The Death of Equestria (Alicorn Transformation) *Twilight Romance*

by Windlife

THe ones you see on here are no good but i see them and they are not good but i see them

I punched a human in the legs (Humans have those now in my fanfiction that you are reading now. Before they had hooves like us but I changed it when I rleized they weren't as cool as legs. Humans in realisty actually came from horses and i think that's really cool) and he barked in anger.

Twilight throw a money puch and all the humans came up to collect the money and then I attacked with a magic beam and blew them away "BAAAMA"

tWILIGHT HUGGED MY AS WE FREED THE SLAVE POBNYS AND SAY "I LOVE YOU"

me too

me to...

Comments

[PearlyDoesStuff]

The drama in this comment section is an all you can eat buffet. 🍿

[Windlife]

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yes, the haters try very hard to bring me the down but whatever ikeep it up and not sot

[Lil Penpusher]

Of all the things on the internet, this is one of them. Gonna leave my mark to be able to say „yeah, I was there“ in a few years.

[kykkoman4]

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You
I like those words
They have been sent to my quote vault for safe keeping and later posting

[kykkoman4]

Now I'm gonna say this as gently as i know how
Please
Please
Take some English Classes
Like, go use Duolingo to learn English
Now, I haven't used the app myself, but i do believe that at least learning some grammar will make at least a few people like your story more
Like, i understand not wanting to be heavily criticized, i still tear up a little when my parents stare at me disapprovingly in silence, but if there's one thing that they got through to my skull, it's that you should at least feel bad and strive to improve.
I will admit that your idea is, well, a bit more unique than others.
However, your execution of it is subpar.
I'm not hating on you. I'm just saying that you should try to gain a more adequate grasp on the grammar of the English lexicon.
Speaking of ideas, i have one of my own that I'm still not quite to sure about. I would like to know if it's something that you would read.
Its a crossover fic with sonic underground.
It came to me will listening to the SU theme for like the 50-80th time in a row.
It just makes sense to me. I'm not to sure on what the third triplet should be, but hear me out okay? Dr. Robotnik could totally be replaced with Discord. Instead of roboticize it could be Discordinate. The dead beat mother of a queen could be Lauren Faust, cause, as far as i understand, she was the queen of like equestria until some bad mojo Jojo happened. Celly and Luna are a unicorn and pegasus, respectively. Luna would be sonic, cause i think she makes a better sonic than Celly, and Celly would be Sonia. The third is definitely going to be an earthpony, i just don't know what gender they should be and what to name them. Since Sonic Underground takes place in a mostly conquered Mobius, it only makes sense to have the story take place during the time before they find the orbital friendship laser cannon and ascend into alicorns. Ooo, i could have it so that the already have 3 of the elements, instead of those wierd music amulets, or, maybe have the moment Sonic and co. be when they get their cutie marks. That would be interesting, i believe.
Unfortunately, I'm afraid I'm not as confident as you are to write out this, in my humble opinion, great idea of mine.
Please tell me your honest opinion on my idea, i would greatly appreciate it.

[kykkoman4]

Imma sleep now, I'll check for your response in like at most six hours

[Windlife]

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did not read that i do not read hater stuff go away

[Windlife]

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also you have no story okay? so you have no trust to make claim that im bad when i went through havard for english

[Windlife]

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Jesus Christ, press enter more than once when spacing out your paragraphs.

It's.

Not.

Hard.