Awww I was hoping for a nice long scene of the rape train Rainbow was being put through being used by the entire guard barracks for probably a good part of the day.
I may continue the barracks scene later. Only problem I have with it is that, well, it's wouldn't be really anything new, besides the sheer volume of griffons. And with the train scene, I try to keep all characters as canon as possible, and while that was my original intent, I quickly realized one problem; there aren't enough ponies who would do that, hence why I had to (unfortunately) settle on two faceless ponies.
(I was going to use Thunderlane again, but I think I gave him enough bad publicity in my other fic)
You go to Canterlot, kill Captain Ray, Celestia deems you king of Equestria, Rainbow Dash falls in love with you, and you both live happily ever after!
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more rape, more broken Dash, and more memory flashbacks of Dash's fun time at the Griffon kingdom.
I feel like it's wrong that I'm so turned on by this kind of stuff, but hey. It's written well, it actually has a legitimate story and drama, and it keeps being interesting. I'm not sure why it was on the Vore page so far, but I'm kinda glad it was. XD
Damn, those assholes. And again poor Dash. She was trained like a dog to do whatever someone told her. That's a fate worse than death if you ask me. I hope things start to look up for her sooner than later.
I'm hoping this has a good happy ending. I mean I like rape stories and all but the more I read a good rape story the more I wanna slit the rapists throat. This is an amazing rape story, which means instead of slitting his throat I want to slowly torture him and watch all desire slowly leave his face before slowly draining his blood so I can watch the color drain from his face. what's that mean for you? It means you wrote a 10/10 story so far.
Awww I was hoping for a nice long scene of the rape train Rainbow was being put through being used by the entire guard barracks for probably a good part of the day.
Oh come on. I hate it when Dashie gets fucked by some strangers.
Holy shit. That was um.... good writing.
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I may continue the barracks scene later. Only problem I have with it is that, well, it's wouldn't be really anything new, besides the sheer volume of griffons. And with the train scene, I try to keep all characters as canon as possible, and while that was my original intent, I quickly realized one problem; there aren't enough ponies who would do that, hence why I had to (unfortunately) settle on two faceless ponies.
(I was going to use Thunderlane again, but I think I gave him enough bad publicity in my other fic)
thar was rather... interesting... seriously though nicely done!
so what's gonna happen in chapter 6? (please give us a little preread)
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You go to Canterlot, kill Captain Ray, Celestia deems you king of Equestria, Rainbow Dash falls in love with you, and you both live happily ever after!
OR
more rape, more broken Dash, and more memory flashbacks of Dash's fun time at the Griffon kingdom.
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Yeah okay that was a preread...
When is it going to be published?
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Chapter is gonna be delayed due to work... working 38 hours straight kinda saps what a guy can do.
Also I've been working on another idea for a clopfic involving Rarity... we'll see how that goes.
Rarity rape? Me Gusta! nice chapter looking toward to next one.
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Who said anything about rape?
Oh wait...
It's me...
Yeah, rape.
Damnit, now I have to wait for the next chapter!
I feel like it's wrong that I'm so turned on by this kind of stuff, but hey. It's written well, it actually has a legitimate story and drama, and it keeps being interesting. I'm not sure why it was on the Vore page so far, but I'm kinda glad it was. XD
i dont know whats better the story well written or how legit it is
But this has full of references of 4chan
"I want to cum inside rainbow dash"
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FUCK ME IM GORDON RAMSAY AND TELL ME WHAT THE FUCK IS THIS!!!
Me:it's clopfic
FUCK OFF WITH THE TWO UNICORNS
Damn, those assholes. And again poor Dash. She was trained like a dog to do whatever someone told her. That's a fate worse than death if you ask me. I hope things start to look up for her sooner than later.
~SolidFire
I'm hoping this has a good happy ending. I mean I like rape stories and all but the more I read a good rape story the more I wanna slit the rapists throat. This is an amazing rape story, which means instead of slitting his throat I want to slowly torture him and watch all desire slowly leave his face before slowly draining his blood so I can watch the color drain from his face. what's that mean for you? It means you wrote a 10/10 story so far.