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I was considering having him call her daishie but for one I thought that the pet name had been a bit too played out and for two I felt that "Rainbow" sounded more intimate since I meant for it to be a romance
GOSH DANG IT I CAN'T STOP SMILING! Aside from the issues with Grammar and spelling it's great! Excellent detail and everything I can picture everything that is being said easily! I love it!
2185453 Even as a slice of life, this story needs conflict. And not the kind of conflict where it's solved easily in a day, or two, but something that the protagonist really has to struggle to overcome. It might be something as small as the laziness of not putting clothes in the hamper and the roommate/ spouse having to deal with it, to larger things like racial (specie) prejudices and attacks, sexism, and hot button issues like abortion or sexual orientation, maybe even religion. Because as it is, this story reads more like a wish fulfillment fic, than a story.
What I like about this story is that you named the main character as the first human to kill in the bible. Well, not exactly the exact same name, but when I heard of him being a rare race and him being named Cain, I just though of the man named Kane, the first man to kill since the birth of man. While this Cain is the kindhearted and endangered species, I can almost see that they are both opposites.
awesome
You really should read yourself, so many language errors...but good story.
Hey your doing better there was less mistakes with this chapter than the first one. Great job so far by the way.
Well now he can finally evolve his pikachu
go evolve come on
you should get him to call her dashie
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Yes!
I was considering having him call her daishie but for one I thought that the pet name had been a bit too played out and for two I felt that "Rainbow" sounded more intimate since I meant for it to be a romance
love this story keep up the awesome work
so far this is fantastic, cant wait for more
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one of the best replies i have seen.
this story is getting really good, i can't wait for you to update again. i'll be looking towards it with great anticipation/
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OH MY NIXION!
I LOVE IT!!
Great chapter yet again. i really cant wait to see how this relationship unfurls
2214298 thank you I was hoping someone would pick it up
GOSH DANG IT I CAN'T STOP SMILING! Aside from the issues with Grammar and spelling it's great! Excellent detail and everything I can picture everything that is being said easily! I love it!
thank you I appreciate it, im working on the last chapter now but its harder to concentrate these days.
YES! slay that annoying orange and his fruit friends! finally that show will be gone!
Hah! There's that evil human coming out. "Any last words?" Feeling lucky punk?
2185453 Even as a slice of life, this story needs conflict. And not the kind of conflict where it's solved easily in a day, or two, but something that the protagonist really has to struggle to overcome. It might be something as small as the laziness of not putting clothes in the hamper and the roommate/ spouse having to deal with it, to larger things like racial (specie) prejudices and attacks, sexism, and hot button issues like abortion or sexual orientation, maybe even religion. Because as it is, this story reads more like a wish fulfillment fic, than a story.
Peace,
AuthorGenesis
A thunder stone hide your pikachus
2479995 exactly how i was about to describe it such cuteness!
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What I like about this story is that you named the main character as the first human to kill in the bible. Well, not exactly the exact same name, but when I heard of him being a rare race and him being named Cain, I just though of the man named Kane, the first man to kill since the birth of man. While this Cain is the kindhearted and endangered species, I can almost see that they are both opposites.