The heavy metal door clanked shut behind Death Mare. He leaned back on the bars for a brief moment - a lit, half gone cigarette still hung loosely from his lips. The room was sparse, outfitted with nothing but a steel framed bed with straw cushioning, a grimy toilet missing its lid, and a dim light-bulb hanging from its thin wire above him. Opposite from Death Mare, a few feet above him, was a window, and he closed his eyes as cold air from the outside world streamed in, caressing his cheek like a kiss from a dead, forgotten specter. Soon, a beam of light from a distant watchtower rushed through the bars separating him from the outside world, illuminating his cell for a moment before passing completely - once again leaving the daunting task of light-bearer to the lone, dangling bulb.
It had only been a few hours since they got him, stirred from a reacquiring nightmare as the sound of pounding hooves shook his front door. He had dreamt of this moment - about the things he'd do when the time finally came - but could only wipe his face of sweat with a hoof before groggily forcing himself out of bed, shuffling himself toward the door with a sort of bored, melancholy malaise.
In his dreams they had pistols or clubs. In his dream they were earth ponies, dressed in the black suits of "The Party." Sometimes they were already by his bed, beating him senselessly as he begged them to stop.
That cover art... If i had her as my OC I would call her Chrysapocalypse
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Thank you so much! Make sure to read all my storys and join my group to make sure to ead more of my work and make sure to not interact with trolls
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Thanks for the recommendation also, being a troll is not my thing
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okay please
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It’s not trolling if it’s hundreds of people telling you this, please listen to them you’ve been on this site since 2014 yet the stories are all downvoted.I’m stating a fact that you need to shape up the way you do things or your stories will continue to get downvoted
Huh. To be honest this isn't really bad compared to the other chapters where it looks like you slammed your fist on a keyboard and called it a day lol
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None of the chapters are beautiful. They're disgusting and not making any sense.
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I agree.
Not gonna lie, this is the most shit story I ever read, the grammar is just random and not making any sense. Also who cares if people have fewer followers? One day they'll have more followers than you. And also you need to fix some words in your story like "You need to say the magic words!" It sounds cringy.
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10 followers
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i will not listen to trolls
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At least I'm not stupid and not listening to people who are trying to help you.
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please stop commenting or you will be the banned from my storys thank you!
NO TROLLS CAN NAME A SINGLE THING WRONG WITH THE STORY. NOT ONE. IF YOU WANT TO MAKE FUN OF THE STORY YOU HAVE TO GIVE ME A REASON OR YOU WILL BE DELETED! THANK YOU!