Chapter 5: The Spell
The sun started to shine into the library, quickly enveloping everything and everyone in light. Six ponies of various colors and race were all sleeping soundly inside their sleeping bags along with one snoring baby dragon. Despite the mental alarm clock Twilight had set for herself, she never stirred. All of them slept away peacefully until the morning slowly died away and two began to wake. Unfortunately, neither of those two were Twilight Sparkle. Applejack and Rainbow Dash woke up with no intention of waking their friends.
They both made breakfast quietly, hoping not to wake up their friends. Dash was smirking to herself while Applejack was looking back unamused.
"Wha?" Applejack asked while jamming food into her mouth.
"We were supposed to be awake a couple hours ago to catch the train. When do you think Twi will wake up and freak out?" she asked while trying to stifle a giggle.
"Oh, soon enough. Should be any minute now," the farm pony said while remaining as calm as possible.
They continued to eat in silence and stare back at their friends with nothing else to do. Slowly, they all began to wake until the last one who was sleeping was, in fact, Twilight. After some quiet yawns and quiet 'good mornings', they heard somepony twitch, out of nowhere a lavender colored unicorn who went from quietly sleeping to frantically yelling to her friends in no time at all.
"THE TRAIN LEAVES IN TWENTY MINUTES!"
"Uh, Twi, ah don't think we are going to make it to that—"
Before Applejack could finish her sentence, she was lifted into the air at the hoof of her friend’s magic. And before any of her friends could protest, every single one of them was lifted into the air, enveloped in a lavender colored magical embrace. Twilight grunted, then concentrated her magic and, in a flash, they vanished from the library and reappeared at the train station. She gently put them down and began to pant.
"Twi, you are really, really scary with your magic sometimes," Rainbow Dash said while trying to shake the dizziness off.
They all somberly agreed but decided to drop the issue and pay for their tickets. After a quick wait, they boarded the train heading to Canterlot. They all found a quiet cabin and began to converse.
"So… dragons?" the cyan pegasus questioned, trying to sound casual, but failing as she let a hint of excitement out.
"I know! Oh fir—"
Rainbow Dash placed a hoof in Pinkie Pie's mouth. "Sorry, Pinkie. Not that we don't want you to throw a party, but I would rather talk about the weirdness of this first, you know?"
"It does seem mighty strange. Other than Spike, when have we ever seen any other dragons just pop up that ain’t tryin' to destroy the town?"
"Ah C'mon, Applejack, dragons aren't that bad!" Spike said while feeling a bit offended.
"Spike, one tried to kill you when you stowed away in his cave and then you met those jerk dragons during the migration," Dash said while feeling just a bit smug.
"I think what Dash means, dear, is that typically those of your race tend to be on the brutish side. And it is a bit odd to have two dragons just drop into the princess's lap that seem to act more along the lines of, well, what we find in you," Rarity exclaimed while keeping her calm demeanor. "At least I hope they do…"
"Now that you put it that way, I guess it is pretty strange." Spike began to scratch his head.
"The princess has been sending ships to and from the Dragon Islands for a while now, but this is the first I've heard of a stowaway problem. The banishment part, though, makes a lot more sense. I just wonder what they did to end up banished in the first place," Twilight said while gazing out at the scenery.
"Well, maybe they acted a bit different," All six passengers turned their heads to Fluttershy who let out a quiet 'eep'.
"Why, whatever do you mean, dear?"
"Um, it's just, I kind of know what…" She looked around and noticed all eyes were locked on her, making her feel far more unnerved, but she continued. "…it's like to be tossed out." She finished in a very meek tone.
"What do you mean?" Pinkie asked, tilting her head to the side in a manner that seemed painful, but still she kept her playful innocence.
"Just trust me when I say, I think I know why they were banned and it was probably from their… differences." She finished, hoping her friends would drop the subject.
Twilight did not buy her act for a second and knew she meant something deeper but felt it was best to focus on the main problem first. "That seems like it makes sense, but that still leaves us with a few problems. First, who are they going to be living with?" She looked around and everypony gave a big shrug so she rolled her eyes and continued. "Also, what did the Princess mean by 'Spyro has the most to lose?'"
"That's the youngling dragon right?"
Twilight nodded.
"No clue, what do you think, Spike?"
"Me? Why me?"
"Um, you’re a dragon, doofus," Dash said while giggling.
"The letter was too vague, Dash. I really have no clue," the young dragon said while throwing his arms up.
"Okay, then who wants to take which dragon in?" Twilight asked growing more annoyed by the minute.
"Oh, oh! I can take them both!" Pinkie beamed with pride.
"Do y'all even know how to take care of a baby dragon, sugarcube?"
Pinkie blinked twice and she concentrated as if she was deep in thought for several moments. Then, without warning, she let out one big “NOPE!”
"Well, to be fair, none of us really do. Not that our Spikey Wikey is that much trouble. Isn't that right, Twilight?" The lavender mare blinked and then let out a single soul screeching laugh before calming herself.
"Sorry about that… And yes, right now he's not because I taught him right. This Claws was raised in the dragon lands so we do not know what his behavior is like. And Spyro sounds like he is still in the—"
"Youngling phase?" Spike finished, knowing exactly what she meant.
"Yes, thank you, Spike. That phase. Not to embarrass you, but when I was still studying in the castle, you were quite the charge," she finished while chuckling.
"You mean burning down books by accident and causing you all sorts of troubles? Those were good times!" Spike finished while chuckling to himself with his eyes closed. After a moment, he opened them to five extremely confused mares and one angry one glaring him down.
"Yes, that, Spike. Good times. But basically, whoever takes them in needs to know what they are getting into. Claws may very well turn out to be just like Spike and would, in theory, not be much of a problem. On the other hoof he could be…" she paused to try and think of a word.
"Barbaric?" Rarity offered.
"Well, I didn't want to use a word that would insult them, but yes, he could be."
"Just sounds like any other young colt that needs a proper mare to teach him manners. I'm up for the challenge," Rarity exclaimed while trying to imagine her life with a dragon other than Spike working under her. The purple dragon let out an audible groan at the mention of this, but kept his comment to himself.
"As for whoever takes in Spyro, just be prepared for possible… accidental fires. Being so young, he wouldn't know any better, so whoever takes him will need experience in taking care of foals at the very least. And how to manage fires, at the worst."
At the mention of this, all of them knew which ones among them were far more qualified to take in the younger charge. Twilight was the first to come to mind, but she was still reluctant to say yes. Next was Applejack who had been taking care of her sister for ages. She would be better fit to take care of him. Rarity knew some things about foal care, but she did not always sit for her sister. And finally, Pinkie Pie had some experience taking care of the cake twins, but the age range was off. Still, it did not count her out. Rainbow Dash was out from the start unless somepony could invent some type of permanent cloud-walking spell. Fluttershy knew how to take care of animals and was clearly not against the idea, but Twilight wanted somepony with real experience for the youngest one at least.
"Well other than Twi here, I guess I have the most experience takin' care of young’uns. Apple Bloom was a hooffull, but I never dealt with dragons before."
"Most ponies haven't. If you do decide to take Spyro in then I would be glad to help in any way," Twilight offered.
"Well, we'll see. I guess in the end it's up to the Princess, right?"
"Right."
The rest of the train ride was spent in silence. Each and every pony was thinking over what Twilight told them and even though most wanted the dragons, they kept thinking the very idea was nuts. Rarity did not seem to mind the idea of having her own assistant if she could teach the older dragon her definition of manners. Pinkie loved the idea to death, but all of them were reluctant to even let her try, but Twilight was still not counting anypony out. Even herself. It almost felt like a lottery where the prize was a new family member for life.
The train arrived in Canterlot at around three PM. They all decided it was best to get to the castle as fast as possible first and possible make plans for the city later.
A tall figure stood above two very sleepy dragons. The two were peacefully unaware of her presence. The figure decided they had slept enough and decided it was time to wake them. She stretched out one of her wings and gently tried to rock them awake.
"Dragons, it's time to get up!"
Claws immediately started stretching until he noticed the tall alicorn hovering above his size. "Um, hi?" he added. Her presence still unnerved him.
"Good morning, Claws. Did you sleep well?" Her tone was as motherly as she could offer.
"Yes, yes I did. What spell did you use on Spyro, by the way?"
She was hoping to avoid this topic, but, in a way, she had no reason to keep it from him, especially if he was friends with young Spyro.
"I suppose there is no harm in telling you the truth, but it is quite the hard pill to swallow…" She trailed off when she noticed Claws probably did not get that saying, but she still continued. "How long have you known Spyro?"
"Just a couple of weeks."
Celestia wanted to sigh in relief, but kept it to herself. It was good, in her opinion, that they hadn’t known each other for any longer. She sighed and leaned down to his ears. Then she started to whisper exactly what she had told her sister the night before. When she was finally finished, Claws simply looked at her in shock.
"I will admit it is quite harsh, but it must be done for his own safety. Just stay his friend in the end and everything will be alright. Now if you'll excuse me, I have to make preparations for our coming guests." She was about to leave when she hesitated. "Whatever you do, you must keep this a secret!"
"Uh, okay…"
She had her doubts that he would but decided to leave and let him work it out on his own.
Claws began to shake Spyro almost violently. "Hey, wake up!"
"OW! What?!"
"The princess just said a bunch of crazy stuff. Are you from another world?!"
"Probably?" Spyro started scratching his head. He felt disoriented.
"Why did you not tell me before?!"
"Would you have believed me?"
"Um, good point." With the mention of that, Claws decided to calm down.
"Besides, I really thought this whole thing was a dream until now."
"How can you go to sleep in dreams? We have been doing that for two weeks now!"
"Good point."
They both started laughing, but Claws still felt nervous.
"Where did the princess go?" Spyro asked while standing up and started brushing himself off.
"She said something about preparing for guests or something."
"Ah, did she say to wait here?"
"Um, honestly no… Why do you have that crazy look in your eyes?"
"Wanna explore the castle?" Spyro was giving him a toothy grin.
"Honestly? No!"
"Ahh c'mon, while we wait for her guests, let's do some exploring. It's not like there's much else to do in here."
"If we get caught, I'm telling them it was all your idea!"
"Deal. Now let's go!"
They slowly opened the chamber doors. To their relief, there were no guards posted during the day. They had no clue where Princess Celestia went or where to even go. They decided it was best to slowly sneak downstairs and make their way through some chambers. Claws was nervous as ever. Spyro seemed giddy and, in truth, did not feel like they were breaking any rules; Celestia never said to stay put this time. They ended up in a long corridor with dozens of doors and pathways to take.
"Which way, Claws?" Spyro was looking left and right and in every single direction. So many doors with so many possibilities.
"Me? This was your idea!"
"Fine, let's just pick a random hallway and start walking!" Following another (in Claws terms, hilarious) antic of playing eenie meenie miney mo, they choose one that led to another side of the castle. Walking for over twenty minutes straight, they came to a stop when they noticed the sun was not visible anymore. The hallway they ended up in was quite dark and very secluded.
"Where the heck are we?" Spyro looked around and noticed this part of the castle seemed less than clean. It was obviously not used that often.
"How should I know? Can we please go back now?"
"No, we sh—"
"That would be a wise decision." A deep bellowing voice interrupted Spyro. They both looked around and saw no creature or body that the voice could have come from. After a second, they saw a purple light imitating from a very large alicorn. Spyro looked at her in awe. She was very much like her sister, only slightly smaller. Claws was stiff.
"Um, hi?" Spyro spoke up with an audible high pitched voice that would come from a young child who is nervous.
"Hello, young dragons. Is there any particular reason why you find yourselves near the castle dungeons?"
"Dungeons?" Spyro looked around to find the stereotypical wooden doors with metal bars where the window should go. He couldn't help but let out a small smile. "COOL!" Claws looked at him in disbelief and couldn't help but take his claw and smack his own head in annoyance.
The alicorn shook her head, but spoke up. "While I fail to understand the mannerisms and interests of the present and youngest generation, I believe introductions are in order. No?"
"Oh! I'm Spyro and this is Claws."
"And I am Princess Luna, ruler of the night."
"Cool!"
"I fail to see how my title would be related to a natural element."
"Huh?" Spyro titled his head. Now all three were confused, but, oddly enough, Claws decided to speak up.
"I think he means that being a princess is cool. It's kind of like saying that someone is amazing. But can we please leave now!" He looked around. Just the site of the dungeon doors filled him with more unease.
"Very well. Tia's guests have arrived and I believe they are waiting for you," Luna said while beginning to lead them away.
"Who's Tia?"
"Oh, that is what I call my sister, Princess Celestia."
"Oh. Sorry we wandered off, we just got bored and Tia never said not to explore."
"She didn't? Then perhaps we can have a bit of fun. They are quite frantic looking all over for you two right now." The princess now wore a smile, the kind that would not be unheard of on a super villain.
"You want to play a prank on your sister?" Spyro couldn't resist giggling. Even Claws shared in a laugh.
"We may be royalty, but the life is quite boring. We are often found 'pranking' one another as you put it. But you will both need to play along for it to work."
"Well, what did you have in mind?"
"A simple invisibility spell will be placed on you two. The spell does not hide noise, so be as careful as you can and follow my lead." Luna's horn glowed and enveloped both of them in a glowing aura. In an instant, neither dragon could see the other and, to their amazement, they couldn't even see their own claws.
"Now, the spell will wear off in around twenty minutes time, so let's hurry and just have a little fun, hmm?" She looked down at what she hoped was the dragons and they continued to the main chamber room.
All three emerged into the chambers to find six ponies, one princess and one baby dragon all looking tired and defeated.
"Any luck, Luna?" Celestia asked. She sounded worried.
"I'm afraid not. I checked down in the dungeons but found no trace of them."
"We looked everywhere for them! How can two little dragons just up and disappear?" Twilight Sparkle was pacing back and forth. The two invisible dragons shared what they hoped was a look and decided to think of the best way to go about their prank.
"I'm sure they will turn up. Now calm yourself, Twilight," the lunar princess said. It took every fiber of her being to stop herself from breaking into a grin.
They began to converse among themselves, slowly getting nowhere. Meanwhile, Claws had decided it was best to slowly stalk the pegasus with the rainbow mane. Spyro wanted to freak out the lavender unicorn. They both decided to wait until they were busy talking to go in for their kill.
"Perhaps we should focus on the other problem first. The castle is on lockdown after all, hmm?" Luna suggested.
"I guess so…" Twilight took a deep breath and then turned to Princess Celestia. Princess… what did you mean by Spyro has the most to lose?"
Princess Celestia regarded them all. All eyes were on her. After ruling a kingdom for over two millennium, it still did not get old. Talking in public is not something natural and presenting bad news to others would never seem natural to her.
"Right, both dragons will need a place to stay, but there is a problem with the youngest one. Tell me, Twilight, do you remember asking me about Star Swirl and his family? Do you remember me trying to avoid the topic as much as possible?"
"That was a long time ago, but yes. Why?"
"Star Swirl was originally from another realm and was not always a pony."
"Whoa, whoa, whoa, you saying that egghead unicorn was an alien?" Rainbow Dash questioned while slowly floating in the air. Claws cursed under his breath at his opportunity leaving him.
"In a sense, sure. He was something called a human. We never fully understood how he showed up and, thus, I was never able to send him back. His world was full of magic which would explain why he was so good at constructing new spells. But pretty soon we found a problem. He was comfortable with being a unicorn, oddly enough. Eventually, however, it started to affect his mind. His human mind, as it were, was having trouble adjusting. Doing some calculations of his own, he discovered that if we did not try something that he would have gone mad. We developed a spell that would sever any and all connections with 'humanity' as he called it. In the end, he was a full unicorn in mind, body and soul. He willingly used the spell on himself even knowing that it would destroy any and all memories of his planet, for his own good." The stoic voice never wavered or cracked into a grin or a frown the entire time she spoke. All occupants in the room stood by, staring in shock, even Spyro. Claws looked away, feeling a bit guilty. Twilight was flabbergasted, but she spoke up.
"Princess, that is astounding! But what does this have to do…"
"Yes, Spyro was a human and now he is a dragon. I know this because of a simple mind-reading spell I used on him. I saw quite a bit about his world and his life. It was wrong to use it on him, but I had to know. And my suspicions did not prove false. Now you see the problem? If we do not do something soon, I fear for his safety."
"What do you mean?!"
Everyone in the room let out a gasp with the exception of Princess Luna who knew the game was up. With a sigh, she relieved the spell on the two dragons and revealed their forms.
"The dragons!" Applejack let out an ear-screeching gasp. Spyro ignored it and walked up to Celestia to question her.
"What do you mean, my safety? I feel fine!" Spyro ignored everyone else in the room and their stares. His eyes were locked on Princess Celestia and only her. The sun goddess gave her sister a menacing look, but Luna simply shrugged and smiled.
"Spyro, you must understand, if something is not done soon then your mind will start…"
"Cracking?" Spyro finished.
"Basically, yes. I understand that your life has not been easy, growing up in an orphanage is never something any child of any race should have to go through. Changing races is another one of those things. But do you trust that I, and everypony here, want what is in your best interest?"
"How can I trust 'em? I haven't even met them!"
"Well then, do you trust me?"
He eyed the princess. After hearing that she invaded more than his personal space, his initial response should be no. But he was a reasoning child and he had to admit that his knowledge of this world and magic was next to nothing. If the princess of an entire land was concerned for him and said his mind would go insane then she would have to be telling the truth, right? She had no reason to lie. With a sigh, he nodded.
"Then my student and I will prepare this spell. Please, all of you wait outside. I have matters to discuss with my pupil here." The chamber doors closed and they all waited around awkwardly. After their little chat, nopony or dragon felt like talking. Luna was eyeing the door intensely as if deep in concentration. With a heavy sigh, each and every occupant waited.
"Princess, this is… this is…"
"Crazy?"
"YES!"
"I understand the seriousness of the situation. But it is the truth. Spyro is from another world and needs your help."
"Me? Don't you know the spell?"
"I do, but to be honest, and forgive me if this comes off as selfish, I do not have the heart to destroy his memories. It is practically destroying a life!"
"I, um, understand. What will happen to him once it is complete?" Twilight questioned. She noticed Celestia had levitated a spell scroll in front of her. Twilight began to memorize the spell.
"Most likely, confusion, mental regression, and an unnerving sense of belonging in a brand new world. Right now, he is treating this situation as if it were a dream, perhaps even a vacation."
"You mean, to him, turning into a dragon seemed better than wasting away at an orphanage?"
"Correct. And if it is any consolation, Twilight, at least he gets adopted this way, even if it is a new life." A single tear fell down her face. It did not go unnoticed.
"If it helps, my friends and I will take great care of them. We promise!"
Celestia looked over at her student's sincere smile and couldn't help but break out into a grin. "I know you will. Do you think the spell is too much for you?"
"Oh, no! It is actually quite simple. I'm ready now if you are."
"Yes, remember to use an extra burst of magic. His dragon skin will be resistant to it."
"Of course."
Celestia opened the door and asked for the youngest individual. They shoved him inside and he waited with his arms crossed.
"Are you ready, young Spyro?"
"Is it gonna hurt?"
"No. It is a simple spell. Although you may find yourself feeling dizzy for a while. Ready, Twilight?"
"Yes. Stand back please."
Celestia complied and waited.
Twilight's horn began to glow. At first, it was in a simple neutral state while she summoned up the runes of the spell in her head. After a moment, her horn began to let out a quiet pulsating noise and then it enveloped the dragon. At first, he felt tingly, but he felt nothing affecting his mind as he thought it might. After a moment, his whole body began to pulsate. Princess Celestia began to look nervous. She looked like she was trying to remember something. Soon his tingling sensation stopped and, in it's place, his claws began to burn.
Twilight Sparkle's pupils began to dilate and glow to an extreme level. Slowly, the spell built up more until Spyro's claws began to glow with the burning sensation slowly turning into a twisting sensation. He felt his claws twist and change before his eyes. After a second, a flash of lightning began to emit from both his hands until it filled the entire chamber with random, chaotic lightning. Spyro was too shocked to say anything.
"TWILIGHT STOP THE SPELL!"
Through her spell induced haze, she tried to speak, letting out something that was almost inaudible. "I C… Can't!"
The lightning began to change color to the same lavender hue of Twilight's coat. Spyro was lifted into the air with his arms held out to his sides. Slowly, his eyes began to glow the same color as Twilight's. In a literal flash, his whole body pulsated and vibrated. He let out one big sphere-shaped arc of lightning that seemed to grow from his claws and push out towards the living beings in the room. The world of all three living beings were cut short and then there was darkness. The spell stopped with Princess Celestia, Twilight Sparkle and the young dragon plunging into darkness.
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Cold Spike and I agreed that a succesful erase spell would have taken the entire shtick of the story away.
So I just said MAKE THE SPELL MISFIRE!!!!!!!!!
And here is his glorious result with of course one heck of a cliffhanger.
I usually do not do cliffhangers cause in other stories they get me angry... but now I see they are fun
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It sounds to me like they're about to take a vacation in Spyro's memories.
Actually... no. But that does give me a good idea, remind me to give you credit if I end up using it
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1831884 kk. That leaves my other guess; Locked in a realm of darkness until the necessary prerequisites are met.
Darkness is only a light theme in the whole story, so I'm afraid not. But you will like what happens. 1831940
1831953 Ok, now I'm quaking in anticipation... or maybe it's nervousness. I can't seem to find my kitten, Milly. Mom let her escape her room and she's nowhere to be found!
Oh no the dreaded cliff-hanger but I’m glad you didn’t put this on hiatus.
On another note the Kid sure was quick to agree to ‘drink the brain bleach’. But seeing as wiping his mind would pretty much end the story it was going to fail but I wonder where you will take this.
Well to him it is still kind of a dream in a way even if Claws tried to convince him that its not. Plus he is supposed to be more of a reasoning child first and do things on the fly, so being told that you might go insane is something he would listen to. If that makes sense? 1835023
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There are holes I could poke it that but like I said I’m looking forward to seeing where it’s going.
Actually I would appreciate any holes being posted, I won't be offended. It helps me be a better writer + I can fix them. 1836014
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It’s really a show and don’t tell thing rather than a hole. ‘It mightn’t be because you wanted to get to the interactions as fast as possible but I won’t speculate.’
simply put Instead of saying he is a reasoning child; show him at one point trying to reason the problem away ‘giving us a glimpse into how his thought process works’ instead of just asserting it’s there.
At the moment to me he seems quick to take Celestia’s word because you don’t show what reasoning lead him up to accsepting her word or even why he would believe her in the first place. Instead of just having Celestia say ‘you will go insane later’ and him believing her, you could show him struggling with physically being a dragon a bit more. Or just the whole dreams don’t work like this but I can’t really be a dragon delusional loop he would develop While he was stuck on the ship for ‘two weeks’ and had nothing but time to think about it. It would help a bit with the credibility and give more characterisation. ‘Just be sure to keep it sublet’
-Maybe while on the ship, claws could walk in on Spyro trying to wake himself up even if Spyro is just sat on the bed slapping himself across the face or he could pull out a scale 'very painful according to fanon’. Or he could question Claws whether he would know if he was imaginary It would also be consistent with and help solidify Calws view of him being weird
Then ‘Spyro’ would get confused about how you’re not supposed to feel pain in a dream, or how time doesn’t drag. or how you dont sleep in dreams. But the fact you can only remember about 1% of a dream after waking up could be the justification to want to ignore it. That or the fact he just can’t get his head around being a dragon could convince him he is dreaming but still allow a lingering doubt in his mind, The fact he asked if the spell will hurt could be a product of this.
At some point he could just get frustrated and try and keep his mind off of it by talking with Claws about random stuff from home again helping give even more reason for claws to think he is weird.
Then when he gets to Celestia and she has an explanation for why he can’t make sense of this and that it will only get worse he would be more justified in saying ‘bottoms up’ in my opinion anyway.
One more note if they do end up going for a romp in his mind ‘just for possible inspiration.’
‘Don’t worry (insert name of random child) the monsters are all in your head…’
(If I ended up in my own head I for one would keep looking over my shoulder for some of the crap that haunted me as a kid ‘dam relatives letting me watch horror movies at 4’) plus it would be funny having Twilight rack her brain trying to figure out why people scare themselves shitless with horror movies.
I might go through the child's mind but only briefly.. probably something random lol. As for all of that did you ever stop to think that maybe Spyro has no intention of 'waking up'? It is real but like all children we often place our fears in the back of our heads, in his case he has no want to return to the world of Earth and the crappy orphanage. I could show more scenes in the future with his reasoning skills however, it is a good idea. If this was a non brony adult, sure try to wake up from the dream, but this is a child and he is not only going along for the ride but he never wants the ride to end :)
As for accepting her, I guess I could of had a thought process for Spyro right before he nods.... maybe I will add that later. But to me a lot of those only seem like weak points in a story IF the character was a fully reasoning adult. Don't you think? 1838555
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Fair enough, I know you know his motivations but the point is touching on them and then ‘showing them rather than telling’.
The examples where just there to show how it mightn’t work based on one thought process that’s not necessarily his, that and I was just throwing crap at the wall to see what sticks’.
Faiiiiiiiiiiiiir enough. In this story I like to experiment a bit here and there. So maybe in the next chapter I will show more of his thoughts and ideas, I planned on doing that after all once we get the Canterlot scenes out of the way and finally go to Ponyville. 1841242
u need to learn grammer, dude......
You keep spelling of as off... and a few other minor, but annoying mistakes.
Love this adoption concept.
I hope he uses this also in the future. It is a nice personality trait.
Yep, because there's nothing barbaric about child labor
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It wouldn't be so squicky to me if they hadn't earlier described Claws as a "good potential companion" as if he was a dog.
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Unicorn Privilege.
No!
You destroyed mystery, not cool.
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If you mean the story, probably. I wrote this a long time ago and wasn't as skilled of a writer yet.