Why the hell is this rated Teen if there's EXPLICIT SEXUAL CONTENT?

1512413 This sums up my thoughts exactly.

I got smacked by a wall of words there. And the punctuation is all messed up. I couldn't go on past the first 5 lines, sorry.

And the description says it leads to rape and incest. Shouldn't this be rated M, then?

I barely glanced over the story, and now I'm wondering who approved this.

I mean, I'm all for the mods accepting fics faster so they don't back up, but a quick glance over (thirty seconds) should tell any mod that this needs to be rated mature.

Good job!

... on changing the rating for the sole purpose of letting people see something they don't want to!

Cancel
Rewrite
Mature Tag
Remove "Tragedy"
Remove wall of text
Post
Finish

You guys have no taste. This is the best thing ever.

They don't think it be like it is, but it do.

I'M BLIND I'M BLIND SOMEBODY HELP ME MY EYES THEY'RE BURNING OH CELESTIA AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH THEY BURN

Cancelled

And he's down from the word go!

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Aside from being a huge wall of text, it is actually fappable. Stimuli: 6/10, would clop again. //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Pinkie_loool.png

1: I actively do not want to know.

2: I don't think it's rape if its consensual

Down voted for being improperly flagged sexual content.

I... just don't... why? I don't even...

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^this is the way that I imagine the writers mindset.

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Maybe people don't sleep anymore. That is very common among us internet-goers.

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I was hoping to see that gif again. I love it.

Whoa, whoa, whoa! This story is scaring the boo-boos!
If you get that reference, then you get a gold star.

Anywho, this is my first review in a while, so let's get this rolling, shall we?

First of all, there appears to be a large wall o' text in the way of the story. If you could possibly press enter every few times, as well as tab, then that would make this a whole lot easier to read and to follow along with.

Another thing is that you need to use periods! Commas can't end every sentence you type, because now you're just making run-ons and it gets hard to follow after a while.

Also, I'm not usually very picky, but I do have a pet peeve about ellipses. They're the three periods in a row that usually cut off a thought before a character can finish it. But that's just my pet peeve speaking, so it's not something really major. Okay, now that I think about it, maybe I am picky. 'Hoof' as a singular noun, is spelled without a 've'. Rather, it is spelled with a 'f'. 'Hoof' is only spelled as 'hooves' when you are talking about more than one.

So, unless this is a trollfic, I recommend getting a proofreader as always, and to go back and correct any mistakes.

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What just happened?

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I'd gladly mod to filter tripe like this.

Not really any rape....
Also, too short.

It's still a work in progress.

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