Chapter 3
.....INNOCENCE.....
Arise fallen princess of the stars. Arise come forth and awaken, and save this innocent child from the darkness.
Show the darkness that where hope is there can be..
......LIGHT.......
Then a moment later the earth began to shake violently. The crystal star began to pulse with light. It sounds like a great crack of thunder. A beam of shot through the giant crack in the crystal asteroid. After that, the crystal began to shrink and transformed into the royal starlight amulet that holds untold power and many uses. It attached itself around the creature's neck. Once that was completed, the light vanished. There, in its place was a crystal dragon.
note: check authors notes for description of the dragon
Then the crystal dragon opens its eyes and in those eyes he saw sorrow, solitude, heartache,and anger. He remembered the day of Moonbeam's curse beginning, and the death of his beloved.These emotions reminded him of that unfaithful day and it caused him to become enraged.
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Hi everypony it's me sorry it took so long to get in contact with you apparently I was unconscious the entire time so i guess i be watching on whats going. I should stop talking and let you continue with the story.
I started to open my eyes. There in front of me was a child; not just a child, it was a colt. When I looked into his eyes I saw fear.
I asked, "What caused such fear in him?" He did not answer; just pointed to the shadows with his front right hoof. There I saw a pony who was very tall and very slender and wore a black suit and tie. He appeared to have no facial features, but yet I saw facial features where the eyes were supposed to be. Strangely enough, I saw the same emotions I had to endure for so long but it seemed he endured it longer than I. Then I landed five feet in front of the colt, so as to put distance between him and the creature. I flet jolt of energy go through my entire body, and there in front of what was the last bit of the astroid was now transformed into a medium sized five pointed star encased in ice blue aura. It floated to the necklace around my neck and attached itself to the bottom half of the smaller eight pointed star. It was connected by a single small crystal ring. I looked back down at the creature who was still there looking at me, more like staring. I'd ask it later.
Then silently Snails crept forward to my tail and started up my tail to my back and with both hooves. He grabbed my middle spike and that told me it was time to get him to safety. I thought it strange. Why didn't I feel him walking up my back, but only noticed his presence when he grabbed my spike? I'd have to dwell on that later. As I was about to take off, I heard the most agonizing scream of rage. I look back. The creature sent its tentacles at me and at that moment I felt a burst of light within me come forth and the creature was pushed back ten feet. I took wing into the air and saw lights in the distance and flew while the child held on for dear life...
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One moment later...
Slender mane:
As I was getting I notice the dragon and the child was gone, as I was shaking off the shock of being throne back with so much energy which I did not expect.
How dare you dragon interfere with "The hunt"!
we shall meet again this i promise!
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As we got closer, I landed sixteen feet within the town limits on an open field. I reached over my right shoulder with my left hand and took hold of the colt and gently set him down facing the village. I nudged him with the back of my right hand to tell him to go home, but he turned around and thanked me.
"Thank you for saving me," said Snails.
I bowed my head in response to say, "You're welcome".
Then as he was turning back to head home, he was a few feet in front of me when I felt a wave of fatigue come over me. I collapsed on to the ground and everything went dark. The last thing I heard was the thunder of hooves coming towards me.
Author: Until the next time we meet.
To be continued...
You my friend just made a really good story...
2467098 thanks and please explain so I can better understand.
2467104 Ok....
today my English wasn't very good....
2467112 I mean explain why u think I made good story.
2467135 your story is good because....
well the plot is just amazing
that's all I have to say for now
The story looks fantastic, and while there may be a few spelling errors, those can easily be fixed.
My only issue was the formatting, but that can also be fixed quite easily.
Still, good for your first fic, and can't wait to see what else you have in store
2505120 so you read all the chapters I have so far?
Ps. Alone in dark really did happen to me.
2505132 Sorry about that...
And as for reading them all? I realize now that I read the first 3 before, but didn't read the latest, and forgot to come back and finish.
2505136 I have question could you be....my.....editor if that's ok with you that is?
2505152 I'm actually not that great at editing, but I'll give it a shot sometime this week, alright?
And if I can't do a good job, I'll recommend your story to my personal editor.
2505157 ok so should I send some chapters to you or did something else in mind?
2505171 Yeah, send them to me. My email is andrewklingerman@gmail.com
2505175 so do they all need to be fixed?