A accidental trip to Equestria changed my life in a way I will never forget.
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Tracking, intresting fanfic i like it
It's a good story, but I suggest you get a proof-reader to check everything over before you release each chapter.
>> Theangryman i would like to do that but its really hard since im not american so even if i could found a proof-reader he or she would not speak english if you can suggest one to me i would love it but it would have to be online
I notice quite a few spelling mistakes as well as some others. Use paragraphs to make the story feel less clustered and more organised.
I felt confortabe, i felt like i was laying in a bed, and i felt the sheets over my chest, i was to weak to wake up at the moment, but i could see a bright light hitting my face, i knew i wasn´t at the forest anymore the leaves where to deep to let so much light get in, i also knew i wasn´t home my room wasn´t that bright not even leaving all my windows open.
Now for a slightly corrected version
I felt comfortable, I felt like I was laying in a bed and I felt the sheets over my chest. I was to weak to wake up at the moment, but I could see a bright light hitting my face. I knew I wasn´t at the forest anymore the leaves where to deep to let so much light get in, I also knew I wasn´t home my room wasn´t that bright not even leaving all my windows open.
there are some more mistakes I'm sure but I dont really feel like going through them right now. Other than that I will track this story as it has gained my interest.
161322 thank you for tracking i really appreciate it a lot
also thanks for the correction and the advice i will correct the mistakes with it
i kinda have a hard time with the spelling since im not american, english is not my first language so what you see is the best i can do
I cant believe Im actually enjoying this
Seems like I dont get annoyed if whole story is written in "bad" english, but I rage when I see one little problem in otherwise perfect grammar...
So yeah, looking forwards to future chapters (Would be nicer if the chapters were a bit longer (Well yeah, who wouldnt like long fanfictions ))
MORE!!
164213 SOON!!!!
Interesting story. Although there are so many i that should be I that it almost drove me insane. But once I put that craziness behind me, I found myself enjoying the story. Keep up the good work.
177424 thanks for the correction, as I already said im not american so i didn´t knew that the i had to be captioned, thanks for tracking
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Oh! you weren't expecting that! Were you? What you thought the "romance" tag was there for?
Not too shabby this fic is starting to grow on me