresh start is all... so even if your comment were to have a lengthy review of this story with everything wrong with it, (which I wouldn't be surprised if you did do so) and gave the final rating a...say... .5/10...it would stay up....
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I get the Helter Skelter part...but where is the Mien Kompf part coming from?... oh by the way, this fic isn't dead....
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Ok.....
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Ha...looks like someone didn't read the Plans blog... ha ha ah...you have no idea how long this is going to be....
Why thank you...it's not everyday when you get called a horrible person by some guy on the internet that I don't even know in real life...
Wow...looks like someone doesn't like that kind of comedy...but that's alright...because comedy is subjective...
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Doesn't it come to everyone's head when we hear those magic words?...
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Thanks....
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Yup...specially with the kind-of-recent Episode 23-2... over 200,000 words...which is the equivalent to over 400 pages...honestly...I'm amazed that is even over 700,000 words by this point...And to think that with a little bit more time, it'l eventually be over 1,000,000 words and if no pony else has a long fic in the works...then mines will be the 8th story to get over the million word mark....honestly...it's amazing...but dumbfounds me both at the same time...
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It will....until the day that I die...
Why are some chapters insanely long?
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Well...it's because that's how the episode goes. I don't cut the episodes into smaller parts...unless otherwise...which in the case of Episode 23, that's what I'm doing. Because Episode 23 is actually longer than expected, so I decided to cut it up into five separate parts, other wise I would leave it as it is. Although in all honesty, it depends on what the episode is all about. With Episode 23-2, it had to be long, it couldn't be short, not only to mention I had a lot to work with. But, it also works vice versa, because in a future episode, Episode 25: Fall Weather Douches, that would only be about maybe 20,000-50,000 words, (Not quite sure yet since I have no clue how it will play out just yet...so it'll be within that range...) as I don't have too much to work with, not only to mention I wouldn't want to work and try to make it over 100,000 words for that episode since that's not the kind of episode that would warrant a big episode. Instead it'll be a more simple episode. So really to answer your question...it just depends on the what the episode is going to be about. If it's a big episode, expect it to be long. If it's simple, expect it to be short. My only issue with these long episodes is that while they are fun to write, boy oh boy do they take a while to write...not only to mention it leaves me and my mind tired afterwards. I mean I am the only one working on this, no editor, no co-writer, I'm just a one man band so having to do over 206,000 words in length takes a lot out of me in the end...
That and the earlier episodes were from way back in 2013, when i didn't think I would do too much. I mean I remember when I first did Episode 17, I was shocked that I had gotten over 10,000. Hell, I never would have thought I would go over 100,000 words in Episode 22, but the thing is that the bigger the episode, the longer it'll have to be, otherwise I wouldn't be doing it good and just end up making the same mistakes that I did before, which was rushing...which i'm not sure if you have seen it yet, but some of the earlier episodes from 2013 had that issue (but don't worry, I'm planning on fixing that sometime later in the future with my "THE SUPER DUPER ULTRA MEGA HD REMASTERS" plan....eventually...which will apply to episodes 4, 6-20.5. Episode 1-3 already had a remake, and Episode 5...I'm planning on remaking...eventually...)... Also sorry for the long comment....
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Honestly, I'm impressed. Giving it a thumbs up for the insane effort you put in.
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Why thank you...honestly you didn't need to do that...I would have been fine with another dislike or nothing at all...although to be fair I do put a lot of effort into it despite very few people reading it, along with the like to dislike ratio...but still...thank you...that was...unexpected...
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Thanks...didn't have to like it though...
Haven't read this yet so this is my unbiased first impression.
The cover and title are interesting but the lack of a proper description is putting me off (Your blog posts are huge blocks of text so I didn't bother reading everything before giving up on finding the description. More concise posts for what the reader is looking for can help.). It doesn't have to have spoilers but a small intro to hook readers would probably help you. From what little I can see with this story being part of an expansion then a lot of things can be confusing to readers if not explained properly so they don't have to read the entire series to understand everything. (The dislikes are either from genuine problems with the story or you pissed some people off for some reason.)
Insane word count is cool.
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Ok...So for starters...this is interesting...usually I don't get these kind of comments...I barely get comments at all...I mean when I saw my notification tab...I was like, "I got a notification? Oh...my...I must be in a dream or something..."
Anyways...yeah...this story has a long history so let me explain a few things...
With the cover image...thank you...I did that in Photoshop myself...but to be honest though it could be better but I no longer have access to Photoshop so I can't do jackshit about it...although I do have a different version that uses another font...but...meh...As for the title...that was a joint effort...and used to have him credited...but 1, he said I didn't have to...and 2....well...he just stopped caring about it all together, he just kind of stopped messaging me, and he left the site and is long gone...so I'm like... "Does it matter anymore?" The old, original title that I started off with was, "The Universes: My Little Pony", but it was only like that because I was being rushed and had to come up with a title fast...but long story short, the first person that ever gave this story a like and supported it helped me out with the title...
Second, the description...I'm not getting into it... The best thing that I can say to you is that it's like a path. I brought you to, or you found the path, but that's it. Whatever you do from this point on and how you see the path is up to you. If you want to leave, go ahead. You take the path and see it in a certain way, and like it, then good for you...but see it in a bad way...then hey...give it a dislike and be on your way...I'm not stopping you. I'm not going to tell you what is what and what to do or how to see things...I'm not going to give warning to whatever type of content that you will see...it's up to you to do whatever...and if you leave a dislike...that's fine...and if you write a comment giving your opinion...I'll give it a thumbs up (No seriously...I will...look down in the past comments and you will see even the negative comments have a thumbs up and that was me...)
As for the expansion thing...it's not... Although the Alternate version is, where all the short stories that is related to this story is at...if you haven't noticed in the description with the links...but I don't think anyone notices it half the time...which is fine...but...kind of makes me wonder sometimes...
No, instead this story is its own thing...one...long...big thing...which I'm going to assume you haven't looked at the plans link either...so long explanation short...it's going to be a loooooooooooooooooooooooong one...and I'm constantly changing the plans, moving things around....but...I'm not going to get into it if you haven't seen it...save you time and stuff...
Just know that this is one long story with episodes in it... and I have to say this... it's called episodes for a reason...
Then of course the dislikes...it's a bit complicated but I can get into it...
So way way way back in 2013...this story wasn't exactly how it used to be. It has changed significantly over time...for the most part. At least the first three episodes did anyways... I used to have a separate prologue,, episode 1.5, a terrible Episode 3, and it wasn't called episode...it used to called Chapters. And...let's just say I didn't do a good first impression, so until I changed somethings...dislikes came in and went and rarely a like. Not only to mention, I idiotically went on to the the Self-Promotion group, back when it first started, and promoted it like shit...because I cannot promote anything to save my life...and...well...again...it led to more dislikes...and yeah...you're right...I pissed off some people...probably...I can't confirm that but I'm pretty sure that I did
Hell..I even pissed off a person once....that is now a moderator for this site...h.mmmmmmmmmmmm
And so as time went on and things changed...the dislikes started to slow down and I saw a little bit more rate in likes...but that first impression...let me tell you...that either makes you or breaks you because even if I get more likes then dislikes in terms of the rate that I get them...it won't make a difference because those dislikes are too far ahead and have been like this for the past 5 years...not only to mention...one time...I got close to actually making it even...but again...it didn't happen...so in the end...it is what it is, and while you may think that I'm sad or something like that when I see the dislikes...I'm not...i really don't care...
I mean...the dislikes aren't going to stop me from what I'm doing..I'm going to continue on regardless...even if it's just five people reading...which sometimes I think that's how many people are reading this story and stuff. That and even when I do get a new dislike added to this story...I kind of celebrate it honestly...because at this point I'm trying to predict when I'm going to get my 100th dislike...and I swear when it happens I''m going to celebrate and watch a bunch of mediacore, terrible movies... like Movie 43...because why not? Fuck it...I even did a blog post celebrating the 82nd dislike...
Aside from that...as for the word count...oh yeah...and you can expect this story to go over a million...at some point... Right now the forecast predicts that by the time when I finish Episode 23-4...it shall be over a million words...but I can't say for sure because...you never know...but as far as my plans go for the next few episodes...that's what the forecast says. And as for anything else...yeah trust me...it wasn't easy writing it...I'm honestly shocked that I even got to over 100,000 words...three times...I mean the last one was over 200,000 words....like how the fuck did I do that?...I honestly don't even plan it and the forecast said for Episode 23-2 was that it was going to be somewhere between 100,000 words - 150,000 words...it fucking blew my mind when I saw it...
And I remember 5 years ago...I always wondered what would happen if I got 100,000 words...well now I know...because I did it three fucking times...and I think with Episode 23-2, that makes it the longest chapter on here....I'm not sure...but the longest I've seen someone else do is about 75,000 words...which is impressive in itself to be honest...
So yeah...give it a read....or don't...it's up to you... And uhh...I hope you enjoy it...and if not...go ahead and give me that 85th dislike...I don't care...
And uhh...don't be afraid to ask me any question or anything like that...I'm open and in general a nice guy to talk to ...or something like that...
And if you have anymore questions before you start reading...go ahead and ask them...my door is always open...
Also out of curiosity...how did you find this story to begin with? I mean...from what I've seen...you're not a Brony, and I'm going to guess you know a thing or two about writing professionally or an expert or something like that... And...well...this story is I'm sure is piled on top by other stories that have more people reading it than this story...Although judging from your groups that you follow, your interest seems to be warfare/fighting, HIE, Anime (go figure), and just overall, well written and grounded stuff...although that's just a guess judging from your Groups...which might explain somethings on how you found me...
(Also sorry for the long response...)...
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Fuck lost all my text. Have to rely on auto correct to remember what I wrote.
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I'm more of an armchair expert but I do have experience writing and helping another author improve his story. I call myself a decent writer but a terrible author. I'm always impressed how people can pump out multiple chapters while I usually end up losing interest from procrastination. (I can do it if I wanted to but it's a lot of work for little reward and no one I know really cares about it to push me to finish.) That's why I'm better as an editor. I know how what a good story needs, the flow of the pacing and details, etc. I guess you can call it my special talent.
https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/the-light-of-our-solus-rwby-remastered.619798/
I'm working on a project to remaster my friend's story and old chapters from when he first started. Hopefully the style can give you ideas on how to improve. I haven't been able to update it recently due to being busy with work. (It's volunteer after all.) I'm a perfectionist for this so while making a chapter only takes a few hours to merge his old chapters together with a few edits I will be constantly changing things to fix what I missed.
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/324532/three-more-things
I see the attitude that pissed people off. You don't care so some people would feel snubbed. Anyway look at Tatsurou, he is an amazing author at crossovers. His description is literal just a summary of the first chapter. It's a great hook to get people to read his story.
I tried to look for the explanation but the post was full of nonsense (or at least stuff not related to what I was looking for.) that I just gave up. The timeline is better but without context it's not very interesting. You description link is mislead and can seem condescending, I'm the author and I know better then you, etc. I suggest making an actual description and link that instead if you don't want it on the front page. Creative freedom is fine but at least make it easy for those who want to know.
If the dislikes are from old versions of the story maybe you should start over and get a fresh start. Maybe give it a quick rewrite to fix mistakes.
I found this story by using word count filter on HiE. Good guess, I do prefer well grounded stories with a consistent internal logic. Most of time I join groups for the forum or to tag them for latter.
https://www.fimfiction.net/group/204141/freedom-vs-harmony/thread/290752/why-i-made-this-group
A link to my group. In summary I made the group because there was no neutral group that I could find and push back against the low quality, wish fulfillment stories that flood the site. (I still can't get over this story having a female president thinking how cute ponies are in first contact rather then being a composed bureaucrat, it absolutely broke my immersion.) I'm not a brony but that doesn't matter if the story is good.
https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/the-light-of-our-solus-rwby.388207/
Also my friend beat you to a million words already. Sure you have to take a few thousand from titles and options but he is already writing part two. Also a lot is in spoilers which don't get counted. We are almost at 1000 omakes (Stories written by people other then the author.) which is insane.
As for the millions words thing...I don't really care. I mean...I already know 7 other people beat me to it...and two or three of them is already over 2 million so I don't give a fuck. Although this story is planned to go beyond 2 million...3 million...you get the picture. Granted I'm not sure how much it'll be in the end...at one point I thought I knew with a rough forecast of 5 million words...but now I really don't know anymore. All I know is, assuming I can do it since I'm a one man band on this so that means, I have to do the planning, writing, editing, and proofreading...it's going to take me a long time...but assuming that I do get it all done...my guess...uhh... 10 million...maybe 20....but I can't really say for sure...I just know that it'll go beyond 3 million...more than likely 5 million for sure...it's too early to tell honestly. But even if it doesn't, who cares...I mean if I get this to a million...then it'll be an accomplishment just by itself since not many can sit down and write a story to one million...regardless of its quality... especially with one with more dislikes than likes...because in all honesty...who would sit down, spend 5 plus years, writing a story with more dislikes than likes, only about like 5 people reading it, and probably will go nowhere in the end...who else would dedicate this kind of stuff you know?
As for your group thing... oh I just realized that you created it...duh... Anyways...yeah this story is...kind of like what would be in the group..but not really...I don't know how to say it...it's definitely different than from all of the other HIE stories...but different as in, "ehhhh that's for you to decide if it's good or bad." I'm fine with it but...others aren't so...meh... Although to be honest though, I kind of know what you're talking about...at least on HIE terms, as I constantly read them and for the most part...I noticed some patterns that kept going on and on...so this kind of goes against that...but at the same time...it's "different", both in HIE terms and writing terms.
What I mean by writing terms...well I might as well say it...it breaks the standard rules of writing...which my guess is something that you will not like because from what I can tell, you're looking for the more interesting, more well written stories that sticks by the rules, but at the same time do so much more than the usual stories... In which case...ehhhh you could maybe still enjoy it...honestly if you look through the comments so far, some liked it and some don't so...really it's up to you... I mean one person said, "this is fucking art" and "This is Time Cube level stuff." In which case...that might say something...and might it not...
As for how you found this story...oh yeah I forgot...I added this story to a bunch of groups years ago...and HIE was one of them...oh well...
As for the likes and dislikes thing...it's too late...just keep going and don't look back...besides it doesn't really matter now...I'm dedicated to this story until the end...no matter what the outcome is...so basically saying I'll take this story to my grave, which highlights how much I care for this story...at least within my own way that is...
As for the link thing...ok...with the Timeline link...I just threw that up there just because... sometimes I question why I did it but...it's still relevant... Then the description...honestly there's not much to say...other than I'm sticking to it... I know...I know...but honestly it's for the best...at least from my perspective... Then the History link...all it is just a little history of the development of the story...because it went through some changes and I kind of just put it there...just in case anyone was curious...although I should probably update it though now that I think of it...
Then the Expansion story link...all that is just a link to the alternate My Little Pony: Universal Magic, where all it is just a bunch of short stories and parodies that wouldn't be in the main story...
And then finally...the Plan and Alternate Plans. the Plans links to the entire outline for the story...as in...every episode that I have planned out...and let's just say it's very long...as in...when you put it in word (at 11 size font, Broadway style font, don't judge that's just how I like to work...), it goes over 200 pages...and I update it whenever I make a change to the plans...and the last update was a while back. I've been meaning to update it because I have a lot of changes to make, a lot of more details to add to some episodes...I just haven't gotten around to it...not only to mention I need to re-arrange some episodes because some episodes I want to bring forward and some episodes I want to push back...but that's going to take sometime because I have to print all the episode titles out, and then lay them all on the ground so I can take a look and see what needs to be switched and changed because trying to do it all in word is a pain in the ass...especially with the big changes I'm planning on making...
And as for alternate plans...it's just the same thing, but for the expansion story...not much to say...only spans like...9 pages or something...
And as for pissing off people..I wouldn't say exactly that...I mean...you're part right...but I also believe it also to be a combination from my earlier days...in which case I don't want to talk about it...
I'll maybe take a look at the project that you're working on...I don't know..just don't have time like I used to...I mean the last episode took me a year and a half to write and I have other stuff in life, as well as a possible reviewing gig for a group on here... I don't get why I was even offered a chance to critique someone else's story and give them writing advice...I mean I told the guy that I wouldn't be right for the job...but he's giving me a shot apparently so...I don't know what to say about that...although the final decision is still up in the air...although my bet is that it won't go through..but the fact that I was offered a chance at it still surprises me...
Also... ah...so I kind of was right...you can tell a lot just by looking at someone's user page on here...who they are, how they act, what interests they have...heck...I say you can tell how open they are just by the ratio between how many they follow and how many follows them...
But yeah...but I can relate to that whole...procrastination...not that it''s the only thing holding me back from pumping more episodes more frequently like I used to...there are other factors...like sometimes I feel like I can't do it...you know? Like I just can't do it...I'm down in the dumps...I feel like shit...and I just end feeling like the best thing I can do is just lay in my bed...and either sleep forever and ever or just die right then and there...
And ah...so you're basically an editor...that's interesting...not that I'm looking for one...(lord knows I tried)...but that's interesting though... Although originally I was going to have someone that was close to me help out...but nothing came of it...we were even supposed to write a story together...but all that happened was that I wrote a few paragraphs...he did nothing...and he's long gone by now...haven't talked to him since 2014...which is ashamed but...what are you going to do?...
Also...I understand your pain...I remember at times when I wrote a lot of text and it all got lost...happened to one of my episodes too...I was in the middle of writing Episode 21 late one night and...shit happened...and I didn't get a chance to save my work...so I had try my best to remember what I had written down originally...
Anyways any other questions you have for the story or would like to know before you read or you think you're just going to leave that ol' friend of mine the dislike and be on your way...because it's fine if you do...wouldn't surprise me...because honestly...I've seen worse...
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You sure like to ramble a lot. If your story is similar then I can see why people would get fed up with it or skim read.
The project is less then a page long right now. I mainly want you to see my current writing style and see if it gives you ideas. I have a lot of special effects like music, sound clips, and line breaks.
The million word count was a joke man. You didn't have to spend so much time on it.
I know the feel of planning with a cowriter and then having nothing happen because they disappear on you.
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Well I just have a lot to explain...nothing is simple or straight forward or else you will be confused...you know...unless there's not much to talk about...like this comment reply...
Ok...I guess I can check it out...
I tend to take things literal sometimes...sorry...
yeah...it hurts sometimes...
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Why...Do you write this??? You only do that...if you are writing dialogue...and want to show a longer pause...Is...English...not your first language?
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I don't know...it's just a habit of mine...I used to add ... at the end of every sentence when talking to someone as way of leaving my mark...but it just kind of evolved into doing it every now and then...I can't help it...
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You can probably set auto correct to fix it for you. Have you read my version yet?
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I don't have auto-correct...
Also..sorry...but I'm a bit confused...which am one am I supposed to be looking at? Is it the first chapter in Three More Things or...sorry I'm just confused what you want me to be looking at....
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Your crazy man. The project is above the sentence, Light of our Solus Remastered.
Also you should probably practice to fix your typing. It would cause extra problems when your writing if you have to go back and delete all those extra dots. It gives off the impression that you talking like a bullied shy kid with a stutter in a high school movie that is afraid of getting beat up for his lunch money. Like my mom sometimes writes "ok ok" when she only needs to type it once but at least she has the excuse of English not being her first language.
Everything has auto correct now. Just enable it. Or if you really don't then just download it. You can probably tinker with the settings for it to change ... to one . by itself.
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Well it wasn't quite clear...you also linked to the story "Three More Things" and it kind of got me confused. Also what is Space battles.com anyways...I never heard of it...also I guess I am kind of crazy sometimes...
Ok...
Well my phone doesn't have Auto correct...mostly because I use a flip phone from over ten years ago...and still kicking...that and the Brave Browser that I use doesn't have it...but it has ad block...and the ability to have 450 tabs open at once....which is what I have going on right now...
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I linked Three More Things to show you how other authors use descriptions. Anyway tell me what you think.
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ok...I'll take a look at it tomorrow...I have stuff to do and then I'm going to bed...need some sleep...
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Ok, so I took a brief look at it just to see what you were talking about and see what you did with it and...I'm a bit confused...
It's mostly because you have the whole thin on a forum post, so I suppose that's why I'm a bit confused, so aside from that...I think it's ok...I also see that it's second person (I think it is anyways...) so I kind of get what you're trying to do...I think...
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No reason to be confused. Just think of it as the story chapters and chat merged together. I much prefer the format rather then fanfiction.net's review system where the author can't really respond and having it on another page means that it is more work so less people are actually going to comment on stories.
It being second person is due to the original source material. Did you get any ideas?
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Not really, no... Although to be honest, I haven't thought about it much so probably in the future when I look back on it...I'll probably get ideas from it...because that's how ideas work with me. They sometimes come quickly and sometimes it takes a while...like last night...I got an idea to add to this story here...and it only took me several years to think of it...
And tell me about it...FanFiction.net is just...well let's just say I really don't like it...
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Like Fanfiction does have a cool system to track traffic to your story but actual feedback just doesn't exist.
Why didn’t you get anything? Did you actually read it or play the music? Well that doesn't really matter.
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ok...
No...I just didn't get ideas...it just takes a while with me is all...
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That seems strange to me but okay. Its just then when I first started out I created my writing style with practice and looking at how others did things. I thought the mechanics in the style would be easy for you to take like adding music in dramatic moments or using line breaks (In SB their ins't a dedicated button for it like here so you would have to look up the code page to see that hr can be used to generate line breaks instead of having a messy manual one.)
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Oh I do have my writing style...although my style is...well it's up for you to decide on that. For me I like it...I have fun writing it and I find myself wanting to continue writing instead of wanting to blow my own brains out because...depending on how I write things...it's either fun or painful (mentally) for me. Like back in school I used to have to write essays all the time, only allowed to use specific words and such...and I had to do a lot of them and believe me, I wanted to just fucking snap and go crazy because it was starting to get to the point where I couldn't take that style of writing anymore...
That and I already add music to my stuff...like this story...or at least I used to. Back in the earlier days I used it a lot, but now I try to use it sparingly and only if I need to add it for reference or something on the lines like that...mostly because back in Episode 17 of this story...I...put in a lot of music and when I look back on it...I kind of want to go back in time and slap my 2013 self back in the head for being such an idiot for doing that...
I even tried to add music for a sad moment in one of the episodes...but later I decided to take it out (at least I think I took it out...) because again, I looked back on it and I felt such like a dumbass...mostly because the sad music that I chose was the worse one I could have possibly choose. The Sad Violin song, that one song that gets memed and not taken seriously...
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For the chapter where you have a lot of music what I would do is break it up so that each section of the chapter has its own specific music. Usually if their are more song in a long story I would cancel the first one and play the next.
In the remastered version I'm going more with OST style. Like the town has its own specific song with slightly different versions so it's not repetitive. The forest has its own song and combat with have unique music. The intro song was an obvious choice to have the RWBY theme song.
Not a lot of stories do what I did so that's why I recommended it. If you already do that then maybe look at the dialogue. You would probably have to compare it the original but I moved and changed things to make the flow better and added a format to the dialogue so you always know who is talking.
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Technically that's what I did...I just over did it is all...
I get what you're saying...
Yeah I don't do too much with dialogue, granted I have my own system of how you can tell it's a character speaking to another character, that or the dialogue is all within the character's head. Beyond that...I don't really have much for ideas for dialogue...
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You know what's funny...and shows how much of an idiot I am? I thought your comments were two separate people...different people...ha ha ha ha ha...oh god I'm an idiot....I apologize. I'm sorry....my deepest regrets...I'm sorry...my bad...my mistake...I'm a fool...just a fucking, dumb fool who embarrasses himself...Well again...sorry...about that...for the two comments...please forgive me on that mistake...I know it's weird and awkward now...now that I noticed it...fuck me right?...
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I just realized you used the wrong your....it's you're...not your....GET IT RIGHT...