When Twilight's Friendship Map summons Flurry Heart away on an adventure, she brings spike along to help her understand what it means to be the princess of sex
Oh boy... poor Spike is gonna be in so much trouble when they get back. Flurry's gonna blurt out that Spike taught her about her cutie mark and Cadance is gonna have herself a new dragon skin rug.
11382713 No thank you. Creative and literary criticism is appreciated, but after seeing the response to the posted chapter, I have formed an outline for the rest of the story
11382741 Only if they find out. Also, let's be honest, cadence wouldn't mind too much. Princess of love supports daughters love no matter what. Her daddy on the other hand...
11384527 I believe so. If you fucked your cousin would you call it incest? Otherwise, it's just implied incest with shining, twilight, and cadence hooking up
11385003 It's a ship I haven't seen very much of which is a real shame. Future Flurry heart and spike could make a great couple, even if flurry isn't the princess of sex.
11383522 Don't let it get you down. There's a small group of people who downvote any stories with foalcon, but I say ignore them and do your damnedest to make the best story you can.
Can’t find the artist mentioned in the description on Derpibooru. I tried artist:Exelzior and no results were found. How about giving my numbers the pic is at like other people on this site do? Like 2854201 for example.
This is actually well written and has a nice pacing. I’m interested in reading more :3
Also, as others have said, don’t take the likes/dislikes seriously. Anything foalcon, incest, or Spike generally has a number of people whom innately (wrongfully) auto-dislike simply because it either “doesn’t interest”, “is sinful/immoral”, or “is annoying/shameful” to them… the like/dislike meter is a very bad thing to consider a measure of your own worth.
1- 14 years old is a crime!!!!! 2- Spike has wings 3- 14 years is a crime!!!!! 4- make her 21 years old, and Spike is already the size of an alicorn 5 - criminal history
Flurry perked up at the mention of the map. “Wait, does this mean I’m gonna go on an adventure like you used to? All by myself?”
“Not all by yourself missy. You’ll have a detachment of guards-”
“Yep, all by yourself. No guards are necessary.” Twilight cut off her older brother as she gave him a harsh look. “The map is calling you, so you have to go.”
Shining gave her a dirty look right back, as the siblings wordlessly fought. “She’s my daughter, and I’m guard captain. She’s going with the guards.”
“I was actually called by the map before. I know what’s best.”
The two stood at a stand still until Cadence came to Twilight’s side. “I think we should listen to her. She is one of the elements of harmony after all.”
Wow. Twilight is really demeaning and rude to Shining in this chapter, not to mention really presumptuous and arrogant. I mean, telling someone else what to do with their own kid? I mean come on. This is really out of character for the Princess of "Friendship."
And Cadance, wow. Way to not support your husband at all. What happened to "a united front?"
I know there wouldn't be a story if the guards went with her, but really? Supposedly, the guards are battle trained members of the military, and would be much better escorts than Spike, who is just a comedic relief who happened to follow along with Twilight on her previous adventures.
11505047 I wholeheartedly disagree, this is VERY in character for Twilight. While I understand Shining being protective of Flurry, the story makes it clear that he’s overdoing it. Also Twilight can be very engaged when it’s something regarding her specialty, in this case the sanctity of a friendship mission. Cadance understands this and isn’t necessarily choosing Twilight over Shining, as another Princess she’s encouraging Flurry to become more independent.
A very cute story and do need help with story ideas
Oh boy... poor Spike is gonna be in so much trouble when they get back. Flurry's gonna blurt out that Spike taught her about her cutie mark and Cadance is gonna have herself a new dragon skin rug.
Those interested in the full version of the cover pic should check out 2723718 (or alternates 2723719 and 2723720) on Derpi.
Since its a Pinkie Promise....
Why is this and it's comments getting negative bombed? It starts out rather well in my opinion.
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Idk, feels pretty bad for my first story, but it has fueled me to want to turn it in to a masterpiece
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No thank you. Creative and literary criticism is appreciated, but after seeing the response to the posted chapter, I have formed an outline for the rest of the story
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Only if they find out. Also, let's be honest, cadence wouldn't mind too much. Princess of love supports daughters love no matter what. Her daddy on the other hand...
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Pretty common for stories with fetish topics that are even a little controversial, such as foalcon.
looking forward to read it when it becomes complete
It’s a good start. I be watching.
Spike is adopted so should this count as incest?
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I believe so. If you fucked your cousin would you call it incest? Otherwise, it's just implied incest with shining, twilight, and cadence hooking up
I like the premise of the ship
Two immortals:
One, the heir to the throne of the Crystal Empire
The other, the hero who returned the crystal heart
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It's a ship I haven't seen very much of which is a real shame. Future Flurry heart and spike could make a great couple, even if flurry isn't the princess of sex.
11383522 Don't let it get you down. There's a small group of people who downvote any stories with foalcon, but I say ignore them and do your damnedest to make the best story you can.
Can’t find the artist mentioned in the description on Derpibooru. I tried artist:Exelzior and no results were found. How about giving my numbers the pic is at like other people on this site do? Like 2854201 for example.
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Alzrius posted the numbers in the comments already, but sure, I'll throw it in the description. 2723718
This is actually well written and has a nice pacing. I’m interested in reading more :3
Also, as others have said, don’t take the likes/dislikes seriously. Anything foalcon, incest, or Spike generally has a number of people whom innately (wrongfully) auto-dislike simply because it either “doesn’t interest”, “is sinful/immoral”, or “is annoying/shameful” to them… the like/dislike meter is a very bad thing to consider a measure of your own worth.
I'm not sure if '14 years' can be considered foalcon
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it is still underage though
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That is true, too bad that everything underage is catalogues as Loli/Foalcon
So when are you going to be able to post it next chapter?
When is the next chapter of this story going to be updated? Other readers and I really want to see what else happens.
1- 14 years old is a crime!!!!!
2- Spike has wings 3-
14 years is a crime!!!!!
4- make her 21 years old, and Spike is already the size of an alicorn
5 - criminal history
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If you don't like it, don't read it. this a fictional story set in a fictional world. You don't know the laws of that world
Wow. Twilight is really demeaning and rude to Shining in this chapter, not to mention really presumptuous and arrogant. I mean, telling someone else what to do with their own kid? I mean come on. This is really out of character for the Princess of "Friendship."
And Cadance, wow. Way to not support your husband at all. What happened to "a united front?"
I know there wouldn't be a story if the guards went with her, but really? Supposedly, the guards are battle trained members of the military, and would be much better escorts than Spike, who is just a comedic relief who happened to follow along with Twilight on her previous adventures.
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I wholeheartedly disagree, this is VERY in character for Twilight. While I understand Shining being protective of Flurry, the story makes it clear that he’s overdoing it. Also Twilight can be very engaged when it’s something regarding her specialty, in this case the sanctity of a friendship mission. Cadance understands this and isn’t necessarily choosing Twilight over Shining, as another Princess she’s encouraging Flurry to become more independent.