"I got something perfect to guarantee Sunset's safety," Twilight announced with excitement tingling in her veins.
The girls were gathered in front of the CHS building. It has only been a day since the girls, minus Sunset, declared to make sure Sunset was never in harm's way again. Ever again. Not again. They even used extreme measures if they wanted to be super sure whether Sunset is safe. That also means no one should leave Sunset by herself, no matter what it is.
Sunset was tiring of their "mothering" and "protective" behavior a while back when she was constantly getting kidnapped by the Dazzlings. Sure, she understands why they're doing this and why they are acting this way, but this is getting out of hand. And every time Sunset tries to reason with them, the girls silenced her, calling her names that a parent would call their daughters, and every time she tries to argue with them, they always told her off with a strict tone. Well, if Sunset had not been kidnapped so many times, she wouldn't be in this situation right now.
So Sunset tries to reason with them once more. "Girls, I understand you're worried but-"
Rarity waved it off. "Oh, no, no, no, no, darling," she fretted. "Ever since the first attempt they kidnapped you, we were worried sick! It gets worse every time they kidnapped you again, and again, and again! Our efforts in keeping you safe remained fruitless no matter what we do!"
Sunset just simply shrug. "Well, they'll never get information out of me no matter what they do."
Applejack stepped forward. "But it ain't good enough," she objected. "They kidnapped yah for like, fifty-five times already. It seems like we're not doing good enough to protect yah! But this time, we're gonna try even harder, even if it means we should never, ever, leave by yer side until we deemed yer are safe."
Sunset let out an annoyed sigh. "And again, girls, I am fine. Really, I am-"
But Pinkie let out a finger to her lips. "Nope! You are not fine!" She countered. "We just need to be super, duper sure that you're extra safe!" She spread a wide grin on her face.
Twilight cleared her throat to get reclaim their attention. "As I was saying," she continued. "I got us something perfect to guarantee her safety. And this is something that I've been working on." She dig her hand into her skirt pocket and brought out a small plastic rubber, she threw to the ground next to the Wondercolt Statue and next thing she knew, the small plastic rubber formed into a giant sphere that they can easily see through it.
The girls even Sunset are astonished at Twilight's latest project, while she on the other hand, formed a confident smirk across her lips.
"This right here is the Super Sphere 2.0," Twilight introduced it to them. "It's bouncy, and it's made out of rubber, but, this thing can protect Sunset. No one is taking her away if she's in this thing!" She gaze over to the redhead. "Now, Sunset, I want you to step inside of the sphere, please?"
Sunset can't help but started to giggle. "I mean, if you want to protect me so badly, are you even sure is perfectly safe? For me?"
Twilight scowled. "Yes, yes it does," she replied with a stern tone. "I worked very hard for this, and for you." She pointed at her. "So please, be a good dear and step in the sphere?"
Sunset just shrug. She can't help but see how utterly ridiculous Twilight's idea is, so without a word, she just steps in and Twilight zips the ball.
"Okay," Twilight said smiling. "Now that you're fully secure, we shall make our way to our classes."
So Sunset just nodded and went in first. This was a bad idea, but if she can't reason with her friends, then maybe being in this sphere can show them why it's so ridiculous in the first place. But actually, maybe being in this sphere is not a bad thing to her at all, even though it's so ridiculous.
But attending school in a hamster ball (Rainbow Dash) calls it, seems a good idea to the girls, a ridiculous idea to Sunset, but an odd situation to the rest of the student body. Well, breaking school property on accident is one of those problems with the ball, even if Rarity is to generous enough to cover for her. As much as Sunset is concern, reasoning with her friends out of this is still not an option. At least they're fair enough to let her out of the ball to use the restrooms, and when it's lunch period.
But other than that, the hamster ball seems fun for Sunset since it's bouncy and all.
At least it couldn't get any worse during soccer practice.
"Gilda, cross!" Rainbow called out, running towards to the goal with Lightning Dust.
Gilda dribbled the ball past a few cones on the left wing of the pitch. She gaze over to the two strikers running for the box, she kicked it high to their direction. Both Lightning and Rainbow readied themselves for the pass, if either of them gets the ball.
However, both were knocked off by the sudden impact of the hamster ball, Sunset bounced herself in the ball and leaped, bouncing the soccer ball all the way to the goal net.
Rainbow and Lightning quickly picked themselves up as Sunset went to them. "I'm so sorry about that," she apologized. "Are you two alright."
Lightning scowls at her. "Yeah, no thanks to you."
Rainbow shrugged. "Eh, no big deal. If we perform like that, then Crystal Prep won't stand a chance."
Lightning snorted. "How do you expect us to play properly with Shimmer in the hamster ball, captain?" She sneered at her.
Rainbow gave her a scowl for that sneer. "We will think of something. Trust me."
Gilda rolled her eyes as she regrouped with them. "Yeah, and everyone's gonna ask questions why one of our strikers is in a "hamster" ball." She scoffed.
Rainbow placed her hands on her hips and gave her a glare. "Look, if you don't want that, then you can sit on the bench for all I care."
Lightning let out a groaned. "But why?" She complained. "Why do we need our striker to be in a "hamster" ball without telling us? Are you, like, obsessed with her or something?"
Rainbow stomped like an immature child. "Hey! I'm just protecting a friend here!" She growled.
Not wanting this to escalate further, Sunset went forward to defuse the situation but failed to realize that she's still in the hamster ball, thus knocking Rainbow to the ground on accident. Again.
Sunset winced at hurting her friend again. "Sorry, Dash!" She immediately apologized.
Dash picked herself again and dusted herself off. "It's okay, Sunset," she replied, turning to the redhead. "Why don't you just wait by the goalpost and let deal with them?"
Sunset looked at her with hesitate in her eyes. "Are you sure?"
She nodded in return. "You had to take crap from Lightning and Gilda because you're in the hamster ball, and it's not right. So please, let me handle them."
Sunset took a moment to think about it, until she hesitantly nodded. "Okay..." she whispered.
Rainbow smiled. "Don't worry too much, just have fun with the hamster ball or something." She encouraged.
Sunset complied without question, when she's already by the goalpost, Rainbow turned back to her teammates with a scowl. "You two better chill out, my friends and I got it under control."
Lightning gave a sarcastic chuckle. "Really? You and your friends literally put Shimmer in a ball, made her attend school with that thing, broke some stuff, ignoring our pleas to take that thing away, and you still have the nerve to keep her in that thing for practice?"
Rainbow fumed, her egoistic teammate's giving her the nerves. "Like I said, we got it under control."
Meanwhile with Sunset, trusting her friend that she handled it, she observed the sphere she's inside of. While she had some guilt for damaging school property and had Rarity to cover for her, this hamster ball was still ridiculous to an extent and yet, it seems kind of... fun for her. It's soft, bouncy, and just as soft as Adagio's breasts.
With the desire of fun driving, she decides to take a few bounces with the sphere, and yeah, it is bouncy. And hopefully as soft as breasts, Adagio's most likely.
While Rainbow and the others are oblivious with Sunset's antics with the ball, Sunset bounced high and even on the goalpost, after taking a few bounces, she leaped over the small fence and to the edge of the parking lot, she needed a break from her overprotective friends every once in a while of course. As long as she doesn't take long for them to realize she's gone.
After taking a minute, bouncing with the hamster ball, she stopped for a breather and think, getting kidnapped for fifty-five times to the point she doesn't care anymore, not that she doesn't care if her home world was at stake if she ever squeal, of course she won't, it's just that their goal in kidnapping her repeatedly was getting old, boring, very quick. And as for her friends, they get crazier and paranoid every time she got kidnapped, and their efforts in protecting her were always fruitless, and she gave up trying to reason with them but instead, went along with to make them see that this hamster ball was a bad idea, even though it seemed fun to herself.
Speaking of fun, looking back now, every time her friends were "protective" of her and "babying" her, she always felt this feeling, something unnatural and yet, not so bad at all that she acted it out, thus fueling the girls' "motherly" attitude towards her. This feeling that tingled, making her somewhat childish to take their overprotective ways seriously. She can't point a finger to it but if she took a guess, maybe it's because she had a rough childhood back in Equestria, especially with Princess Celestia even though she enjoyed magic but had no friends at the time. So maybe her inner child was trying to break free from all this time? The more she looked back those times her friends were overprotective of her, and the times she responded with silly behaviors, the more it makes sense to her why she's acting this way.
But before she decided to go back, she heard sounds of boots clasping on the concrete, added with a devilish chuckle. Sunset groaned in annoyed, knowing who exactly had come for her.
"It seems my suspicious are correct, you are rolling in a hamster ball," A voice behind her taunted.
Sunset turned around with an annoyed glare. "When will you give this up, Adagio? It's getting old, and boring, very quickly."
Adagio let out a faux chuckle. "Oh please, we will never give up. Our only way in to Equestria is you," she pointed at her.
Sunset crossed her arms over her chest. "Well what are you gonna do about it?" She dared to ask. "I mean, how can you get me? I'm in this "hamster" ball after all."
Adagio gave her a devilish smirk. "Oh really? You think that's more than enough to keep you safe?"
Sunset blinked for a few moments. "I mean, Twilight said this guarantee for my "safety" even this seems silly, I don't seem to care. Except for damaging school property on accident even though Rarity covered for me."
"Okay, enough with the chit-chat, Shimmer," Adagio said with a hint of blunt in her tone. "I'm taking you away again."
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Sunset found herself being pushed away from the building by Adagio, with the lead siren pushing and kicking the hamster ball to make it quick, even Sunset never bothered to flinch with each push and kick. She just stayed still, with her arms crossed and remained numb to this situation.
"This is stupid." She muttered.
Adagio caught up with her. "This is too easy." She bragged, giving her another hard kick, sending her another good distance from the school. And catching up with her again. "Your friends made this way too easy for us to get you again."
Sunset rolled her eyes. "Like I know you'll fail again." She said with a tired tone.
Just as Adagio continued pushing Sunset to their van, there are three freshmen from across street, they witnessed of what's going. And terror soon filled in their veins when they saw one certain girl who they thought they'll never see again, and especially the situation Sunset was in.
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"I hope I made it clear this time and I don't have to repeat it," Rainbow grumbled.
Lightning Dust and Gilda groaned in annoyed, giving up to get their captain to see reason.
Lightning held her hands up and spoke with a calm tone. "Alright, captain, fine. But just so you know, all of that will bite you back in the butt, big time."
Rainbow sighed. "Let's just go back to practice."
But before they do, the rest of the Rainbooms showed up. Rainbow noticed them and greeted with a smile on her face.
"Oh, hey guys! You here to see us practice?"
Rarity offered her with a smile. "Oh sure, and we're also here to keep on Sunny."
"And I'm the only one who knew the password of the sphere," Twilight added. "If she needs to use the restrooms, I'm here."
"Anyway," AJ said. "It seems that the three of yah had some sort of argument, care to explain what's going on?"
But before the three Wondercolt players to explain the issue, their heard cries for help. Knowing it's the voices of the CMC, and trusting their instincts, Rainbow, Rarity, and Applejack rushed over to the three girls panting and drenching sweat by the goalpost, they've must ran all the way here.
"What is the matter, girls?!" Rarity fretted, checking over her sister while the others do the same.
But Apple Bloom answered it for after she gasped for one long breath and blurted out in a rapid pace; "It's one of those sirens again from The Battle of the Bands and she's taking Sunset away!!"
The news send them to deep shock and terror. Horrified for Sunset, they once again failed to protect her. Their recoiled in realization of the last person who was suppose to keep on her, and all eyes turned to the Wondercolt captain.
Rainbow hit her head in frustration. "I'm such an idiot! I'm supposed to look out for her!"
AJ narrowed her eyes at Dash. "Dangit, Dash! Yah got one job! This ain't putting a smile on my face!"
"But wait!" Pinkie intervened. "If the Dazzlings just took Sunset, then that means it's not too late. We can still save her!"
"They went that way and they shouldn't be that far!" Scootalo guided them, pointing the direction where they came from.
And before the CMC knew, the girls rushed to where Scootalo pointed. And all of them shouted, "SUNSET! WE'RE COMING!!"
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"Aria! Sonata! Is the bus ready?!" Adagio called to them, slowly pushing Sunset to the parked van by the corner of the street.
Sonata popped out from the window of the driver's seat. "We're ready, Adagio!"
Adagio let out a sinister chuckle. "Good, now, Sunny honey, I hope you buckle up your seatbelt for a ride back to our house."
Sunset just rolled her eyes. "Great..."
But just as they're about to get her in the van (or bus), somehow, they heard loud voices incoming. They turned back only to see the Rainbooms running after them, seeing them coming for them send shivers in their spines and making them panic.
In panic, Adagio frantically find the zipper of the ball. "Quick! Let's get her out of this thing and stuff her in the bus!"
"HANG IN THERE, SUNSET!" Twilight's voice boomed as they're getting closer.
Both Adagio and Aria yanked the zipper but to no luck. "Why we can't unzip this thing?!" Aria growled.
Sunset just shrug. "Well, only Twilight knows the password. She told me to look away when she input it."
"STOP RIGHT THERE, YOU MEANIES!" Pinkie Pie screamed, they're closing in alright.
"Oh, forget it! Let's just stuff her in the bus!" Adagio instructed her.
"With the hamster ball?!" Aria replied back.
"Just do it!" She shouted. "And Sonata, start the bus already!"
Sonata buckled her seatbelt. "You got it!"
So they pushed the "hamster" ball into the van as hard as they can to a fruitless effort, but they kept going.
"THEY'RE GETTING AWAY! AJ shouted. "QUICK, STOP THEM!"
Sonata just realized something that made her dead nervous. "Uhm, girls," she spoke with hesitate in her voice. "I.. kind of... lost the keys..."
Aria's eyes shot at her. "You WHAT?!"
Sonata gulped, sweats begin to fall from her head. "I'm so sorry..."
"WE'RE ALMOST, THERE, SWEETIE! JUST HANG ON!" Rainbow shouted from a distance.
"Well, that's just great, Sonata!" Adagio growled, her eyes were filled with anger. "Now we once again, failed to kidnap Sunset Shimmer and get information to take over Equestria!"
And suddenly, the Rainbooms appeared behind her. "Hold it right there!" Applejack halted, stopping them dead in their tracks.
The Rainbooms had caught them, their blood boiled once again. How dare they attempt to kidnap Sunset again?! Deadly glares shot at the Dazzlings, clenching their fists together in a complete tightness. The sirens never dared to move now that they're outnumbered.
"I think you got someone that belongs to us," Twilight spat at them, her gaze remained deadly as she could muster.
The van couldn't handle the size of the hamster basl, and thus bouncing Sunset off of the van and soured over her friends and she landed smoothly on the concrete.
"Sunset!" The girls exclaimed, rushing towards her. Twilight typed the password to unlock the ball and let Sunset out. And soon, she was met with a warm embraced and cries from her friends.
"We're so sorry, we didn't do well enough to protect you!" Fluttershy cried.
"I'm the one who should be sorry!" Rainbow added with a sob. "You and I had practice together, and I told you to wait for me as I spoke to Lightning and Gilda! I'm so sorry, Sunset! Please don't be mad!"
As much as Sunset never felt being danger for getting kidnapped so many times, she hated to see her friends cried like this, and it makes her feel sad too.
"Look, girls," she spoke, making them stop, and letting go of them. "I understand but you are not the blame here, well-"
"Well nothing, darling!" Rarity interrupted her, putting a finger on her lips to silence her. "We promise, we will do better this time around!"
Pinkie nodded, wiping away her tears. "We will do super, duper, and extra duper, better to keep you safe, Sunny!" She added with a worried look. "We promise!!"
AJ gently took her hands. "At least yer okay! Thank goodness!" She sighed in relief. "As they said, we promise it won't happen again!"
"I appreciate it, girls, but-"
"Say no more, Sunset!" Twilight immediately spoke. "Just say no more, I think it's time for us to return to school before the teachers catches us skipping class in the next few minutes."
"But first, let's deal with the Dazzlings," Rainbow declared as she turned around but to find them gone already. "Hey, where did they go?"
Pinkie adverted her gaze to her left and spotted them. "Oh! There they are!"
The Dazzlings are seen pushing the van from the back and the all the way to their house.
"You prevailed, this time, Shimmer," Adagio grunted. "But next time, we will get you..."
How many chapters are you planning, cause so far this is getting good, silly and funny at the same time.
I'm afraid I can't stomach this story. It isn't the idea of a joke fic it's mainly your execution of it. The girls taking this whole mother thing to the point of even talking down and threatened to grown her gets on my nerves, especially with this gem.
Says the girls taking their attempts to the point that can only be common in cartoons and refuse to see how they are taking it too far and the worst part is they refuse to see the error of their ways.
Gotta love how Celestia and the teachers don't put their foot down and make them remove the ball no just scold her and despite the harm their attempts caused the girls refused to take it off. Another thing is the dazzlings really going to strike during school with witnesses, instead of when Sunset is out alone? Joke fic or not there is only so much of my disbelieve i can suspend.
More victim blaming. Their way to help backfired and put her in actual danger and instead of taking responsibility the girls blame her and have the nerve to ground her despite not having the authority. I wish you luck, but this story so far doesn't seem to be for me.
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Ooh, about that. I guess I got so excited with my ideas, I had too much fun writing this chapter. Forgive me if it doesn't sound so comedic like what I'm aiming for. I'll do better next time I hope.
Sunset, Rainbow Dash and the CHS team were the only ones at the football field during practice, Adagio goes in alone just so she won't attract attention from other schoolmates.
About Celestia and the teachers, for comedic reasons, I should say.
Again, I know where you're coming from but the girls got way too paranoid over Sunset's safety, even though Rainbow Dash saves her, Sunset being in that situation just feeds their paranoia even more. They're too scared of more bad things may happen to Sunset, I'm not justified of what I made the girls to act that way but again, it's my story, I can see them being this paranoid if something like this happens to Sunset many times, such as getting kidnapped a lot.
Again, this is my say, if you're already given up this story, I sincerely understand. Have a nice day.
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Yes, there will be some more. Stay tuned.
Are the girls under a spell, are they actting like total nimrods because of magic?
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None, because since Sunset got kidnapped so many times by the Dazzlings, the girls grew paranoid and tried extreme measures to ensure her safety without realizing their own actions may have consequences.
And the situation Sunset got in this chapter (no thanks to Adagio) it only feeds their paranoia even more.
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The issue is them calling her those demeaning pet names just comes out of the blue. Even comedy and humor has to follow logic. Just having something happen out of the blue doesn't automatically make it funny. You are going for them being paranoid about her safety, but it doesn't quite explain them all of the sudden acting and taking their mother act all the way to 99 and breaking the knob. To the point that despite being around the same age, they are acting like being months older than her, justifies this and Twilight the one who's supposed to know better acts like it's logical and even scolds Sunset. That is what set me off.
Speaking personally if they haven't appeared or were mentioned I should say I still would have questioned them not somehow being aware or doing anything about it but would have shrugged it off due to this being a comedy fic, but you mentioning them makes it more justified for me to questioned that, especially since the Rainbooms were able to ignore orders from teachers to remove it, without getting in trouble.
You can still have that by having them take responsibility and end the chapter with a huge parental type hug where the girls crying apologize for their failure and that their next attempt will work better. Sunset tries to get them to stop, but as usual gets silenced and the girls go all mom and promise her, they will do better. You can still have them take responsibility while fueling their paranoia. Whatever you decide to do promise me someone will call them out on their shit, and they actually learn in the end. Promise me that and I might try to stick around.
Another thing I am curious about. What if Sunset didn't manage to escape from the ball, would the girls still find a way to pin it on her or would they since there's no excuse actually accept responsibility?
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Well, just as the storm comes in, Adagio kicked Sunset away to the tornado, of course Sunset would tell that to her friends.
But the part where she managed to escape the ball and nearly fell to her death because of it got the girls scared even more, and yeah, saying she's too reckless to be alone again.
Well, either way, they'd still take extreme measures for Sunset's safety.
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You're right, I'll do better next time. You'll see. I can think of something. Hopefully.
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so, no? Just to be clear.
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If Sunset had not escape her "hamster" ball, then they won't pin the blame on her. Especially Rainbow Dash did the "saving the day" action in this chapter.
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Face palm. You do realize it makes it sound like they never going to get better right?
They sound like some Helicopter parents, only thing worst be Entitled Helicopter parents.
Already pushing it with Apple Jack grounding Sunset, that just getting creepy.
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If I may make a suggestion. Maybe have Sunset actually able to get a word in edgewise and make jokes and sarcastic statements pointing out how stupid it all is. I just find it odd that Sunset is unable to fight back. I'm not asking to the point that ruins the plot but make her more rebellious towards the girls. Is this really the same girl that somehow was able to control an entire school with fear, not that she would do so again, but it's actually head scratching that the others are able to cow her to being even unable to argue one iota. The only time she did was to make another boob joke. There needs to be more of that in the future.
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If that wasn't enough, I explained that a little of the girl's sudden motherly act at the early part of this chapter, how about if I can make it bit clear? Their paranoia also makes them act like overprotective parent figures. Sorry if I hadn't make that pretty clear.
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Ok why? Why didn't it simply make them act like overprotective friends. Why did it make them decide to take it a step further to the creepy motherly realm, for lack of a better term? I still stand by it coming out of the blue.
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Uhm, because I find it interesting if they all like act "moms" to Sunset. Overprotective moms, but that's gonna get a bit better in the next update.
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Yeah, sure, I'll keep that in mind.
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They will get better soon, I can still have them act all motherly towards Sunset but maybe tone it down for a bit to make this story better.
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Ok that's the out of universe reason. The in-universe reason, their paranoia is a weak explanation and I still stand by it coming out of the blue. Glad to hear you are going to improve on it, I hope you take my suggestions, as this story has potential, but this chapter's way of doing it, is just sickening. Which actually surprised me, since the introduction chapter is perfectly fine. I will see what the punishment chapter is like and decide if the changes are good enough for me to keep reading.
I think at to early for mommy jokes
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What?
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Please do, while I know this story suppose to be comical, I'm sure you not going for full Parody right?
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Well, I think it is too early for the girls to start acting like Sunset's mother
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I know it may sound a weak excuse but their paranoia got the better of them.
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Ok
I just realized something. Why did Adagio push Sunset into danger, instead of kidnapping her, which she would have easily been able to do. It seems stupid of her to do that to the only person with knowledge she wants. The only thing I can think of is it would have led to the girls realizing they went too far, managed to do the opposite of what they set out to do, and we clearly can't have that, apparently.
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Well, if she wants to kidnapped her again, then Adagio has to drag Sunset out of the hamster ball which she can't because Twilight set up a "passcode", and pushing/kicking her is not gonna since Sunset is going bounce away from her.
It's sweet revenge. Even if she can never get what she what, Adagio kicked Sunset to danger as revenge for making her fail miserably in her past kidnapping attempts against Sunset, Sunset refusing to tell her where the portal is, and lastly for checking her out not long after they captured Sunset. Also, she knew that Sunset will be saved eventually, so there's that.
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No, she doesn't. she could have easily casually push her away and while the ball would have protected her from harm it would have prevented her from escaping, I mean she couldn't do anything about the one kick she did, so how would she be able to stop her pushing her away to kidnap her. Sorry I disagree with that.
Still stupid of her to do that, but whatever
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Well, then, we can say anyone who recognizes Adagio can notice that if she takes her time kicking/pushing Sunset. It may take her some time.
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Yeah, so? It wouldn't be dumber than what she actually did, and the girls would still learn their lesson that their first attempt backfired. Not to mention if you wanted you could have written her managing to kidnap sunset this way without getting caught, so that's a moot point that doesn't matter.
Me: (Reads the first chapter) Okay. This looks promising. I’ll give it a try.
Me: (Reads the second chapter) I’ll pass.
I suppose my biggest detractor would be the very, very OOC humor of this story. No one is behaving as they should; they’re all being immature children. Sunset herself seems to have lost her spine and confidence overnight, because no way in Tartarus is Sunset Shimmer allowing anyone to treat her like this. And the rest of the Rainbooms? Well... There’s a clear difference between being overly protective and being downright condescending. They’re babying her and calling her names like she’s six. And a hamster ball, really? Twilight, the local well-read scientific genius, not only came up with this idea, but thought it was a good one?
Yeah, no.
I know your description said to expect motherly girls and a childish Sunset, but this is a little excessive. For this reason, I’m afraid I will not be reading this story further. That does not mean you should stop writing it, however. You do you. All the best, MASTERMIND360.
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Thanks for the lecture. To be fair, I tried to make it a little bit better in the next few chapters.
Not long ago, I made my recent chapter but I unpublished it and it was currently being altered for a reason.
I mean, you haven't try to see Sunset's childish side unless you already did and I might mistaken you never read it.
Rainbow: Huh that's something I would hear you say Pinkie
Pinkie: Well I feel the same.
Bonus points if you get that reference.
Much better though what are you going to do about the punishment chapter since she didn't get "grounded here" Just going to remove it?
Edit: Also you removed the breast joke jab against mommy Twily. Shame on you
note this is a joke.
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Maybe I should remove the punishment chapter or rewrite it. But anyway, that can wait.