I felt comfortable, I felt like I was laying in a bed, and I felt the sheets over my chest, I was to weak to wake up at the moment, but I could see a bright light hitting my face, I knew I wasn’t at the forest anymore the leaves where to deep to let so much light get in, I also knew I wasn’t home my room wasn’t that bright not even leaving all my windows open.
I was curious about where was I but I was too weak after blacking out to actually stand up, after struggling for a while I finally opened my eyes, I was in a unknown room but at the same time it looked somehow familiar, it was a really tall room, big windows and white walls, the bed I was laying in was really big, bigger than a queen size bed really soft and comfortable, I wanted to stay there for a while but I had to discover where I was and even more important how had I got there.
I stood up and headed for one of the windows I had a really hard time walking and I was still starving, once I reached the window I took a look at the outside I saw an enormous castle town and I noticed that I was in the castle, looking at the whole town I noticed that the architecture was unlike anything made by men, I knew I’ve never seen it or read about it in any book but it seemed really familiar like something I had seen multiple times, I couldn’t really remember where I had seen it.
I heard some murmurs that seemed to come from a street market, turned my head to see where they were coming from, what I saw shocked me, I couldn’t believe my eyes, what I saw there were... were ponies just like in the cartoon, they were talking and haggling around the market I couldn’t believe it, I mean they didn’t look like the ponies from my world and the only reason for me to know that they were ponies was the show.
When I first saw it I was skeptical I thought it was a dream or a hallucination anyway I blacked out in the forest and this scene just didn’t made sense, I now knew where I was, I was at Canterlot I still thought it was a dream so I tried to wake up in any possible way I could think of, I pinched my arm multiple times and I punched my stomach I normally felt pain so I tried other way, I tried to force me to wake up trying to open my eyes more than possible, I tried to make a lucid dream since I though I was dreaming and I had knowledge of it.
Nothing worked, I sat on the floor trying to understand what was happening and I was still starving, it was just amazing what was happening, even if I started this trip wanting to find Equestria I never really thought I would, and now I was there without even knowing how or who had got me there, when I remembered the last thing I saw before blacking out I was curious of why someone or something would had took me there, specially to Canterlot´s castle.
During the time I was sitting on that floor I though about who or what had took me there and where was he or she right now, I also though if Ponyville really existed, and if it was close, and if the main characters of the cartoon would be there, I was really scared of what could happen at that place but I was also exited to think that I was actually in Equestria.
After a while I heard the door open and I was wandering who could be there, what I saw filled me with joy it was the blue floating mane, the same I’ve seen before blacking out at the forest.
I notice quite a few spelling mistakes as well as some others. Use paragraphs to make the story feel less clustered and more organised.
I felt confortabe, i felt like i was laying in a bed, and i felt the sheets over my chest, i was to weak to wake up at the moment, but i could see a bright light hitting my face, i knew i wasn´t at the forest anymore the leaves where to deep to let so much light get in, i also knew i wasn´t home my room wasn´t that bright not even leaving all my windows open.
Now for a slightly corrected version
I felt comfortable, I felt like I was laying in a bed and I felt the sheets over my chest. I was to weak to wake up at the moment, but I could see a bright light hitting my face. I knew I wasn´t at the forest anymore the leaves where to deep to let so much light get in, I also knew I wasn´t home my room wasn´t that bright not even leaving all my windows open.
there are some more mistakes I'm sure but I dont really feel like going through them right now. Other than that I will track this story as it has gained my interest.
161322 thank you for tracking i really appreciate it a lot
also thanks for the correction and the advice i will correct the mistakes with it
i kinda have a hard time with the spelling since im not american, english is not my first language so what you see is the best i can do
I cant believe Im actually enjoying this
Seems like I dont get annoyed if whole story is written in "bad" english, but I rage when I see one little problem in otherwise perfect grammar...
So yeah, looking forwards to future chapters (Would be nicer if the chapters were a bit longer (Well yeah, who wouldnt like long fanfictions ))