Sorry for the delay on Chapter 13. I promised it a few days ago and this time it wasn't because of my editors being slackers. I have just survived the worst stomach flu in my life, going on for almost four full days of fever, muscle pains, and, well, the toilet stuff. I don't think you people need details.
The fact is, here's the new chapter. I'm happy to get it released. Now -> brb, toilet.
I don't feel the least bit of sympathy for Cadance after everything she's done in the story up til now. As for Shining, he's finally graduated to doormat bitch.
You know what would be awesome? If, after they fuck, the maids are back to their old teasing and Shining Armor explains in detail what exactly they did.
At first she tries to get up again, but she gently pushes her back down. She looks to the side, averting her eyes, before her head finally droops down.
Cadence suddenly suffers a nasty case of schizophrenia enough to clone herself. She should really get the one checked out by a doctor soon. Or, you know, remove the r in the first her and none of us have to go through another doctor's appointment.
3813184 Or, you know, instead of trying to be funny, just note that I once again messed up with a he/she thing because my superior language only has one word for both genders.
3813194 I have learnt to laugh at errors, because smiling and laughing is more fun than frowning. And while I might use English every day I do, in fact, have somewhat of a dislike for it. But each to their own language I guess.
And the next chapter starts with Shiny in the ER with his chest (barrel?) covered in plaster. Cady locked herself in the bathroom in embarrassment. The doctor says "Now, what did we learn?"
"That sex with cracked ribs is a bad idea, no matter how good it sounds at the time."
I honestly love the very real post traumatic stress disorder of this story. Its a very realistic view of situations that should greatly effect the people involved.
Respect for Shining who is seriously taking control now, although there are still moments where he tries to hide the painful truth, despite calling himself "too honest".
I don't totally agree with the statement that "Neither of them could have done anything different" They both could have done things better, the primary thing being communication, which they probably should've started on way back on their wedding night. They both had suffered from the Changeling incident, it would've seemed obvious to me that after something like that they should've sat down and talked about it instead of ignoring it and pretending nothing was wrong for weeks afterward. That said, this kind of avoidance is very believable and common, so it's not a strike against the story. I'm just pointing out that, as much as both Cady and Shiny are victims, they wouldn't have suffered so much if not for their own (realistic, understandable) flaws.
As for the end of this chapter: I don't think it's bad, but I think it's a bit of a missed opportunity. After a whole story working slowly and painfully through Shining's problems, the ending smacks of Epiphany Therapy. I don't really buy the idea that Shining, especially just after Cadance had hurt him again, would be willing and able to fuck her right then and there. I was hoping for a more drawn-out process of the two once again becoming comfortable around each other in bed, maybe Shiny exercising control at first to feel secure, but eventually relinquishing it once it impresses on his mind that he can trust Cady not to harm him.
Instead, it's a cliche love-conquers-all ending. Missed opportunity, in my unhumble opinion.
Given how much sexual tension has built up over the past few months, the next chapter better be the most beautiful, romantic, wonderful, arousing, filthy, sensual, dirty, erotic, passionate, cloppy fuck fest I've ever read. Those two deserve it.
3813316 Exactly. Not that I have first hand experience about it, but it feels really thought out and convincing. Also love it how there's some real conflict instead of just pure fluff. Good spin on the canon too, I don't think there's any fic taken this serious point of view on the canterlot wedding episodes.
3813468 "This is not the end of CIAM. We're still a few chapters away from the real ending. Several people will probably hate me a bit for what's to come. Tehee."
Sometimes, it's just so hard not to spoil future events.
That was awesome! All the facts and truths slamming into one another in one chapter. And finally, Shining and Cadance discover that they've been hurting each other because of how they desperately wanted to help themselves.
Ah, well. Whatever comes, this story has been enthralling enough as it is to have been well worth it. For all my complaints, this is one hell of a good piece of writing, and you are a majorly talented individual.
Glad to see everything finally coming out in the open. Excellent job of making the experience of what those two went through feel very real. Now they can actually take steps towards healing.
Loved that ending.
I just wasn't expecting this sort of a Spaneighse Inquisition." They both freeze and perk up, looking in horror at the door to their bedchamber.
This fucking story man, always a roller-coaster of emotions and events, and I love it dearly for it!
I really don't see why we need two more chapters to wrap things up though, but hey, I suck balls at writing and the author has proven time and again that he delivers greatly, so I will now sit back and wait for the rest of this awesome ride.
3817309 Rule of thumb: Whenever a story seems like it should be over, but there's still 1 or 2 chapters left, that means everything's about to go to shit. How? Hell if I know.
It's good to see everything all beginning to work itself out. These two have been through a lot of grief, but at least now the healing can begin in full. Keep up the good work!
Nice. After a dozen chapters of dancing around the issue, it's nice to finally see some proper conversation happening.
As for problems that I can see coming? Ick, it's been so long since I last read through everything, and you hide your foreshadowing so subtly that I'm hard pressed to think of anything specific.
I do still see the maids being an issue, in terms of checking their boundaries. It would probably be better if they attended to cadance's needs OUTSIDE of when she's with Shining. Frankly it would be better for their relationship if they handled as much of each other's needs as possible. It's those little acts of doting on each other that gives a couple a chance to properly express their love in ways that last, and it's hard to dote when the maids already do the doting.
There is also Shining's ability to handle politics. He does need to buckle down and properly learn this stuff, but he needs to be taught by a general or some sort of retired military mind who has gone into politics since to be able to show him the ropes in a way that he'll be able to get a personal handle on. All the current tutors, Cadance included, have grown up STEEPED in this type of mindset where all those stupid hoops and manipulations are normal, and that type of attitude is automatically rejected and interferes with his ability to learn, and also makes him feel like he's being treated as incompetent. Cadance: "Why don't you get this? I learned it when I was a foal?" Military Mind: "HAH! That's what I said when they tried to teach me this load of garbage. You've got moxy, Kid, but let me tell you, things work different when you're fighting an enemy that you're NOT supposed to kill. It takes one heck of a mind to succeed in this bassackward world without becoming one of those sissy uptight pansies, but you just might have what it takes."
Cadance needs to get over her prudishness. Good grief girl, yes its tacky and classless if you're just doing that type of stuff in public or with strangers or something, but when you're with your freaking husband, let it out! When you wont share that with anyone ELSE, then it's really attractive, because it makes the fact that only your partner gets to share that really valuable and special, but if you wont even share it with your partner, it just makes it feel like you're shutting them out.
I've got a few other problems i can think that might crop up, but the more I think about them, the more accurate I think they might be, and I don't want to steal any thunder, so I'm gonna pass on doing any more extrapolation for now.
What I expect to see for the rest of the story - Shining And Cadence finally have sex - The maids are back and this time see them having sex or Shining's morning wood - For Twilight to get Karma after what she did all those years back - For Luna to join in on their sex for added security - For Celestia to fucking realize she was basically not that helpful in concern for her niece and nephew - For Chrysalis to have some life-long trauma way worse than Cadence or Shining's
3824244 Nah. I always knew this wasn't finished yet. I'm just really bad at estimating how long some events take to write out. even 17 might be too little, but at least the rest of the story is now pretty much set in stone.
3822620 Yes, yes ,yes! A thousand times yes to all of those!! A Cadence/ Luna/ Shinning harem? What a wonderful way to welcome Luna to the Sparkle family.
Sorry for the delay on Chapter 13. I promised it a few days ago and this time it wasn't because of my editors being slackers. I have just survived the worst stomach flu in my life, going on for almost four full days of fever, muscle pains, and, well, the toilet stuff. I don't think you people need details.
The fact is, here's the new chapter. I'm happy to get it released. Now -> brb, toilet.
There'd better not be a tragic ending.
3812830 Rocks fall. Everypony dies. The end.
Note there's no sad or tragedy tags.
I don't feel the least bit of sympathy for Cadance after everything she's done in the story up til now. As for Shining, he's finally graduated to doormat bitch.
You know what would be awesome? If, after they fuck, the maids are back to their old teasing and Shining Armor explains in detail what exactly they did.
Cadence suddenly suffers a nasty case of schizophrenia enough to clone herself. She should really get the one checked out by a doctor soon. Or, you know, remove the r in the first her and none of us have to go through another doctor's appointment.
3813184 Or, you know, instead of trying to be funny, just note that I once again messed up with a he/she thing because my superior language only has one word for both genders.
3813194 I have learnt to laugh at errors, because smiling and laughing is more fun than frowning. And while I might use English every day I do, in fact, have somewhat of a dislike for it. But each to their own language I guess.
And the next chapter starts with Shiny in the ER with his chest (barrel?) covered in plaster. Cady locked herself in the bathroom in embarrassment. The doctor says "Now, what did we learn?"
"That sex with cracked ribs is a bad idea, no matter how good it sounds at the time."
I honestly love the very real post traumatic stress disorder of this story. Its a very realistic view of situations that should greatly effect the people involved.
Respect for Shining who is seriously taking control now, although there are still moments where he tries to hide the painful truth, despite calling himself "too honest".
I don't totally agree with the statement that "Neither of them could have done anything different" They both could have done things better, the primary thing being communication, which they probably should've started on way back on their wedding night. They both had suffered from the Changeling incident, it would've seemed obvious to me that after something like that they should've sat down and talked about it instead of ignoring it and pretending nothing was wrong for weeks afterward. That said, this kind of avoidance is very believable and common, so it's not a strike against the story. I'm just pointing out that, as much as both Cady and Shiny are victims, they wouldn't have suffered so much if not for their own (realistic, understandable) flaws.
As for the end of this chapter: I don't think it's bad, but I think it's a bit of a missed opportunity. After a whole story working slowly and painfully through Shining's problems, the ending smacks of Epiphany Therapy. I don't really buy the idea that Shining, especially just after Cadance had hurt him again, would be willing and able to fuck her right then and there. I was hoping for a more drawn-out process of the two once again becoming comfortable around each other in bed, maybe Shiny exercising control at first to feel secure, but eventually relinquishing it once it impresses on his mind that he can trust Cady not to harm him.
Instead, it's a cliche love-conquers-all ending. Missed opportunity, in my unhumble opinion.
Given how much sexual tension has built up over the past few months, the next chapter better be the most beautiful, romantic, wonderful, arousing, filthy, sensual, dirty, erotic, passionate, cloppy fuck fest I've ever read. Those two deserve it.
3813316
Exactly. Not that I have first hand experience about it, but it feels really thought out and convincing. Also love it how there's some real conflict instead of just pure fluff. Good spin on the canon too, I don't think there's any fic taken this serious point of view on the canterlot wedding episodes.
Great chapter again, I had fun :3
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3813468 "This is not the end of CIAM. We're still a few chapters away from the real ending. Several people will probably hate me a bit for what's to come. Tehee."
Sometimes, it's just so hard not to spoil future events.
That was awesome! All the facts and truths slamming into one another in one chapter. And finally, Shining and Cadance discover that they've been hurting each other because of how they desperately wanted to help themselves.
3813545 Fixed those a few hours ago. Thanks anyway!
3813549
Am I one of the "several people"?
Ah, well. Whatever comes, this story has been enthralling enough as it is to have been well worth it. For all my complaints, this is one hell of a good piece of writing, and you are a majorly talented individual.
3813648 This coming from you of all people is high praise.
I think you'll be just dandy with the next chapter.
This fic's a blast to read. I don't even mind the long wait between chapters, take all the time you need, man.
You bastard! You totally had me at that ending, I was so into it!
And then you had to go and do that!
Fuck.
3814332 Eeeexactly!
actual sex? great writing
Well that was a needed release of breath. Now the healing can begin.
And by healing I of course mean fucking.
Bet you they go at it all day and night + the Crystal Heart 'climax' at the same time as they do.
3813648
I'm not going to spill too many beans other than reiterating that the story isn't over yet.
Awesome chapter! Well worth the wait!
Glad to see everything finally coming out in the open. Excellent job of making the experience of what those two went through feel very real. Now they can actually take steps towards healing.
Loved that ending.
Priceless!
This chapter... this introspection... those feels... this end...
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Valikdu is a good person.
Oh, there they did it! it was what they needed, oh I'm soo jelly.
Ahahahaah DAT END THO
3812844
Rock ending is best ending.
This fucking story man, always a roller-coaster of emotions and events, and I love it dearly for it!
I really don't see why we need two more chapters to wrap things up though, but hey, I suck balls at writing and the author has proven time and again that he delivers greatly, so I will now sit back and wait for the rest of this awesome ride.
Finally we're near the end and things are finally looking up for both Cadence and Shining. Hopefully it'll get better from here on out.
Another great chapter.
You know this thought crossed my mind when you got over your writers block.
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Oh no! Isseus's writer's block is breaking!
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There! Now he can focus on me.
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NO!!! I'm not even in CIAM.
3819093 Well I did break the block with a huge RD fic.
3817309 Rule of thumb: Whenever a story seems like it should be over, but there's still 1 or 2 chapters left, that means everything's about to go to shit. How? Hell if I know.
3820139 Hum, that actually makes sense, but still I'm hopeful it won't end badly.
Couldn't they set out on a journey and try to get revenge on the Queen? That would likely fix all their issues.
It's good to see everything all beginning to work itself out. These two have been through a lot of grief, but at least now the healing can begin in full. Keep up the good work!
Nice. After a dozen chapters of dancing around the issue, it's nice to finally see some proper conversation happening.
As for problems that I can see coming? Ick, it's been so long since I last read through everything, and you hide your foreshadowing so subtly that I'm hard pressed to think of anything specific.
I do still see the maids being an issue, in terms of checking their boundaries. It would probably be better if they attended to cadance's needs OUTSIDE of when she's with Shining. Frankly it would be better for their relationship if they handled as much of each other's needs as possible. It's those little acts of doting on each other that gives a couple a chance to properly express their love in ways that last, and it's hard to dote when the maids already do the doting.
There is also Shining's ability to handle politics. He does need to buckle down and properly learn this stuff, but he needs to be taught by a general or some sort of retired military mind who has gone into politics since to be able to show him the ropes in a way that he'll be able to get a personal handle on. All the current tutors, Cadance included, have grown up STEEPED in this type of mindset where all those stupid hoops and manipulations are normal, and that type of attitude is automatically rejected and interferes with his ability to learn, and also makes him feel like he's being treated as incompetent.
Cadance: "Why don't you get this? I learned it when I was a foal?"
Military Mind: "HAH! That's what I said when they tried to teach me this load of garbage. You've got moxy, Kid, but let me tell you, things work different when you're fighting an enemy that you're NOT supposed to kill. It takes one heck of a mind to succeed in this bassackward world without becoming one of those sissy uptight pansies, but you just might have what it takes."
Cadance needs to get over her prudishness. Good grief girl, yes its tacky and classless if you're just doing that type of stuff in public or with strangers or something, but when you're with your freaking husband, let it out! When you wont share that with anyone ELSE, then it's really attractive, because it makes the fact that only your partner gets to share that really valuable and special, but if you wont even share it with your partner, it just makes it feel like you're shutting them out.
I've got a few other problems i can think that might crop up, but the more I think about them, the more accurate I think they might be, and I don't want to steal any thunder, so I'm gonna pass on doing any more extrapolation for now.
The final wall is down. Let the healing begin!
And then that ending.
Eh...
Ha ha, dat ending! Glorious!
What I expect to see for the rest of the story
- Shining And Cadence finally have sex
- The maids are back and this time see them having sex or Shining's morning wood
- For Twilight to get Karma after what she did all those years back
- For Luna to join in on their sex for added security
- For Celestia to fucking realize she was basically not that helpful in concern for her niece and nephew
- For Chrysalis to have some life-long trauma way worse than Cadence or Shining's
3822620 You are a petty, vindictive, little man.
3822744
At least it is a slight pain in the head for you to deepen the drama with that path of a story you chose.
Still, at least mine is a list of could be seen rather than speculations.
I see you added 2 chapters to your plan (17 total now).
Is this a classic case of "ending bigger then first planned" ? Or did some cool ideas just come to you in your sleep?
3824244 Nah. I always knew this wasn't finished yet. I'm just really bad at estimating how long some events take to write out. even 17 might be too little, but at least the rest of the story is now pretty much set in stone.
3822620 Yes, yes ,yes! A thousand times yes to all of those!!
A Cadence/ Luna/ Shinning harem? What a wonderful way to welcome Luna to the Sparkle family.