Soarin'.... you are SO going to die when this all gets out... and i'm going to laugh, and laugh, and laugh...
anyways onto my review: I liked the way you have portrayed the trauma that has clearly broken her mind, and I await the next chapter, but I have to ask, what were you doing in which it took so long to bring so little of a chapter? I was kind of hoping for a much longer chapter than what was given, still liked it and finally revealed the villain after all but still.
1516575 ah~ say no more, while i have never had that horror happen yet, i know the stress of it well enough from my siblings and my parents. Will you be able to crank out the chapters longer in less of a time span now? or is schoolwork still kicking your butt?
wait soarin why would soarin feel the need to break into somepony's house was he looking for pie? -blank stare- okay as soon as I wrote that I remembered that the home doubled as a bakery and pinkie is a pie
edit: also calling it now Scootaloo looking at soarin and saying "say it isn't so"
Shama-llama-lan Twist: Soarin crashed just outside the woods trying to practice a move that would impress RD, failed, and didn't want to go somewhere where his crush may get wind of him like Ponyville hospital, and his part in the story is as an emotional crutch for RD who had a thing for Pinkie who now spurns advances for a bit while she's recovering. The villain, meanwhile, is being eaten by an manticore.
I saw the "Mature - Sex" marker and the "Dark" tag, and expected to sit down to a nice little rape-clopfic. What I find instead... is a masterpiece.
I had seen so many clichéd stories where rape = love, or the character just "got over it", that the concept of it being a serious trauma had almost become alien to me. But the emotions in this story are so real. I'll definitely be keeping an eye on this.
Oh BUCK!
Why the fuck is Soarin there?
WHAT.
Soarin'.... you are SO going to die when this all gets out... and i'm going to laugh, and laugh, and laugh...
anyways onto my review: I liked the way you have portrayed the trauma that has clearly broken her mind, and I await the next chapter, but I have to ask, what were you doing in which it took so long to bring so little of a chapter? I was kind of hoping for a much longer chapter than what was given, still liked it and finally revealed the villain after all but still.
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Sorry, Working on term papers.
1516575 ah~ say no more, while i have never had that horror happen yet, i know the stress of it well enough from my siblings and my parents. Will you be able to crank out the chapters longer in less of a time span now? or is schoolwork still kicking your butt?
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I'll try to update more often with longer chapters, but school is making me her bitch. lol.
Your good at writing comedy.
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Oh shit. Now Dash is going to suffer minor psychological trauma.
1517220 MINOR?! Well, I don't think that the trauma would be minor to say the least...
All I can say now though, is this...
SHIT SON! THIS JUST GOT REAL!
wait soarin why would soarin feel the need to break into somepony's house was he looking for pie? -blank stare- okay as soon as I wrote that I remembered that the home doubled as a bakery and pinkie is a pie
edit: also calling it now Scootaloo looking at soarin and saying "say it isn't so"
Shama-llama-lan Twist: Soarin crashed just outside the woods trying to practice a move that would impress RD, failed, and didn't want to go somewhere where his crush may get wind of him like Ponyville hospital, and his part in the story is as an emotional crutch for RD who had a thing for Pinkie who now spurns advances for a bit while she's recovering. The villain, meanwhile, is being eaten by an manticore.
soarin?
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Soarin
NOPENOPENOPENOPENOPENOPENOPENOPE.
Soarin? What. The. Fuck?!
Lolwut
Sir, you've managed to hit me in the feels where every other sad story failed to. This hurt to read.
Favs and upvotes, despite the horrifying grammar. I shall offer a proper TWE review if you wish.
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Precisely effectively fifty what.
My face when I have no face because I am in space.
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Dam you took my idea
1516535 take a wild fucking guess...
Write more. This story is great!
Any plans of updating this soon? It's very good.
no no no no no no no No. Just NO! Fuck to the no!
1778216 nah i say scootaloo because she is the right age for it
Wounderbolts? What?
I saw the "Mature - Sex" marker and the "Dark" tag, and expected to sit down to a nice little rape-clopfic.
What I find instead... is a masterpiece.
I had seen so many clichéd stories where rape = love, or the character just "got over it", that the concept of it being a serious trauma had almost become alien to me.
But the emotions in this story are so real. I'll definitely be keeping an eye on this.
That's it. Its the basement for Soarin
I still want to brutally murder the rapist, be it Soarin' or not.
dat plot twist do...