She appeared as if from nowhere, a dark shadowed figure full of dread magic. Shining Armor and Cadance scowled with apprehension, but her attention was on the _other_ shadowy overlord that stood before her. Only one could remain.
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Why do think that Sombra did something very stupid and now he has a new enemy to deal with.
Well, that link is gonna get awkward real fast. xD
I also look forward to Twilight figuring out there's a friendly dark magic-user within talking distance. She's going to have... so... many... questions.
Veeeeeery interesting!! I look forward to more!
She'd organize the whole thing for fun.
This fic is so cute!
I have a feeling whatever fate that brought Umbra here are trying to ship a threesome between them. Are you certain we don't need any of the mature tags here just in case?
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And when she realizes that the dark magic user barely knows how magic works, let alone how dark magic works, she'd be extremely frustrated and starts to either find answers or go Twileynanas.
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What a very interesting story, I'm giving you six stars for doing a good job. ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐
You have a solid concept, but you need to have a proof reader as translation doesn't always work well.
For example
should be "So he has a sister?"
The only other thing I could recommend is being more descriptive when setting the scene & how the things around them are
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This is, as they call it in the biz, a typo.
I only speak English. I don't promise it's always accurate, but I can't blame that.
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I think I had a brain fart. No idea why I thought you were Russian XD
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No harm done, and any typo reported is a dead typo.
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Great story and happy to see you writing again. Ignore me if you never stopped and my brain broke lol
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The words flow without end! Well, I mean, people are paying for these words, and I do not let them down!
Ah OK I see now, transgender male who wishes to be female.... well, definitely got their wish in that case, though not in the way they expected I assume heh.
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This is a story about becoming/being comfortable in your skin (or pelt).
Your sentence structure is very.... Jarring.
I don't know how to describe the problem. Reads like someone who learned a different languages sentence structure wrote it.
Have you tried getting an editor to look for your work?
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I can only act on reported typos. That they are present is a known quality.
I quite like the…directness of the Great Sandy one’s name in Australia, but I hear the Gobi is very nice.
You Better Be God Damn Right About That!
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https://www.allrecipes.com/recipe/232890/caramel-apple-ice-cream/
I was gonna mention something about that but Cadence beat me to it. XD
Ya know, i'm pretty sure we never actually get an outright explanation for exactly what the deal with the three way sensory thing is, though I think that the Hear gave it to them for some unknown reason. It'll probably be important later
Great start, nice to see Umbra getting friends in her new life.
Sooo... Next Snu-Snu will be interessting ♡
Being the male and female at the same time...
Umbra will love their lovemaking ♡