It was a rainy day in Cloudsdale/ Ponyville, because the pegisi were getting ready to have a thunder storm down in Ponyville. All of the pegisi were finishing up, all of them except for Derpy Hooves who was on her lunch break. Her lunch included: Muffins and Apple juice. She had finished her juice box when she decided to devour the muffin whole. She took a big bite out of the blueberry muffin when suddenly, she yelped in pain.
" Why did that hurt so much? I hope it will go away..." said the worried grey pegasus. To her surprise, her boss Rainbow Dash and her coltfriend Soarin came in. They had apparently heard the yelp and came to see what had happened.
The concerned boss asked when she saw her wincing.
" Derpy is everything alright? We heard a cry in pain and we came to see what was wrong..." To which Derpy replied.
" *sighs* No... you see a few days ago, I somehow got a toothache... it was easy to deal with when I first got it, but now it hurts really bad." She finished her story and now tears were coming down her face. Soarin walked over to where she was and wiped the tears away. He then spoke.
" Why haven't you gone to see Colgate yet? She might know what was going on and she can help find and fix the problem." Soarin concluded. Derpy was then frozen in spot. She hadn't told anypony that she was afraid of the dentist. She was trying to hide her nervousness when the concerned boss noticed the fear in her eyes. She walked over and put a hoof around Derpy.
" I can see that you are afraid. But that does make me curious as to know, why haven't you gone to see Colgate? Is it because you don't have time in between jobs or is it for a different reason? You know you can tell me anything." Derpy let those words sink in before she spoke with hesitation.
"Can we talk about it in private please? I hope I can trust you two to keep this secret..." Rainbow and Soarin were quiet as they listened with concerned looks on their faces. When Derpy finished Rainbow Dash nodded her head in agreement before speaking.
" I know I can speak for myself, and maybe even Soarin too when I say this: you can trust us with anything you want us to keep private. We promise . Or at least I do." She said that last part with a smile and a chuckle. Soarin nodded in agreement then spoke.
" You can tell us anything you want. I swear as long as I wear my Wonderblots uniform I will keep it a secret." He also added with a smile. Derpy then asked," Can I tell you this secret in a more private area?" Rainbow Dash nodded her head in a "yes" motion.
Rainbow Dash's office was not too far from the break room, and yet it felt like a mile long journey according to Derpy.
" What will Rainbow Dash and Soarin think of me? Can I really trust them? Will I get fired for being afraid? What am I gonna do? Will I have to tell the full truth or can I tell a little and still be alright?" She had thoughts of what was gonna happen when she was pulled into reality by Rainbow Dash's voice talking to her. " Alright were here. Come on in" she said. Derpy soon came back into reality and hesitantly trotted in, Soarin close behind to make sure that Derpy didn't escape.
They all were seated when Rainbow asked, " Is this private enough for you?" Derpy nodded in agreement. Soarin then asked, " Is there something you wanted to tell us?" Derpy just looked down, while Soarin and Dash exchanges worried looks.
Derpy then said quietly,
"Better now then never..." she sighed. "*sighs* You see, when I was a filly, My brothers would always tell me this tale on how Colgate would cook ponies with bad teeth up into a brew and use that brew in the laughing gas. Then later on in my life I was nervous about going and they were laughing and mocking me. They also mocked me about my eyes and how they are different. It all resulted in me bucking them in the face and giving them a black eye that lasted for weeks... I have been afraid ever since then, not just of Colgate, but of them and what they might do..." By this point, tears were coming down her cheeks. In that time, Rainbow Dash and Soarin gave her the proper space. They nodded and Dash came and put her hoof around Derpy while Soarin stroked her back in a comforting manner. Rainbow soon said:
"Of course they will tell you all that. Their your brothers! There going to tell you that to scare you. I would know,and I know that you may be afraid of what they are going to say because of the incident but you did what you did and there is no changing that. But you having a raging toothache means that you may have to go see Colgate about it. Hey, if you want, Soarin and I can go with you, right Soarin?" Rainbow Dash asked.
"Of course! We are always here for you." Those words brought reassurance over her. Derpy let the words sink in before hesitantly asking.
"Is what you're saying true? Will you really be there for me the entire time? Even when I'm in the chair if I go?" Derpy asked with a hopeful yet skeptical look on her face. Rainbow Dash smiled reassuringly at her and said with a very gentle tone which would make even Fluttershy jealous.
" Of course, I am the Element of Loyalty after all. We will be there from the time when you make the appointment to the time you leave the office. We will be there for you right now and anytime you have troubles like this." Rainbow Dash said.
"I promise. I will even Pinky promise on this one myself." Soarin comforted. They let those words sink in then Derpy hung her head in defeat.
"Alright if you promise, then I'll go." Derpy admitted with much hesitation.
I hope you liked it! Feel free to criticize!
As much as I love the plot of the whole Colgate concepts make me want to bang my head against a wall for two reasons
A. Her Halloween costume was a surgeon outfit
B. Her name is Minuette and her cutie mark IS A HOURGLASS what does a freaking hourglass have to do with brushing your teeth.
Mostly a respectable plot cansidering... That
2651002 Well the thing is, the fans kind of made her the local dentist. Now as for her costume, I imagine that's the closest thing they had to a dentist. And correct me if I'm wrong, But don't most dentists wear stethoscopes and facial gear and scrubs? As for her cutie mark, she uses it to her ability, she can stop time, do the work necessary, unfreeze time and they don't miss a second because time stopped. dose that help? If you bother to read this anyway...
2651002 stop trying to insert logic you'll merely anger the beast that is fanfiction
2651002 Hey, she's only Minutte in canon because Colgate may cause some copyright nonsense. It's pointless to complain about fanon vs canon names unless you want to do it in every one of the several trillion Doctor Whooves fanfics ('His name is Time Turner!')
Also, there's not many ponies who look so much like a cooling toothpaste. I just wanna suck on her head.
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See above. Especially the sucking on her head part! Wouldn't you want to?
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Anyways, it's not a bad start to a fic, Elue! It's difficult to tell Rainbow and Soarin apart sometimes, you could maybe try to differentiate their dialogue a little more. I like how they work together, though. It implies that Soarin works like a responsible adult during off-days from the Wonderbolts, unlike other fics that paint him as a lazy slob (his Gala appearance does little to sway that).
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Actually I'm fairly sure her canon name has also been Romana
2651406 Well I was trying not to use their names too much. Thanks for reading by the way I am so happy that you did! I also agree with you on Soarin as well showing that he can have his days were he is a fierce leader and great boy friend for Dash and shows that even men can have their soft and caring sides show sometimes.
Please excuse my cousins... Uproar he hates fandom made jobs and that of the the sort. Although for the oddest reason he loves Doctor Whooves. Then again he has always perfered the real, and logical explanation of things. (Doctor Whooves is the only reason I got him into the fandom with me and my other cousin who if you are in the writers group and find a thread under this username, is my cousin. )
Again I'm sorry for the mishap I guess that's what happens to you at 14...
Sincerely, Humming
2653805 Hey it's alright! My siblings/cousins like to act like me all the time! I feel for you!
He reads through my account and he kept telling me he wouldn't do anything stupid next thing I know I'm forced into writing stitches. (Peice of crap is what that is.)
2654107 Like I said, I feel for you! My solution is simply change my password. That or hide whatever they are hiding in a totally different area that they would never check, Like my bed! Or you could set a passcode on you screen like I did. they have tried time and time again but have miserably failed doing it.
My cousin would screw my over he hacks professionally- for like FBI and CIA.
2654847 well then... didn't see that coming...
Yay welcome to my not so private life.
2655087 Thanks? i don't know how i should feel
Wait a minute... I've read this before...
2650776 I find a few spelling errors in the story, however. If you're out of hiatus, I would suggest using Google Docs as your drawing board (draft) and probably find an editor to look for spelling errors. I'm just suggesting, not criticizing.